not sure what to think. it sure was different. the writing was ok. it could have used more style. the word choice did leave a touch to be desired but, overall, not bad.
I guess the "every sibling" being a mate for 3 generations is the part that makes it impossible to really believe as that sort of thing would have, by gen 3 resulted in some fairly intense birth defects.
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Anonymous05/17/09
Good start
I thought the story was good and I look forward to the next installment.
Thanks, this is really hot! Hope to read the sequel very soon.
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Anonymous05/17/09
terrific...HOTTTTTT ...chap.#1
really hottt beginning...definetly tell us more...especially more detail about dad/dean bi action..as women/moms like myself...and bi couples like us...nothing a bigger turn-on than hot sex charged dad/son bi action when mom/bi stud dad/share all with their hot jock stud son...this scenerio is almost 99% of time omitted from posts on this site...so it is really terrific that you like us..and many others find this topic/scenerio soooooo hotttttttt! ! ! in family fun stories...
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Anonymous05/24/09
loved it
Hope u continue with the story.
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Anonymous06/13/09
Can't wait for part 2!!!
Loved it! Hope part 2 is soon to come : )
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Anonymous06/19/09
Keep it cumming!!
Very good start, can't wait to find out what happens.
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Anonymous07/16/09
hurry up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
MAKE MORE CHAPTERS I WANT MORE
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Anonymous10/13/09
Popular Demand
I'm just one of many voices d=crying out for more from this talented writer. Trish, you should never stop at this one good story. More, please.
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Anonymous10/14/09
Great Start!
Loved this beginning! I hope you have spent the last few months working on the next chapter.While I am not a writer or editor, I give it "2 cocks up!" Please continue.
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Anonymous05/03/10
Very Well Written
This story was very well written. Okay, so there are a few things that are hard to beleive......but it is erotic and does the trick (if you know what I mean). So, thank you - and hope to see more someday!!
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Anonymous06/01/14
Amazing
Please continue in the middle of jacking off
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Anonymous11/01/14
NEED MORE!!!
please...my cunt is so wet...
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Anonymous06/09/15
And...
I take it this will be a forever cliffhanger. Bummer. It was a good start.
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different
not sure what to think. it sure was different. the writing was ok. it could have used more style. the word choice did leave a touch to be desired but, overall, not bad.
I guess the "every sibling" being a mate for 3 generations is the part that makes it impossible to really believe as that sort of thing would have, by gen 3 resulted in some fairly intense birth defects.
Good start
I thought the story was good and I look forward to the next installment.
Can't wait!
Thanks, this is really hot! Hope to read the sequel very soon.
terrific...HOTTTTTT ...chap.#1
really hottt beginning...definetly tell us more...especially more detail about dad/dean bi action..as women/moms like myself...and bi couples like us...nothing a bigger turn-on than hot sex charged dad/son bi action when mom/bi stud dad/share all with their hot jock stud son...this scenerio is almost 99% of time omitted from posts on this site...so it is really terrific that you like us..and many others find this topic/scenerio soooooo hotttttttt! ! ! in family fun stories...
loved it
Hope u continue with the story.
Can't wait for part 2!!!
Loved it! Hope part 2 is soon to come : )
Keep it cumming!!
Very good start, can't wait to find out what happens.
hurry up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
MAKE MORE CHAPTERS I WANT MORE
Popular Demand
I'm just one of many voices d=crying out for more from this talented writer. Trish, you should never stop at this one good story. More, please.
Great Start!
Loved this beginning! I hope you have spent the last few months working on the next chapter.While I am not a writer or editor, I give it "2 cocks up!" Please continue.
Very Well Written
This story was very well written. Okay, so there are a few things that are hard to beleive......but it is erotic and does the trick (if you know what I mean). So, thank you - and hope to see more someday!!
Amazing
Please continue in the middle of jacking off
NEED MORE!!!
please...my cunt is so wet...
And...
I take it this will be a forever cliffhanger. Bummer. It was a good start.
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