All Comments on 'Carpi Diem'

Too clinical, not enough romance or sensuality. Please rewrite, with an eye towards spicing things up. Read a little of Delta of Venus, you will see what I mean. "I switched the vibrating function of my dildo on and inserted it into my wet pussy" certainly describes an event, but fails to give it any heat. (for example). Too matter-of-fact about all this gives the story a way too clinical feel. Not enough passion. Please rewrite and resubmit. Good luck!

I have not read the story, nor will I. The title of the story, pick the day or sometimes translated as seize the day, is latin. In latin it is spelled carpE diem. If you cannot even spell the title correctly, heavens only knows what the spelling in the body of the story is like, hence I will not read it. simple. I have rated it 50% as I cannot post without giving a rating which of course I cannot do.