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Wishing..
Being married to such a lady as Kate, I am still looking for my out and my Sarah.. Thanks for the story of Hope..
Good
This was a good story, but could use some work. An editor would help in some places. Dialogue, for example. I think it's the hardest thing to write, and an editor would be very helpful. Some of it is choppy, some is clunky, and in the exchange between Geoff and Thomas, there are big paragraphs but no indication of who is talking, or what they're thinking/feeling. That would give the story some depth, I think. And Geoff seems kind of weak, even by his own admission. I'd like to see something where he stands up for himself. He could tell of Kate, for example. Or simply take some time to think; he seems easily led.
Thanks
I enjoyed this story.
Excellent story!
I am only sorry that there was not more of it. Thank you for a really fine tale.
Fun Tale
But I should that the father would worry about the submissiveness of this man. After all he is leaving the company to------ Oh I see, the daughter, Sarah.
wow
a family of sluts all of them
Good, but...
What a wuss. Why do I seem to read about British men being constantly portrayed as weak characters. This must be part of the emasculation of men in today's atmosphere.
GOOD STORY
glad his soon to be ex wife gets nothing at all for being such a whore and he and his new wife will get every thing....just proves the old adage....CHEATS NEVER PROSPER
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