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Too Short
Like it, but it was way too short. Story seems rushed.
You could have went into detail what happened the two months Ashira was with her kidnapper.
A bit late,
And a bit obvious. Much better structured chapters. Avoid 3 hours later and such refs at all costs. Otherwise a fine bit of thriller and Love story writing. . . Sexy? No. Saucy? No. Passionate? Well; never. I think you get my point. Literotica... If u have a vivid imagination.
good stories ashira
just because the site is called literotica. doesnt mean every story there has to consist of a hurricane of random sexual gestures and urges. besides those people that call themselves authors. that think an erotic story is just a bunch of words thrown together that basically start to repeat themselves is just bullshit. i like a well put together story its much better than some tom dick and harry did something in this room then did that in the other room. it gets old is all im saying. anyway i hope mr/ms/mrs anonymous can understand that.
Grr
Imreally glad mark is fake cuz I kinda wanna kill him. Fucking duche
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