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Please keep going
I think the characters you're building here are ones I am very much interested in. I look forward to reading more.
Quite intriguing; love your style of language
Looking forward to read a sequel to this; lets not make us wait long.
Good start
The characters are nicely drawn. I'm looking forward to seeing more.
Could be a good beginning.....
If the coming chapters are as nicely written as this opener, this will prove to be a very good story. (It could have been a bit longer, though.) Good start.
-- KK in Texas
good beginning
you have done a good job of setting up the framework of the plotline and providing the reader with some of the back story. the character and scene descriptions are good too. I am looking forward to reading more of your writings.
Interesting...
A nice beginning you've go here. I think I like the way everything is described to make it not so harsh on her and reflecting how calm she is about everything in the past.
Missed Justice
It would have been justice if later on it turned out Jack had been shooting blanks!
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