you totally ruined the story incest has to be kept to a minimum of people involved you can't just add people at will and keep it believable it is best kept to just two main people period the more you add the more likely someone will get hurt or mad and tell on the rest you forgot the rules of incest
Forget the comment from ruined. Either he has no imagination or doesn't come from an open family. Great work as usual/ Can't wait for chapter 3. How will mom handle all the kids being gone off to Virginia now?
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Anonymous07/10/10
gay
the gay shit and the sister saying she and her twin screw around killed it no way would he want anything to do with her after any of that he would be disgusted and tell them to go to hell and leave him alone for good keep it atleast sounding somewhat realistic or put it in the fantacy area
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Anonymous05/04/12
I have to honestly admit that I loved the first chapter, but once the other brother and eventually the mother became involved, I immediately went into skim mode and just wanted it to end. There was what seemed like honest love between Rose and Jack, and then it suddenly turned into a bisexual gang bang. I'm not trying to put anyone down, but I truthfully felt like the second two installments ruined an otherwise beautiful and sexy story. That said, I do think the whole thing was well written... so props for that.
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ruined
you totally ruined the story incest has to be kept to a minimum of people involved you can't just add people at will and keep it believable it is best kept to just two main people period the more you add the more likely someone will get hurt or mad and tell on the rest you forgot the rules of incest
great story
next chapter please
ignore please...
Forget the comment from ruined. Either he has no imagination or doesn't come from an open family. Great work as usual/ Can't wait for chapter 3. How will mom handle all the kids being gone off to Virginia now?
gay
the gay shit and the sister saying she and her twin screw around killed it no way would he want anything to do with her after any of that he would be disgusted and tell them to go to hell and leave him alone for good keep it atleast sounding somewhat realistic or put it in the fantacy area
I have to honestly admit that I loved the first chapter, but once the other brother and eventually the mother became involved, I immediately went into skim mode and just wanted it to end. There was what seemed like honest love between Rose and Jack, and then it suddenly turned into a bisexual gang bang. I'm not trying to put anyone down, but I truthfully felt like the second two installments ruined an otherwise beautiful and sexy story. That said, I do think the whole thing was well written... so props for that.
Still needs another chapter - doesn't it !
But I doubt we'll get it after all this time will we; shame really !
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