All Comments on 'Peter Shows the Way'

Saves scheduling and arranging things.

. . . that didn't quite score for me. Not enough seduction and the dialogue sounded so matter of fact, almost clinical, that it didn't seem quite real. The writer definitely shows potential,though. Let's have more.

A VERY EXCITING HOT STORY. EXCELLENT WRITING DO HOPE THERE'S OTHER PARTS TO FOLLOW UP ON THIS FANTASTIC STORY.

I thought the story was just a bit too unbelievable. I mean, the scenes a bit too quick, and a bit too forward like directions (insert piece A into slot B, action).

Otherwise, I def think potential.

And I think Peter + the Mother in the story was really taking advantage...lol. My thought throughout this story was, this guy is using the mother to get to the daughter! lol

A lovely account, and for a first story well-written. It could do with a bit of tidying round the edges, but you have the makings of a good writer.

Cool story!

but the dialogue is totally unrealistic, fix that and you will be a very good writer.

A well written story about every mans dream.

This story plot moved way to fast. With the advent of mother helping seduce her daughter it just didn't jell in the fast pace writing. Couldn't believe it as written.

Had trouble with mother and daughter in a threesome with mom's boyfriend. What or how the shaving became a trend again after a 100 years is beyond me. I've always enjoyed a hairy pussy and from the description of the blond on the daughter brought back memories of a charming girl named Jennifer. Too each his own.