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by Anonymous05/29/09

Get an Editor or use spell-check

You wrote a fun story but simple mistakes made it tough to read. (poass for pass, etc.) What happens is that it forces me, one of your audience, out of the story. What word did he mean? ... Also, it took several paragraphs to figure out if the protagonist was male or female. Until this story, I had never heard a guy talk about changing his top ...
Thanks for writing. I strongly suggest you use an editor.

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by john25305/29/09

Typo's

Liked the story but you do need to reread it and check for typo errors. A little more history might help too, age, sex, married, single, why are you there: sent for training, trouble at the site, where you are coming from, ect.

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