All Comments on 'A Flame in the Night Ch. 01'

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Anonymousover 13 years ago

Nice

sun_sea_sky over 11 years ago

Interesting technique

Slow start, but you warned us about that. :)

The use of first person/second person was unusual, but once you get used to it works quite nicely.

Westman99 over 1 year ago

I liked this opening chapter. It was as you advised minimal in sexual activity, but that is fine for me. I like a story that builds the characters up and gives us a greater insight into them.

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