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Yay!
Good for Gail for standing up to Aguirre, and finding the job. I like that this chapter was a little lighter than the others. Eye of the storm and all that. :)
It seems to me that the chapters are too short
It's like I just get interested in what's going on and the chapter ends. What I read is very good and keeps my interest and attention,and the story is very real in my mind, but then I have to wait until the next part is posted on the network. It's just like listening to my favorite hero on Radio when I was a kid, Just when it started to get good, the announcer would say, "until next week." The story is stretching out for too long of a time period, and that it makes my poor old simple mind work hard to try and remember the past chapters. Hell I have a hard time remembering what I had for dinner last night,although I still remember the last woman I was with, so the old grey matter isn't all of the way dead yet. It might just be me, but I would like to see a 4 part chapter to get the story moving on at a good pace, and I'm still waiting for Howard to nail Gail and show that sexy little girl just what she has been missing. I think Ms. Widder needs to put down her pen and pick up that hot torch and write some hot sweaty sticky sex, where the goo is running down the crack of her ass, and the sweat is dripping from his forehead and falling on her tits. It's Texas,for mercy sakes, there's a lot of hot sweaty sex going on all of the time. Thanks Ms. Widder for the good chapter.........Rich
atta girl
so nice to see the character development and that Gail is starting to see that her life can have value. nicely written, from Howard asking her to write him a letter to the confrontation with Santos was timely considering her epiphany after writing the letter.
So far....
So far...so good. I'm interested. Now I am off to read the next chapter.
I don't understand...
Howard goes on and on about living on the border, how dangerous it is, and portrays himself as someone struggling with a bad situation. But, he isn't struggling, he's already surrendered, and just lets everyone walk all over him. Why is Gail interested in him when he has already demonstrated himself to be a big baby that is at the mercy of everyone else in the world?
He would have been run off the place long before she showed up if he was really as the author portrays him in this story, hence my suspension of disbelief fails, and thus the story fails.
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