Hot scenario - a little different with the toy - and good descriptions. You seemed to mix up names a couple of times, which kind of broke the flow. Be more careful please, but WRITE MORE!
you Just knew that bag had other tricks in it......
Nice beginning, but we need few more chapters to fill the story out.
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Hot scenario - a little different with the toy - and good descriptions. You seemed to mix up names a couple of times, which kind of broke the flow. Be more careful please, but WRITE MORE!
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you Just knew that bag had other tricks in it......
you Just knew that bag had other tricks in it......
Nice beginning, but we need few more chapters to fill the story out.
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