All Comments on 'Lisa and Jonah'

This wasn't too bad, but is in need of an editor. There's a lot of punctuation, most specifically missing quotation marks, that need to be fixed. Also, if you're going to use numbers, spell them out unless you're describing a sign on a business or something like that. It flows much better. Same with "et cetera". People don't say "etc", but they do say et cetera. I know it's faster to type the numbers, but the story will work better if you write them out. Lisa and Jonah were good characters, and I thought you portrayed their situation well.

Unlike PennLady I'm not looking for literary excellence. Just a good story from one of my favorite authors--and this one fits the bill. Nice addition to your collection Dee.

A nice story with believable characters and situations. And some fine erotic imagery also.

YOu gonna contnue this Hope so

not really a romance...

Love the story, but as a hopeless romantic i would have preferred "A Happy Ending" :-)

Kind Regards

vonLassen