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Heather's Secret

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by Anonymous

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by BrettJ06/18/09

From the Author

Some might wonder how these should be read, as they have all been one-shot stories. I hope this helps.

Start with "An Empty House & A Full Pussy" - both chapters. From there, the characters are mentioned in "There Is Baking & There is Cooking" and "Audacious Aunt Alexus" introduces their aunt to the mix. "Heather & Bryan Have Fun" is next, then we go to "Heather's Day Out" and "Bryan's Christmas Present" and here we are. Incidentally, Heather pops up in "Vickie's Venture" as well.

Thanks for the kind words - much appreciated

BrettJ

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by digdaddyrich06/18/09

A very good short story

Damn good story, short and to the point, but yet very erotic and sexual. As far as I'm concerned, as long as Mom got fucked, it's a good story. Thanks for the good story.....Rich

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by Anonymous06/18/09

Dialog

Good story, plenty of jerk potential... But I hate it when the dialog sucks. Before you write the dialog out, run it through your head. Say it out loud if you have to. Ask yourself, do normal people talk like this?

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by Anonymous10/27/09

so-so

i don't know what their fight was about but it seems very unlikely that seeing an all girl orgy tape would make it better i really doubt he would have even watched it and sure wouldn't have made up so quickly try to keep it atleast sounding realistic and believable please or put it in the fantacy area

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by Anonymous10/26/10

idiot

only a real idiot writer writes a series and give the chapters different titles. ALL CHAPTERS OF A SERIES HAVE TO HAVE THE SAME TITLE JUST NUMBERED TO TELL WHAT ORDER READ THEM IN GET A GOOD EDITOR AND DO A REWRITE AND TITLE THEM PROPERLY

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by unicorn6410/17/13

Another 5 star vote.

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