A Crack in The Wall Ch. 01

good work

I like it a lot but you had a few spelling and grammar errors. I don't know if you're super concerned with stuff like that this early in the draft phase, but those things do make it easier for us to read. Nice sex scenes btw. I'm looking forward to the rest.

The biggest thing for me,

And I'm usually not the type to nitpick, I usually overlook little things like this, but it's just tongue versus tung and follow versus fallow that kind of detracted from the overall enjoyment of the story

An amazing story ...

... but its spelt tongue not tung

Yeah...normally I just read over errors like spelling...but for some reason it REALLY bothered me Tongue and Follow (Tung and Fallow)

Loving the direction of this story!!!!!

This is a very promising story, I almost hated 4 it 2 end but can't wait 4 u 2 add 2 it. I love and am addicted to romance novels especially historical romances but recently found my heart (and my pussy) beat just 4 paranormals and this is a story I would class as such!!;) Please don't take too long!:)

rawr

This is a pretty good start to your story. I liked the set up the characters, and the interaction between Maria and Brandon, it was quite exciting. You create quite the suspence, I wasn't expecting them to go to a graveyard. It makes me want to try that myself. Hehe :). I hope you post more chapters, I want to know what happens next!

Editing

Great story but you could use grammar and spell check. I look forward to the next chapter!

Great start!

Wonderful job. Enjoyable and well written.