All Comments on 'You've Got To Hide Your Love Away'

I am assuming this excellent author is looking to compete with Matt Moreau for finding the dumbest husband story whose wife has cheated and he just has to find a way to get back with her. Just as this sentence does not make sense, the need to bring them back together does not. Let us assume for a minute that she only screwed the guy twice. No, wait a minute! She cannot be trusted. And the things he heard her say. Ok, she only did it a couple times. Anyone can make a mistake. He does not have to torch the bitch, but go back with her: pulllllllease! I look forward to your stories, but this one did not work for me. Thanks for your efforts though.

Ex wives can make great fuck buddies, ya just don't have to marry that shit. Living with the slut could be awkward, especially if Tom is cultivating more than one fuck buddy.

I don't know why the husband didn't shoot the bastard in the nuts like the guy did in "Ticket to Ride'. He had a pistol available. Of course, he might have died of a heart attack.

Boyd

This story does not sound like you at all. Where was the story teller HDK that we have all come to know and love. I will continue to look for your stories and will read anything with your name attached to it but this story....well let's just say it was not one of your best efforts.

Fer goodness sake! It's fiction, and it's tongue in cheek. It was fun. Don't take everything SO seriously!! Laughing, even as I write this.

Or I think It's Matt Moreau under HDK's Skin. This Matt virus is very dangerous than Swine Flu and Bird Flu. Get well soon HDK. Good wishes.

<p> It amazes me that after all this time, many readers just don't get HDK. He's so transparent. The hardcore LW nutcases can only look at the LW story through their black-colored glasses and are therefore incapable of appreciating anything remotely approaching humor or even reality.</p>

<p>Let's try this again: HDK has his little niche in the LW genre. That niche is to find a different point of view, a different twist on the same old shit. If you read his stories you will realize that none are alike. They all have something unique about them.</p>

<p>This story is like most HDK stories: the same, but different (to quote Cheez and Chong). Any resemblance to any other writer on this site is strictly coincidental. HDK patterns his stories after nobody.</p>

<p>The point of his stories IS ALWAYS the twist. I would hate to be in HDK's shoes trying to find something different after writing dozens of LW stories: a different twist on the same old shit. So each time he accomplishes that goal, I shake my head in admiration. His muse appears to be intact.</p>

<p>Enjoy it for what it is. Stop trying to read HDK's stories through the filter of your own testosterone. Look for the twist and enjoy it for what it is worth.</p>

I don't get these remorseful wife stories. What is erotic about all this remorse and punishment? Smack her on the bare bum or something if you are turned on by her pain. Whatever gets you going. Sex please not sad ass wingeing.

A wonderful,funny,loving story which perked up my day. Thank you.

Every now and then a well written and interesting story comes along and this is one. I thought it was a fun read, after reading the newspaper this morning I needed that, thanks.

Another in a long line of funny tales. I love your style!

Those that have read my humble attempts know I prefer not to let the lady off the hook and you've managed to capture that in this story, BUT allow them to stay together, too. Unbelievable. The only problem is that you don't write enough anymore.

I am always excited to see a new story posted by HDK!

ENJOYED THE STORY.

Outstanding, but in the wierdest sort of way. You had largely lost me with how he handled the lottery ticket. But after that..... well, it was certainly a unique spin on a familiar scenario. (And the never-answered question was whether this event was truly the first/second transgression. Or for that matter, the first "fling".) Regardless, an engaging tale.

-- KK in Texas

Maybe the lotery ticket scenario is a bit over done on Literotica, but I enjoyed the story none the less.

Thanks

Who shot him? What happened to the shooter? The wife claims Steve shot him, but she also violated her vows. Who do you believe.

Well written as usual. I enjoy your stories very much, but feel you missed a point in this one.

Thanks and keep writing please.

how HDK can finish a story when it is obvious that he is laughing the whole time he is writing. He has a way of treating a serious subject like infidelity with a sense of humor (sometime quite dark)that makes us willing to accept his endings even if they are a little strange. HDK, as always a great read.

I look forward to your stories and am never disappointed.

<p>HDK,</p>

<p>I'm giving this 50% because I laughed my butt off at times, but the ending? Huh?</p>

<p>Lets see, he doesn't know who shot him, and the reader doesn't know "who" took the blame for that. The police won't just "drop" it and pretend nothing happened. So that loose end wasn't tied up.</p>

<p>Then there is the cheating. First the wife says:</p>

<p><i>"Okay! I made a horrible mistake. It only happened the <b>one time</b> and Tom caught me. I'm ashamed and mortified by my actions."</i></p>

<p>Then just a short few paragraph's later in the story the character says</p>

<p>"<i>Tom! I swear that Steve was the only one and, to be honest, you caught us the <b>second</b> time we were together",</i></p>

<p>and no one picked up on that? Not to mention that in the story he had a hard time getting past what she said in bed about how enjoyable Steve was having sex with her, but at his father in-law's suggestion he's willing to pretend she never said it by the end of the story??</p>

<p>Then the wife's mother and father think that because now that she's in a world of her own creation, that the best thing is for her to, pardon the expression, live in sin, with her former husband, who still doesn't have a definitive answer to who shot him, as her lover until the time she can convince him to marry her again. Huh???</p>

<p>One thing I personally never understood, if the wife can find people to cheat on the husband with (or the husband cheat on the wife with) why don't they move on to other people like they were doing in the marriage? Why is it they can find people to cheat with while married, but then they live the life of a hermit once they are faced with divorce?</p>

<p>And why would the husband, who first finds his wife cheating on him, then gets shot trying to leave the room, decide this is the best suggestion he's heard of? That makes no sense to me. None at all</p>

<p>Sorry I tried, but for me, the ending was not plausible. It appeared too many things were glossed over to make it a happy ending. =(</p>

-Risq

As always, you kept me going the whole episode! Sure, there are some questions, but who cares - this isn't a novel, just a short story, and a darn good one at that!

A truly enjoyable reading experience. And reading it and fully understanding every angle isn't that easy. A veteran story teller gives us another to be classic story. RAG

Loved it. I'm not really sure what the hell really happened...but I'm laughing my ass off.

As always well written and fun to read. Thanks for writing.

You what I like about your writing. You have good character development, you have a twisted sense of humor, and you come at what could be the same story with different approaches and twists. In one of you stories, the betrayed husband shots the guy in the nuts with a pellet gun, costing the guy some well loved parts and the betrayed husband divorces the cheating wife. In this one, it is the betrayed husband that gets shot and while the marriage ends, the couple reaches an accomodation.

Your good and I always read your stories because they always have some gem in them that makes them special. Keep it up. I cannot wait to what new twist you can put on the "same old story". LOL

lots of fun with much spoofing on various sacred cows of the

Loving Wife genre. I was expecting more negative comments but I guess people are learning that HDK loves to do parodies!

Thanks.

There were three people in the room. The husband, the back stabbing accountant and the cheating wife. I'm making an assumption that the revolver was located. That being the case, only two sets of prints were on the thing, our hero's and the attempted killer. The cops, bless their souls, have obviously fingered the accountant. Why? Because his finger prints were on the weapon.

My question on the story, where did the husband hide the accountants clothing?

As for how often the wife got together with the accountant, my money is on the 'twice' answer. It being the first time was an automatic answer she tossed out. There are any number of reasons for her doing that. Later, after all is lost, she admits they got together twice. Assuming the husband AND the wife aren't totally stupid (never are in HDK stories) twice or fifteen makes no difference. She can either convince hubby to put her on probation (maybe with one of those dog collars that give an electric charge when she leaves the house <or does something else suspect>)

The story didn't really have the angst HDK can put into a story, but it was original and, in the end, funny.

wow this story sucks Moose balls BIG time . No reason to re-state all the reasons. If the author w as HDK NO one would give this sotry anything over a 50 or 75.

Story was good, but the ending through me for a loop as well. That had to be one magic bullet for him to agree to that proposal at the end. It must have effected more than his heart. Sometimes a twist at the end isn't worth it.

The writing was good and the ending was zanny. Giving you 100 for enjoyment and writing.

I know with the lighter stuff you don't dig too deep and I accept that. However I couldn't give you a 100 because you should have wrapped up what happened to the shooter.

I usually love your stories HDK, especially the sometimes wry, sometimes corny sense of humor you display in your stories. This one just wasn't my cup of tea plot wise. The writing itself was TOP NOTCH tho.

Keep up the great work,

Grant

You are a passive aggressive. That is a term used to apply to people with a problem.learned helplessness, procrastination, stubbornness, resentment, sullenness, or deliberate/repeated failure to accomplish requested tasks for which one is (often explicitly) responsible. That is exactly how the dictionary defines it. How it manifest in all your stories is where you pack the worn out old suitcases and just leave the wife to manage with out your highness (Your over inflated opinion of your self.)Actually it is the mark of a writer that has no earthly idea how to write a story of his was of denial. The writer may be to politically correct in his assumption that the other man might just stomp him if he tried to get macho.You also have some elements of a wimp and a humiliation freak in you too. The husband in this story was about to do that and you changed it where he is shot instead(which you gave the reader no closure on what happened to the shooter. This is the mark of a very bad writer, to place something in the story which is important to the story and then leave the reader hanging.

I have made comments before, not to you but to the other readers that deserve to know what they are reading , that should tell the reader to discount what they have read. Sort of like a judge's comment to the jury to disreguard the testamony of such and such. I hope that the reader will be able to judge your work more wisely as just the stories of a neurotic (can escalate to phychotic)person. I will not comment on your obvious inability , as of lately, to make any reasonable attempts at writing an intelligent realistic story. The character husband later had a rush of generosity, showing (to put it in plain English)that the writer has had a mental breakdown in reality.

I wish I lived where there were such understanding and forgiving police.

any other jokes to tell ? hopefully they are a bit shorter, then I could have a laugh with you.

Some of these comments have me rolling around more than the story!<BR>

Can that nyminus guy, or someone else, please translate the sentence below into english?<BR>

<I><B>Actually it is the mark of a writer that has no earthly idea how to write a story of his was of denial.</B></I><BR>

And, what's all this crap about who did the shooting? Did you people read the story? In the text of the story Janet says:<BR>

"...I had no idea he was so tightly wound. He literally pissed the bed when you pulled that gun out of the drawer. When you set it down, he grabbed it as fast as he could. Putting a loaded gun by a man scared shitless wasn't the smartest thing you could have done,..."<BR>

Now, that tells <I>me</I> Steve did the shooting. And to back up my hypothesis, as many commenters have pointed out, shooting down their own complaints; the police would not just let something like that go without appropriate action. So, if Janet is still free to go about her life, it isn't the silliest assumption ever made to suppose the police are happy to believe it wasn't her!<BR>

Let me quote from Literotica's home page:<br>

Welcome to Literotica, your FREE source for the hottest in erotic fiction and fantasy.<br>

Maybe there wasn't much 'erotic' in this story, but it sure fitted the 'fiction' and 'fantasy' criteria. As the song goes, "two out of three ain't bad"<br>

OH!! Bugger me! This <i>story</i> doesn't agree with <i>your</i> view of the universe?? There's only two words to be said about that.<br>

<b>Tough shit</b><br>

HDK's story put a big smile on my face this afternoon, for which I am grateful. I too am curious as to what happened with the police investigation - hopefully the nekked accountant did some hard time. I like the solution to the dilemma at the end.

The whole crap about the lottery ticket was idiotic and badly written. For he "immediately feared Janet would get part of it" then -- without explaining why -- he came up with a convoluted Rube Goldberg scheme to give her part of it.

I NEED to understand WHY, in her words, she did what she did........is THAT something that could be explained?

before the meeting they would never have come to such a god awful ending. I know it's just male ego that makes a man think his wife should not cheat. And it's male ego that makes a man divorce a slut wife. And I know it's male ego but I feel he should have took the money and ran around the world on as many cruises as his money helf out for. There are enough lonely women in the world you dont have to trust to smooth any pains he might have. Why subject yourself to a woman that will cause you to have to undergo monthly STD and HIV checks for the rest of your life?

If you thought this story was good fiction and fantasy I feel you have to quit watching Mr Rogers reruns. It is as erotic as cold wet horse manure being thrown at you. The fiction is so far out it lacks any realism. And the fantasy I agree is far out, so far out I can't really find it. But then I dont use things before I read stories on here.

As always, your writing and ability to tell a story were good. That's why I gave you the 75%. From the moment hubby's kids sided with him, I knew that you would have him back with her. I am not one of the "kill the cheater at all costs" but your reconciliation did not cut it, at least to me. Who did shoot him? Not resolved. What happenned to the other guy? Was she telling the truth about it being the 2nd time? At first she said it was the first time.

Why do you writers forget that a newly single (or in a divorce) guy is like blood in the water to sharks? Women would be all over him.

If I were shot and unsure who did it, I wouldn't consider reconciliation until that was settled.

Anyway, even if this story failed for me, please keep writing.

Hey HDK, it seems readers missed the whole point of your story. It's so realistic that everyone ignored the clue that the whole thing is a crazy, fictional fantasy: Janet's lover Steve is her ACCOUNTANT! ******

Are you kidding me? I mean, if he'd been a hunky dishwasher repairman or a car mechanic or a long-distance trucker, okay, but, an accountant??? *****

Obviously this is HDK's way of saying, 'just a fantasy everyone, don't take it so seriously!' It's too bad that everyone missed this..... Thanks, ohio

The story wasn't one of your better ones but it still kept me interested all the way through. I can see a couple acting this way, and the accountant doing what he did with the gun made sense in some strange way too.

You are a good writer with a wicked sense of humor. Thanks for sharing your talent with the rest of us.

It was kinda quirky and out there but take it as it is....just a good fun read.

What a Hoot! HEADLINE: Cheating slut of a wife gets cuckold husband shot but saves cuckold's life. Very original and fun fantasy. Thanks!

if you want to psychoanalyze this story, but who gives a shit. It's funny entertainment and that's all that counts. As expected and no surprise the negative comments come from the same people, who won't read a story just for entertainment, always expecting a Pulitzer prize winner on an erotic site.

How do some people, not get it? It's okay to take the lighter side once in a while. I'm all for justice and deserved retribution... but HELL...

I have this wild thought, that won't leave the back of my mind. I picture all the gloom and doom naysayer's, after hitting submit to their comments and picking up their torches and pitchforks... Breaking out in a combined chorus of... "I'm a Lumberjack and I'm Okay...

[Sorry, HDK, your occasional references to 3-4 decades ago, trigger other memories.]

Thanks for your efforts and especially your point of view.

Gus

and HDK sneaks one in there.Not his best,or could be just not that unique a plotline but thank-you anyway,at least for the funny angry retorts from those that take all this too literally.Pistolpackinpete

I really enjoy your stories. Please write more.

This was a fine story up until the end. That is no sulution, it'sa copout. It would make since if he agreed, got the divorce, then dump the stupid bitch. His pride isn't found in a piece of paper. It's found in correcting the problem and moving on. He sold it. What a stupid ending.

Evidence: A room filled with about a dozen people. Some with tears running down their faces. Others doubled over holding their bellies trying to catch their breath. All with their mouths gaping, shaking violently as if having a seizure. HDK, I FIND YOU GUILTY OF MORTAL HILARITY! Your sentence: To continue writing to entertain us unworthy lowly folk until your fingers bleed and you can no longer see to write or we all expire. Bailiff, chain that man to his keyboard. Thank you, HDK for many hours of entertainment.

I am afraid Bill got it right…And putting an implied sign suggesting (read it as; humor/ fantasy) does not automatically turn it into something else – that is if the material itself does not allow for it. I realize that the jury of the readers is split. <P>

I’ll just say that from beginning to end this story was off for me. Starting from the scene where hubby left a loaded gun on the cheaters’ bed (?), following by being shot for no apparent reason by the lover even as hubby turned his back to the cheaters (??) to the improvised family court where the cheating wife tries to win in logics rather than in credibility or some truth (how could you ask me for the truth when you first tell me I am a liar). All sound off the mark and not funny. <P>

The husband could have been killed, A REAL bullet have been shot and she still plays an idiotic defensive game while changing her version of her affair as she tells it (did ishe cheat once or was it twice?). I guess, as we see later on, in the unique logic introduced here, two mutually exclusive options COULD be true at the same time…<P>

Not only do we not hear any explanation to the cheating (since when just cheating or shooting someone is funny?) – the gist of the plot comes down to being stuck with the divorce procedure as the husband decides to reward the cheating wife with a lottery ticket winnings (anonymously) while the wife decides to block him by insisting on proving her good will (post betrayal under duress of course) resisting the divorce- what a legal maneuver! Since when can any cheating spouse can “block” an appeal for divorce by the cheated spouse due to the cheater trying to force a financial bribe on the cheated spouse –and the judge goes along with it (???). In Gilbert and Sullivan operatic mockery of marriage courts I was laughing (important lesson: no one is really hurt at the end); here I just grimaced. <P>

Bill comes with a grotesque resolution which seems to be designed to mock his daughter and his son in law. Note – mockery is a dark distant relative to fun and humor. Bill’s suggestion: The couple would divorce because hubby can no longer trust his cheating wife – AND they live together so that cheating wife could atone for her sins by hubby having constant sex with cheating wife (????) AND he still does not trust her AND he still loves her very much – I told you earlier that mutually exclusive options do “work” in this story just fine…you just have to suspend your brain for a little while)<P>

Nothing is resolved of course, as the father of the bride wisely observes. If you are fool enough to accept his self described – half baked ideas (others, including Bill could describe them in even worse terms), then you admittedly have a happy ending, especially designed for fools and for those who wish to call cruelty combined with silliness a hilarious comedy.

It was a great story and I loved it. A lot of bad things happen in life, and it more fun to read a happy ending to a story rather than a sad one. If I want to be sad I can watch the news or read the paper. Your stories showed some of the complexities of life. Love and pride don't always go good together. I loved your unique ending to there problem.

Not even Woody Allen on a year long drug-induced stupor could have conjured up this miserable melodrama.

Ditto...to what all the other commenters said that liked it.

Great sense of humor and great fiction! Love it! Fie on all the commenters that didn't... The old State Cop

Were is the cheating!! This loveing wives not poor poor pitiful me, boo hoo please feel bad for me boo hoo.

Get a pair a fuck her after her cunt is full of cum, you will love it!!

This is rhe first of yours i have read for a while and it did not let me down!

Thanks for writing!

Pathetic As Usual.

I think you do a good job writing about humans.

LOL, this was pretty funny and a good read. Thanks for the story! :D

Wish I had the ability to come out of a bad situation as well as this guy!

Wow ... he gets revenge and life saving surgery all from finding a cheating wife! Hell, he doesn't even have to try and communicate his feelings to the wife; his mother-in-law, son and daughter do it for him and he has the midas touch.

I loved this comedy (as opposed to a tragedy) but can I ask a favour? Can you send some of his luck my way? Still laughing about this one ...

curious

I liked how this story resolved what so many cheating wives/cuckold stories do not, that the husband receives his dignity through divorce and the wife gets hr husband back to prove her love for him.

And what did happen to the shooter?

As perfect and ending to one of these as could ever be - but Bill should also have told about the ticket just to add to the bizzarro nature of it all -

LOL fucking awesome

Absolutly great tale to read, I loved it! Another great story H.K. R.T.

The Story was a bunch of bullshit up until the last paragraph with this Solomonic Solution which doesn't make the Story great but worthwhile.

the story was fucked up and a wast of times.

I liked it. I laughed several times. Yes, it's a fucked up story but who cares?

some people do see the forest for the trees.... This one is a hoot

she cheated, her lover shot him in the head. Through all iof this he wins the lottery and get her 1/3 to help out after the divorce. and most of the commentors her want them back together. Why?

And it's still one of my favorite stories.

I can believe in these characters. She wanted a bit of nasty but finds it's only good when the person doesn't know and that it isn't worth it.

His generosity has more to do with closure for him and coming to peace with himself as a human being. Being able to act as the better man is part and parcel of that. As was said in 'Breaking Bad': a man provides for his family. Even if they disrespect him. Even if they hate him. He is living up to that.

You have a knack for spinning excellent bite-sized yarns and this story is no exception. It is no wonder you are one of the top authors on Lit. Bravo!

HDK...What were you smoking dude, when you wrote this?

I'm kidding.

I enjoyed the story for what it is. The irony is well worth it.

the judge not granting the divorce was classic, I pictured him as Harry from the old sitcom Nightcourt - too funny

After that, I've got to go and read one of JPBs "Burn'em to the ground and salt the earth" stories to regain my perspective.\

HDK has a smart sense of humor and this just adds more proof. The dialogue, characters, plot, everything merged into a fun little tale.

I enjoyed this story. It was entertaining and I got a few good chuckles out of the husband's responses and barbed verbal digs to the wife's protests at being discovered in action.

I do feel the need to put on my instructor's cap for just a brief moment. I would not be so bold as to offer up any advice of a literary sort, mind you, but rather to address a technical detail. This is in response to the husband's decision not to shoot himself with a .22 pistol, as such a small caliber weapon would only cause a wound sufficient to be at best a nuisance.

Actually, quite the reverse is true. Among the assassins of the world, including Israel's fabled Mossad, the near universal weapon of choice is a suppressed .22 semi-automatic handgun. It is the low velocity of that round that makes it such an ideal choice. You see, the round has sufficient velocity to penetrate the skull but not enough to exit on the other side. It therefore ricochets, and on contacting the skull once again, continues to do so. Each time the bullet hits bone, it deforms a bit more, and the victims' brain gets chewed up like hamburger inside the skull. An assassin can walk up behind the victim, put a round to the back of the head, and walk away. The suppressed handgun is quiet, and the shot is lethal.

Not being a wise ass, I just wanted to pass this information along. It might be of use in some later story.

but renting isnt an impossibility. TK U MLJ LV NV

Thats just not right. I can't believe you would even consider that paln.

Because of the last sentence.

He loved her, couldn't and wouldn't cheat on her BUT - she cheated on him and he felt the lack of respect and doubted the depth of her love - really sad. Not enough caring love to abstain from cheating. He'll never get past these memories.

A Three, he cared to take care of her but not live with her, take her sex again and trust her. #3

With an interesting solution. She can no longer be his wife, and must accept being his live in whore. Thank You.

Why can't all criticism be constructive like yours?

Instead we the trolls who think they have a right be assholes.

Why did he give up his lottery winnings to the slut that almost had him killed?! I'm a bit confused. He could've held on to the winning ticket till after the divorce, there was no reason to award the cheating slut with millions of dollars, & why the fuck would he still want to fuck her? I didn't care for this story it didn't make any sense.

Well you write very well. But I'm thinking you were an abused child. Maybe the girl next door was Linda Lovelace and your baby sitter. But it's time for another beer and maybe I'll bang the keys for a while.

Well you write very well. But I'm thinking you were a loved child. Maybe the girl next door was Mother Teresa and your baby sitter. But it's time for another beer and maybe I'll bang the keys for a while.

nice idea and nice twist, but...is it true that it happened twice, what if she was pulling trains the whole duration of the marriage, she is a cheater so she can not be trusted, you could have added a paragraph or two to address this issue. there a couple more wholes but however it was a nice reading . thanks for sharing.

I would have a lie detector test to prove me she was not the one who shot her husband and also prove that she never had any other cheating episodes within their marriage. Plus she would have to testify against her lover for attempted murder of her husband. Wait till after the divorce, of course, her punishment, plus a lot more if guilty....bill

still good

... I would have to say her cheating leading to me getting shot in the head is a deal breaker.

Who actually fired the shot that whacked his head that led to OHS that led to ... ?

A wonderfully creative story.

She cheated on him in his bed

Maybe tried to kill him

Certainly didn't stop her lover from trying to kill him and he's going back to her.

For money? or for some fucked up reason. And people are praising this shit.

OK then.

The author is very talented. The twisted plot is something else again. She cheats, twice.

She or her lover shoots him. He wins the lottery and gives the cash to her and she refuses. What about lover boy - did he get anything except a married slut? Oh yeah and she will never cheat again. A bridge is for sale in New York for $2.

An impossible outcome. By the way what happened to lover boy. the shooter? Well written as usual but totally preposterous. Oh well.

He placed the gun inches from his wife! We're supposed to believe the little guy shitting himself with fear could hold his hands steady enough to aim? She said at first that "it was only the one time" and then later on she said it was only twice! Would you be stupid enough to believe her and take her back? Most of his brain must still be decorating the bedroom wall!

What is important is the quality of the story. The decision to divorce and/or reconcile is secondary to the wealth of keen observations HDK makes to push this tale along. It shows us what a kind hearted person after much reflection might do. Hubby had a mostly loving wife for decades. He has kids to take care of. Although he must divorce her for now he leaves the door open for the future. It shows what a decent guy should strive for in forgiveness for their spouse. Not just in cases of infidelity, necessarily, but in a larger overall manner for the relationship. *****

You are a talented writer but you totally shit the bed on this fucked-up, unbelieveable mess. She cheats, her lover drills him in the head, and he gives the cunt a winning lottery ticket? You were straining credibility before you even introduced the Lottery ticket as a plot device, you just drifted off into stupidity from there. Next time, start with a well-thought-out outline, then discard anything that sounds retarded.

She and her lover nearly killed him. Take the money and give it to a charity, just stay away from the lying disease ridden cunt.

HDK, congratulations on making so many professional assholes shit a brick! It has me LOL reading the commentaries and how the purblind are leading the visionless down a dark and twisty alley of hate.

An amusing story, well told and cleverly plotted. And the corybantics that infest this site cannot help but vomit their vicious idiocy at the author of fictional characters.