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by Anonymous05/29/09

So they are all cheaters big deal

And if they werent the guy sold his wife down the river for a few minutes with what amounts to a slut. Nothing really erotic here, just dumb assholes.

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by Anonymous05/29/09

hot story

Interesting story and pretext. Nice writing. Ignore the moralist idiots who leave comments. Enjoy your fantasies.

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by H.H.Morant05/29/09

Interesting take on well worn story line



Wife swapping/cuckolding stories should always be regarded as fantasies, and this one is no different, except that the author supplies an interesting twist – Amanda kicks the narrator out of bed, while Max has already stuck it his wife – but then Max pulls out before he comes.










The usual conclusion would have the narrator “enjoying” sloppy seconds. Not this time, however – and the author should get credit for that.









The author should get still more credit for the twist at the very end – has the wife gone back to Max to let him finish what he started? Or is she giving the narrator and Amanda a chance to finish what they had started? Or did she just go into the bathroom to take a shower, alone?









I much prefer stories that challenge the reader a bit – and this one does. First, what is going on in Amanda’s mind: does she want to get fucked by the narrator and then get cold feet, or is she just diverting his attention while her husband does the narrator’s wife? Second: what has been going on in the narrator’s wife’s head both when Max was fucking her, and now when she is taking a shower and Max (presumably) joins her? Incidentally, the author gives no clue as to how Max and Amanda were able take advantage of the second opportunity (it was some hours after the first session ended) – did Veronica somehow tip them off? Or did Max just invite himself into the shower? The story is much the better for leaving these loose ends untied.





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by MissSenses05/29/09

Great story!

Timing is everything!

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