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Love it!
Wow! Jake needs to cool it! Hes crazy! I thought him and jessica were friends! Cant wait to see what happens next! Please more and soon! Ahh What a cliff hanger!
Too fast
This is good but everything just moved too quickly, and Jake's reaction seems a bit out of character.
agree with last comment
its concept is very intriguing and i will continue to read it to see where its going, but its being rushed on so fast its hard to keep track. slow the story down a bit and it will be killer.
:o)
Confused?
Ok I am really confused here, it's one page, and that's chapter 6 & 7? and what the heck happen with Jake, you written a total 360 with no explanation? Did part of the story get omitted when you submitted it, or am I totally just missing something?
darn it
jake is such a bastard, and jake didnt do a full 360, thats back to where he was, he did a 180 dumb bell
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