All Comments on 'Earthy Grocery Store Clerk'

Good story, well written, except... gross adjective overuse. After the first couple of times, we don't need to hear "mature" with every description... would have rated the story higher but for that; also, why did she sit on her coach? Just kidding, an easy typo. BTW 45 is not THAT mature.

"Mature" - I don't want to read anything else in Mature tonight for sure. I did not bother to count the times but you way over used that word. Could of been a longer story and lead into a short relationship if you had left out the 100 "matures" and it would have been a much better story. Keep trying - it is the only way to learn.!!

once you established the fact that she is mature you dont need to keeo repeating time after time we got the point the first time otherwise a good story

yes over use of mature, but have to say really enjoyed it and look forward to reading more of your work, keep it up you will be a pro real soon

"I want MORE".

Then I realised that the next would be more of the same. No need for more.

Thank you.

Yes I would like to read more, maybe about some fun in the store or when they go out around town...

Keep up the good work

Her soft warm ass has soft long hairs