Look things did NOT as the wife said Mushroom out of control. The wife mamde adult conscious choice NOT to send ANY time with her still fairly new husband.
DID they get married too young? Yeah Maybe. But that does not explain the wife's Terrible actions/behavior. Time after time when John confronted Samatha refused to talk about it.
Yet at the end of the story John is wondering to himself if there is something he could of said. John says: "We had tried the talking before with no success."
No John tried but his wife Locked the door... lied what she was doing when socialing... went out of her way NOT to spend time with John... then said "You are Not the boss of me.!"
that does NOT sound like a converation to me.
At the end Samatha saying "things" got out of control is Just total Bullshit. You were right about my actions not passing the husband test. I was mad because I thought you wanted to control my life and I had a lot of stress.
John asking IF his wife IF she could spend 1 night a week with him in NOT being controlling. That sort of Mindset cannot be ignored. I am not against reconciliation in this case (assuming there was no actual cheating going on.... which I am not certain of...) but the heart of the matter has to be dealt with. And it wasnt.
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Anonymous05/15/09
The story was good enough until you forced a
reconciliation. I say forced because he actually had no choice in it. Her being out later and later with the "girls" was never explained. Her attitude was never explained completely and her answers bluntly just dont hold water. So for six months she has held it together, as mentioned in the story this is the longest she has held it together after promises. The girl is not marriage material, she is a playgirl and he is a family man, it will never work. Her workmates knew she was in trouble the first time with he found her with a man and she attempted to lie her way out of it. He was right to leave her and should have gone on and divorced her. As he mentioned seeing her and she was happy and smiling, does that sound like at home unhappy. She was dressed sexy and was out with Julie and a guy who knew enough that she had an ex again it doesnt sound like a wife sitting at home unhappy about the collapse of her marriage caused by her actions. Nope no way in hell, that girl would have been history if for no other reason she did not love or respect her husband. Yes he did have a right to question where she was and what she did, just as she had a right to question him. That right is covered in what is called a marriage contract. Sorry girls he doesnt own you but you do owe him, you cant be married and still single.
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Anonymous05/15/09
Apparently she never told Ralph she was the boss
Kinda like the real life paradox where the girl tells the supposed #1 guy he can't boss her, so she can then go out and hang all over some sleazeball. At the bar, if all the girlfriends and the wife acted like she was doing something wrong, she probably was. If your wife is dating and you have to fight for her, you've already lost her. Seems odd that the wife was flirting at a honkey tonk the first time and he got all outraged and walked out, yet he took her right back after this so called "LADY" put her husband in the awful position to actually have to fight over her in another dive. Glad she grew up and stopped being a cheap party girl and started being a wife so he could stop being a baby sitter and be a husband. But in real life a cheap immature floozy would become so bullheaded in continuing her unwifely actions she would humiliate him and drive him away for good.
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Anonymous05/15/09
Good Story
Their always is some adjustments in a marriage. In mine I was the one to make them. I had always done the happy hour or two after work and when my wife and I got together she told me if I wanted to do that it was fine, I just needed to find another woman. Happy hour ended that nite and 24 years and 3 kids later I would do it exactly the same, never missed it. Thanks.
Yes I know I have already read the story. But I am just lending my support and my vote of course. Personally I liked the story and as I said to you write stories that YOU enjoy. Keep writing you doing great.
For me this was pretty realistic - been there, done that except for the end... Reconciliation at the end was a nice fantasy and made for a nice romantic read, but I don't think IRL it would happen, although of course I suppose that it could. But that is OK as this is a story - a pretty good one at that.
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Anonymous05/15/09
She should leave him
Lets face it, her "knight" is a coward and an alcoholic. His reaction to her supposed cheating is accusations without proof (which is dumb),leaving his house to crash at a friends and alcohol. He's always threatening violence and never confronts the issues which caused her to party for over a year with her friends instead of her husband.
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Anonymous05/15/09
THis is a very good very short story
This author write well. I don't understand why there is an emphasis on the husband drinking in excess as a drunk. The story could have been fashioned to a longer format with more brought out in the lives of this loving couple. RAG
I think something is switched around, she is the one slutting around and leaving her husband alone 5 days out of seven, and she should leave him , what a load of Bo**ocks, as happened in the story she eventually saw that she was at fault, luckily he gave her a second chance. Well written.
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Anonymous05/15/09
Two different people ,,,
going two different directions.. the sad thing is now they are bringing a child into the mix... the next chapter should be called SPLITVILLE
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Anonymous05/15/09
I Liked This
A good story and ending. I'll be looking for your next one. Thanks.
Great story. Well crafted. Neither John or Samantha are prefect people.
Most people don't examine their own behavior until something outside forces them. Samantha felt she was innocent in her heart, but failed to see how her behavior appeared to others, i.e. her husband, the girls, and her 'date' of the evening. You mention that their relationship starts with him rescuing her from being a 'tease'.
John, at least, knows what he wants and expects from a marriage. His obvious problem is turning to the bottle under stress. John makes some tactical errors, confronting his wife when she drunk is destined not to turn out well, and later, walking out just when shes ready too reconcile. Samantha is slow to wake up and realize how destructive her behavior is.
However, all is resolved before their marriage is destroyed. If these were real people I would like, Samantha to examine her relationship with Julie, and for John to recognize his danger of becoming an alcoholic. Again, Great story
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Anonymous05/15/09
A Late wakeup call,
THey were both fortunate enough to wake up before it was too late to do so.
Some bumps and bruises to the ego.
Very enjoyable story.
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Anonymous05/15/09
Very nice
Really enjoyed the story. As for style, this is one of the best in Literotica. I liked the short sentences: they help to move the action along at a good pace. Also, you know how to use semi-colons, which is a most unusual skill on this site; but in some places I think a comma would have been better. One sentence: Our company was building a parking garage for the building she worked in" might be more elegantly expressed as "Our company was building a parking garage for the building in which she worked." And, oddly, you have difficulty with angle and angel, as in these two examples: "Samantha looked like an angle laying there, still the most beautiful girl in the world; at least in my mind," and: "Bob will let me bunk with him for awhile until we can work out the legal angels." The semi-colon after "world" ought to be a comma because after it you have a prepositional phrase instead of a subordinate clause.
You are one of the best!
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Anonymous05/15/09
Fine writer-naive wife-alchoholic husband
I like your writing style.It's interesting and entertaining. I think your portrayal of wife shows a rather naive ,immature woman and the husband is portrayed as an alchoholic thug, who overreacts to her girls nights out. As an aside ,I wish Lliterotica writers would get rid of the cliche of girls night out, which seems to be the deus ex machina, for all marital problems in Literoica stories. Why she would want drunken husband back is beyond me.Put him in a rehab center for a while first.
the Ct. Yankee
There are so many stories about little whiney so called husband' that want their wives to fuck other men while they jerk off. I get so tired and upset at these kind of stories that I don't read unless I see your name or Jw66 or winterfrog and a few others.Keep up the good work . As an aside I don't drink. I haven't for thirty years and most trouble happen with booze
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Anonymous05/15/09
too extreme with the people...
wife is a selfish whore, and husband is an immature drunk. You made them way TOO harsh and unlikable. If you had her ignoring her husband for a month... that's one thing... but you carried it on for ages... it wasn't ignoring her husband, she was making a choice to be with someone OTHER than her husband... the marriage was stone cold dead at that point. How does the hubby react? you make him a bad drunk. Sorry, I really couldn't care less what happened to either of them. THERE IS ONLY ONE KEY ELEMENT FOR A LOVING WIFE STORY. WE MUST BELEIVE, LIKE, AND RELATE to your people.
Obviously Samantha has shown bad tendencies to lose contact with reality and make bad decisions. Who knows what lies five years further down the road. But it was well written and put together. If you had him move on to an Alaskan construction job perhaps he could have gotten on with his
life. But I can not fault his line except perhaps to say I do not think that they will live happily ever after!
Thank Woodmanone for entertaining and leaving me something to think about.
Any man that would let his wife go out and party all night, come in drunk and not think that she isn't fucking around on him must be dead in the head. She's fucking any hard cock she picks up, he just hasn't caught her yet. If he would follow her around for a week, he'd see her spread her legs and get her belly full of some other man's cum. What a slut, and he wants to take her back? What a wimp cuckold. Thanks for the story.....Rich
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Anonymous05/15/09
John sounds like a real asshole
A drunk who thinks the solution to everything is to start throwing punches. Samantha should have dumped his sorry ass. She'll regret it when she ends up in the hospital next time he gets drunk.
To those so called readers who have taken cheap shots at me. For your information this is Woodmanone's story NOT mine. He also simply asked for a second opinion. That was all. Everything in this story is his NOT mine. So if you wish to insult me then I would ask you to leave your email address so I can respond to you. Sorry Woodmanone for bringing this on to you. It seems readers now mark a story down just because they don't like a comment or a writer. Sad really. Anyway my comment still stands. Carry on writing.
the haters, I do feel their lack of masculinity shows in their "macho" comments. Having said that, I don't think the author did a good job with this story. I gave it a five to balance the 0 crowd, but it probably only deserves a B-. The problem is that the author didn't make a good case for reconciliation.
The wife should have had the good sense not to go dancing with another man period. Three weeks just doesn't cut it. The guy is a drunk and the belligerent drunk, and seems to think there's nothing wrong with it.
I don't know the song the author patterned the story after, but I don't like the chances for this family. Still, having a baby can make people grow up fast. I think the story would have been better if some author had shown both characters growing long term. Sorta "that was ten year and two children ago, and the last time I was close to drunk..."
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Anonymous05/17/09
Just a question to the person below.
Where is YOUR story? Show us and we can rate your story. Of course it would be brilliant with everything correct, no spelling errors, no grammar mistakes and almost certainly your wife character would end up burned a the stake for looking at another man. As for GW66, well he is not the only writer who deletes comments. Look around the site you will see hundreds of writers do the same thing. And at the very least he has the guts to write stories. YOU bunch of cowards have no idea how to write a story. Hell you cant even write a comment about the this writers STORY.
Well written and engaging. I am also glad to hear you looked to GW for advice. He likes to say he is not the best writer in the world, but he has one key thing going for him -- he writes from he heart about issues he cares about. I am sure his advice was excellent.
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Anonymous05/19/09
Just a little.....
too trite to move me, but I find myself happy to see your submissions and that they get better.Of course I'm hoping for HDK or Ohio every time so good luck wowing me!Pistolpackinpete
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Anonymous05/26/09
You show promise
Too much about drinking but the ending was satisfying.
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Anonymous06/22/09
very boring
BIG DRINKER, four drinks and he could barely stand.THEY MUST HAVE MADE BIG MONEY SHE WAS OUT EVERY NIGHT AND THEN HE STARTED.It was a story told with no emotions with no plot and meant nothing.
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Anonymous07/08/09
OK
A good read.
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Anonymous07/28/09
Drinking is a losers answer for lack o self esteem
I am sorry the wife's excuses and word she wasnt playing around dont wash. It was a long term thing, going on for many different nights. She lied to he husband by omission and by statement. She cant be trusted and isnt worth his time. When you wind up with trash you recycle. He married trash and now he is a trash collector. May as well stay on the bottle she will have many children maybe some will be by him.
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Anonymous07/28/09
I hate reconciliation at all cost stories. Worse
than that I hate self abusers, hell give him enough alcohol and drugs he eliminates himself from the gene pool. She is a slut and needs to have her tubes tied.
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Anonymous08/06/09
Only so-so
You have some writing skill, deffinately worth improving upon. The story line was trite, predictible and without any zing, about a potiential alcholic and a potential slut wife, making the greater mistake of thinking a baby will solve all of their problems. anon jerry
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Anonymous11/11/09
who is the baby father
hubby needs to go to AA,every time there a problem he gets drunk.be a fucking man and stand up and stop whining.
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Anonymous12/01/09
who the father of the baby
sound like a drunk,rather than a husband.she was a self center stupid slut.
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Anonymous12/01/09
Some good points were made
but also a lot of reading in between the lines by readers. If the author doesn't spell it out, should one assume the characters in the story did something that wasn't written? Author this is not a bad story, but you made the husband appear weak. When confronted with a problem his method of handling it was to get drunk. A little backbone would have been more interesting. Nevertheless it's not a bad read.
just LOOKING for trouble. WHY did it have to come to blows for her to see her behavior was that of a round heeled slut? He loving wimp husband warned her yet she continued until he left. I don't find it credible that she would change. Sorry.
I thought I didn't like it and then I thought I did, kind of like I was drinking doubles.
I liked the reconciliation but there is no substantive justification for same. He was miserable before the break-up and miserable afterward, kind of like he was still drinking doubles.
Sam fell out of love. Then, for no apparent reason, fell back into it kind of like she was drinking doubles.
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Anonymous05/04/10
Dude
Her "friend" Julie is THE PROBLEM. The first thing he needs to do is tell her it's either Julie or him.
The wife's actions were troubling and seem to me as you wrote the story that they were continuing at Ernies. The husbands actions of continually drinking himself silly don't speak well for him either.
Usually woodmanone stories have some characters to admire but I had a hard time finding them here.
English
EH -- ending too sudden and weak
Look things did NOT as the wife said Mushroom out of control. The wife mamde adult conscious choice NOT to send ANY time with her still fairly new husband.
DID they get married too young? Yeah Maybe. But that does not explain the wife's Terrible actions/behavior. Time after time when John confronted Samatha refused to talk about it.
Yet at the end of the story John is wondering to himself if there is something he could of said. John says: "We had tried the talking before with no success."
No John tried but his wife Locked the door... lied what she was doing when socialing... went out of her way NOT to spend time with John... then said "You are Not the boss of me.!"
that does NOT sound like a converation to me.
At the end Samatha saying "things" got out of control is Just total Bullshit. You were right about my actions not passing the husband test. I was mad because I thought you wanted to control my life and I had a lot of stress.
John asking IF his wife IF she could spend 1 night a week with him in NOT being controlling. That sort of Mindset cannot be ignored. I am not against reconciliation in this case (assuming there was no actual cheating going on.... which I am not certain of...) but the heart of the matter has to be dealt with. And it wasnt.
The story was good enough until you forced a
reconciliation. I say forced because he actually had no choice in it. Her being out later and later with the "girls" was never explained. Her attitude was never explained completely and her answers bluntly just dont hold water. So for six months she has held it together, as mentioned in the story this is the longest she has held it together after promises. The girl is not marriage material, she is a playgirl and he is a family man, it will never work. Her workmates knew she was in trouble the first time with he found her with a man and she attempted to lie her way out of it. He was right to leave her and should have gone on and divorced her. As he mentioned seeing her and she was happy and smiling, does that sound like at home unhappy. She was dressed sexy and was out with Julie and a guy who knew enough that she had an ex again it doesnt sound like a wife sitting at home unhappy about the collapse of her marriage caused by her actions. Nope no way in hell, that girl would have been history if for no other reason she did not love or respect her husband. Yes he did have a right to question where she was and what she did, just as she had a right to question him. That right is covered in what is called a marriage contract. Sorry girls he doesnt own you but you do owe him, you cant be married and still single.
Apparently she never told Ralph she was the boss
Kinda like the real life paradox where the girl tells the supposed #1 guy he can't boss her, so she can then go out and hang all over some sleazeball. At the bar, if all the girlfriends and the wife acted like she was doing something wrong, she probably was. If your wife is dating and you have to fight for her, you've already lost her. Seems odd that the wife was flirting at a honkey tonk the first time and he got all outraged and walked out, yet he took her right back after this so called "LADY" put her husband in the awful position to actually have to fight over her in another dive. Glad she grew up and stopped being a cheap party girl and started being a wife so he could stop being a baby sitter and be a husband. But in real life a cheap immature floozy would become so bullheaded in continuing her unwifely actions she would humiliate him and drive him away for good.
Good Story
Their always is some adjustments in a marriage. In mine I was the one to make them. I had always done the happy hour or two after work and when my wife and I got together she told me if I wanted to do that it was fine, I just needed to find another woman. Happy hour ended that nite and 24 years and 3 kids later I would do it exactly the same, never missed it. Thanks.
Liked it
A good read and a happy ending! Just what I like. Please keep it up
she married a drunk and a weak man
hubby needs help and wife is to immature to be married.writer a little to wimppy.
Nice Twist
Nice twist! Scenario was unlikely, but plausible. Would have liked the story to have been longer and am looking forward to more stories.
Hello Woodman
Yes I know I have already read the story. But I am just lending my support and my vote of course. Personally I liked the story and as I said to you write stories that YOU enjoy. Keep writing you doing great.
Interesting Story...
For me this was pretty realistic - been there, done that except for the end... Reconciliation at the end was a nice fantasy and made for a nice romantic read, but I don't think IRL it would happen, although of course I suppose that it could. But that is OK as this is a story - a pretty good one at that.
She should leave him
Lets face it, her "knight" is a coward and an alcoholic. His reaction to her supposed cheating is accusations without proof (which is dumb),leaving his house to crash at a friends and alcohol. He's always threatening violence and never confronts the issues which caused her to party for over a year with her friends instead of her husband.
THis is a very good very short story
This author write well. I don't understand why there is an emphasis on the husband drinking in excess as a drunk. The story could have been fashioned to a longer format with more brought out in the lives of this loving couple. RAG
Good Read!
Good story! I'm glad GW encouraged you to press on. It maybe ended a little abruptly, but still good. I hope you continue with your talents.
She should leaeve him........................
I think something is switched around, she is the one slutting around and leaving her husband alone 5 days out of seven, and she should leave him , what a load of Bo**ocks, as happened in the story she eventually saw that she was at fault, luckily he gave her a second chance. Well written.
Two different people ,,,
going two different directions.. the sad thing is now they are bringing a child into the mix... the next chapter should be called SPLITVILLE
I Liked This
A good story and ending. I'll be looking for your next one. Thanks.
Good job
Great story. Well crafted. Neither John or Samantha are prefect people.
Most people don't examine their own behavior until something outside forces them. Samantha felt she was innocent in her heart, but failed to see how her behavior appeared to others, i.e. her husband, the girls, and her 'date' of the evening. You mention that their relationship starts with him rescuing her from being a 'tease'.
John, at least, knows what he wants and expects from a marriage. His obvious problem is turning to the bottle under stress. John makes some tactical errors, confronting his wife when she drunk is destined not to turn out well, and later, walking out just when shes ready too reconcile. Samantha is slow to wake up and realize how destructive her behavior is.
However, all is resolved before their marriage is destroyed. If these were real people I would like, Samantha to examine her relationship with Julie, and for John to recognize his danger of becoming an alcoholic. Again, Great story
A Late wakeup call,
THey were both fortunate enough to wake up before it was too late to do so.
Some bumps and bruises to the ego.
Very enjoyable story.
Very nice
Really enjoyed the story. As for style, this is one of the best in Literotica. I liked the short sentences: they help to move the action along at a good pace. Also, you know how to use semi-colons, which is a most unusual skill on this site; but in some places I think a comma would have been better. One sentence: Our company was building a parking garage for the building she worked in" might be more elegantly expressed as "Our company was building a parking garage for the building in which she worked." And, oddly, you have difficulty with angle and angel, as in these two examples: "Samantha looked like an angle laying there, still the most beautiful girl in the world; at least in my mind," and: "Bob will let me bunk with him for awhile until we can work out the legal angels." The semi-colon after "world" ought to be a comma because after it you have a prepositional phrase instead of a subordinate clause.
You are one of the best!
Fine writer-naive wife-alchoholic husband
I like your writing style.It's interesting and entertaining. I think your portrayal of wife shows a rather naive ,immature woman and the husband is portrayed as an alchoholic thug, who overreacts to her girls nights out. As an aside ,I wish Lliterotica writers would get rid of the cliche of girls night out, which seems to be the deus ex machina, for all marital problems in Literoica stories. Why she would want drunken husband back is beyond me.Put him in a rehab center for a while first.
the Ct. Yankee
Woody..Your stories are a welcome releif to me
There are so many stories about little whiney so called husband' that want their wives to fuck other men while they jerk off. I get so tired and upset at these kind of stories that I don't read unless I see your name or Jw66 or winterfrog and a few others.Keep up the good work . As an aside I don't drink. I haven't for thirty years and most trouble happen with booze
too extreme with the people...
wife is a selfish whore, and husband is an immature drunk. You made them way TOO harsh and unlikable. If you had her ignoring her husband for a month... that's one thing... but you carried it on for ages... it wasn't ignoring her husband, she was making a choice to be with someone OTHER than her husband... the marriage was stone cold dead at that point. How does the hubby react? you make him a bad drunk. Sorry, I really couldn't care less what happened to either of them. THERE IS ONLY ONE KEY ELEMENT FOR A LOVING WIFE STORY. WE MUST BELEIVE, LIKE, AND RELATE to your people.
Nice Story
Obviously Samantha has shown bad tendencies to lose contact with reality and make bad decisions. Who knows what lies five years further down the road. But it was well written and put together. If you had him move on to an Alaskan construction job perhaps he could have gotten on with his
life. But I can not fault his line except perhaps to say I do not think that they will live happily ever after!
Thank Woodmanone for entertaining and leaving me something to think about.
she is a lying cheating slut, just not caught yet
Any man that would let his wife go out and party all night, come in drunk and not think that she isn't fucking around on him must be dead in the head. She's fucking any hard cock she picks up, he just hasn't caught her yet. If he would follow her around for a week, he'd see her spread her legs and get her belly full of some other man's cum. What a slut, and he wants to take her back? What a wimp cuckold. Thanks for the story.....Rich
John sounds like a real asshole
A drunk who thinks the solution to everything is to start throwing punches. Samantha should have dumped his sorry ass. She'll regret it when she ends up in the hospital next time he gets drunk.
Sorry Woodmanone.
To those so called readers who have taken cheap shots at me. For your information this is Woodmanone's story NOT mine. He also simply asked for a second opinion. That was all. Everything in this story is his NOT mine. So if you wish to insult me then I would ask you to leave your email address so I can respond to you. Sorry Woodmanone for bringing this on to you. It seems readers now mark a story down just because they don't like a comment or a writer. Sad really. Anyway my comment still stands. Carry on writing.
I liked It!
He's an immature drunken ass-hole, she's a slut waiting to happen. Hope they make it.
I do feel sorry for...
the haters, I do feel their lack of masculinity shows in their "macho" comments. Having said that, I don't think the author did a good job with this story. I gave it a five to balance the 0 crowd, but it probably only deserves a B-. The problem is that the author didn't make a good case for reconciliation.
The wife should have had the good sense not to go dancing with another man period. Three weeks just doesn't cut it. The guy is a drunk and the belligerent drunk, and seems to think there's nothing wrong with it.
I don't know the song the author patterned the story after, but I don't like the chances for this family. Still, having a baby can make people grow up fast. I think the story would have been better if some author had shown both characters growing long term. Sorta "that was ten year and two children ago, and the last time I was close to drunk..."
Just a question to the person below.
Where is YOUR story? Show us and we can rate your story. Of course it would be brilliant with everything correct, no spelling errors, no grammar mistakes and almost certainly your wife character would end up burned a the stake for looking at another man. As for GW66, well he is not the only writer who deletes comments. Look around the site you will see hundreds of writers do the same thing. And at the very least he has the guts to write stories. YOU bunch of cowards have no idea how to write a story. Hell you cant even write a comment about the this writers STORY.
Story was great
Well written and engaging. I am also glad to hear you looked to GW for advice. He likes to say he is not the best writer in the world, but he has one key thing going for him -- he writes from he heart about issues he cares about. I am sure his advice was excellent.
Just a little.....
too trite to move me, but I find myself happy to see your submissions and that they get better.Of course I'm hoping for HDK or Ohio every time so good luck wowing me!Pistolpackinpete
You show promise
Too much about drinking but the ending was satisfying.
very boring
BIG DRINKER, four drinks and he could barely stand.THEY MUST HAVE MADE BIG MONEY SHE WAS OUT EVERY NIGHT AND THEN HE STARTED.It was a story told with no emotions with no plot and meant nothing.
OK
A good read.
Drinking is a losers answer for lack o self esteem
I am sorry the wife's excuses and word she wasnt playing around dont wash. It was a long term thing, going on for many different nights. She lied to he husband by omission and by statement. She cant be trusted and isnt worth his time. When you wind up with trash you recycle. He married trash and now he is a trash collector. May as well stay on the bottle she will have many children maybe some will be by him.
I hate reconciliation at all cost stories. Worse
than that I hate self abusers, hell give him enough alcohol and drugs he eliminates himself from the gene pool. She is a slut and needs to have her tubes tied.
Only so-so
You have some writing skill, deffinately worth improving upon. The story line was trite, predictible and without any zing, about a potiential alcholic and a potential slut wife, making the greater mistake of thinking a baby will solve all of their problems. anon jerry
who is the baby father
hubby needs to go to AA,every time there a problem he gets drunk.be a fucking man and stand up and stop whining.
who the father of the baby
sound like a drunk,rather than a husband.she was a self center stupid slut.
Some good points were made
but also a lot of reading in between the lines by readers. If the author doesn't spell it out, should one assume the characters in the story did something that wasn't written? Author this is not a bad story, but you made the husband appear weak. When confronted with a problem his method of handling it was to get drunk. A little backbone would have been more interesting. Nevertheless it's not a bad read.
story is good,but men in your story are stupid
problem was to much partying he and her.
I like your work. Having said that, Sam is a SLUT
just LOOKING for trouble. WHY did it have to come to blows for her to see her behavior was that of a round heeled slut? He loving wimp husband warned her yet she continued until he left. I don't find it credible that she would change. Sorry.
And have a hang-over.
I thought I didn't like it and then I thought I did, kind of like I was drinking doubles.
I liked the reconciliation but there is no substantive justification for same. He was miserable before the break-up and miserable afterward, kind of like he was still drinking doubles.
Sam fell out of love. Then, for no apparent reason, fell back into it kind of like she was drinking doubles.
Dude
Her "friend" Julie is THE PROBLEM. The first thing he needs to do is tell her it's either Julie or him.
He is an alcoholic
She is an enabler. Classic combo!
I wonder who the father really is.
Just wondering.
IF SHES MARRIED SHE SHOULD NOT BEHAVE LIKE THAT. WAS HE TURNING INTO AN ALKI SHE WAS DRIVING HIM THERE. GLAD THEY GOT BACK TOGETHER
it is what it is
if it was me, she and i would be finished. she told a sad story but it sounded like just a story.
good writing.
Stories about drunks are boring.
No excuse to make the male a drunk about everything in his life. He doesn't deserve a wife and the wife doesn't deserve a husband by this telling.
Another good one
Thanks
An interesting but troubling story
The wife's actions were troubling and seem to me as you wrote the story that they were continuing at Ernies. The husbands actions of continually drinking himself silly don't speak well for him either.
Usually woodmanone stories have some characters to admire but I had a hard time finding them here.
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