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stupid shit
this shit was dumb, u should have continued more, u just left me hanging, i have taken shits better then reading this story
Chapter 2 is coming
This is chapter 1 and I have many ideas for what's going to come next in the story. The ending is abrupt to leave you in anticipation for chapter 2.
Victoria
nice buildup
Very nice buildup and use of everyday context. I look forward to reading where this will go next. I especially enjoy reading sensual erotica from a woman's perspective. Men could learn a lot about women by reading this sort of work.
Fantastic
I'm not just referring to this piece, but your writing in general and overall; you're a talented writer. What I particularly enjoy is the way in which you draw the reader in until it seems as if we are almost sitting on your lap, well I can but hope.
I am starting to write for Lit and hopefully I can persuade you to read my stuff as it gets on the site. More importantly though is how can I persuade you to reply, so that we can keep in touch? Any suggestions please send to london_james2010@yahoo.co.uk
Thanks a lot and best of luck
James
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