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by PennLady06/02/09

Good

I'm enjoying this. My only request is that you use something -- a line of stars, or x's or whatever -- to delineate when the POV switches. It's pretty confusing. But I like having the two POVs.

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by Anonymous10/09/13

hard to read

It is really confusing to figure out who is talking ... the flip flopping is not good. I had to re-read every sentence and paragraph to find out who was talking to whom... just saying :P GREAT STORY! love it.

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