This story is an excellent example of the fine writing in the non~erotic category,that makes a refreshing change of pace from the erotic.
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Anonymous06/21/09
I have read
all your stories so far and this one is the best of them.I gave them all top marks and am doing the same for this one.It so good to know that there are still a few good authors left on this site,even if they are outnumbered by the dross that call theselves writers.
I know it's not the usual thing to do, but I have a couple of comments about the category I put this story in.
I thought about Loving Wives slot, but it obvious doesn't belong there. There is no real romance until the very end so I didn't use that category either.
I put it in Mature because the main character is an older man. My problem is I don't believe this category gets the number of readers that the other two slots do. I obviously want my stories read by as many people as possible.
To get this diatribe posted I have to rate the story. You know what rating I have to give to my own work. LOL
Any suggestions for future stories? Y'all can email me through this site. Thanks for listening.
You are a superior storyteller. I've read a number of your stories, and they are all excellent. I consider this one was better than most of the others. Keep on writing! Thanks.
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Anonymous11/22/09
Great story!
What a delightful story! What a welcome change from stories where all the women have huge breasts and huge amounts of vaginal fluids and all the men have huge penises and huge amounts of semen.
The story was one of the best i've read in a long time...thankyou
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Anonymous07/10/10
Great story, loved it!
After reading a couple of your other story's, recon I'm gonna have to read the rest.
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Anonymous07/12/10
What are you doing here?
Dear God man. You should be writing novels and short stories and selling them. I am an avid(read that rabid) reader of anything I can get my hands on. This story is right up there with any of them. Great reading. Loved it.
Fred Grover
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Anonymous08/30/10
amazing
you are an amazing writer. this is definitely the quality of published work. i hope to be picking up you work in a bookstore soon
You're right! I missed this one the first time around because of the category. It really is not the usual April-November tale either, but it is great. When are you going to do a New York Times bestseller, Woody? I will buy it....
a little far fetched due to the three state thing( the mann act i think it is) but otherwise lovely ( and taking someone to a grave to introduce them, not so strange, i have done it and had it done to me, i introduce women i am dating to my grandparents, and was once introduced to an ex-husband that died, so yes strange, but not weird)
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Anonymous01/13/11
Wonderful
..but I must have got something in my eye. I am ridiculously sentimental, and this story really got to me.
One of the very best.
Don't just love it when the bad guy get just a little bit of what he deserves. Child molesters should be on the end of a short rope over a long drop.
Another great story. Thanks
Peter.
Sorry to point this out, because I do hold a high degree of regard and esteem for our military personnel and veterans, but I really can't take it any longer. It's UNITED STATES MARINE CORPS - the "s" doesn't make this a plural form of the word "Corp"; Corps is its own word. Look it up in a dictionary if you doubt me on this one.
Not Corp. (That's an abbreviation for "Corporation")
It's Corps (pronounced "Core"). It's not an abbreviation; it's its own singular word, and is not to be shortened in any way, shape or form...as that's just demeaning to the institution and to those who honorably serve within it.
The "Gunny" in my own family would tan my hide - either literally or verbally - for making such an error, so I have to bring this to your attention if only to educate for your future writing work.
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Anonymous09/12/12
Wonderful story
Can't argue with a story that saves two girls and brings true love to a crusty old jarhead. Semper Fi.
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Anonymous02/14/13
Excellent
Ecelletn story. Please bring us some more of this. You could have upped the ante by having Ralph put in jail for molesting the girls and, if he collected the insurance money, demand restitution or sell this house if he spent it.
As always, woodmanone has written another excellent short story. What troubles me is the short shrift paid to the character of Ralph.
Once in custody of the Sheriff's Department and the accusation of child molestation was made, a full background investigation would have begun. True, it would have been because of the friendship between the Sheriff and O'Rourke and because the girls were the correct color to warrant police protection.
My experience as a volunteer counselor with abused women and children is that abusers do not live in a vacuum. Almost invariably they have long rap sheets for an assortment of crimes going back through the juvie system. Ralph would have popped up as a parole violator{leaving jurisdiction} or probation or wants for any number of priors.
Another concern was the actions of the principal at the girl's former school to assist Ralph in tracking the girls. By law and statue at local, state and Federal levels, school officials are required to investigate and report possible child endangerment.
I would think that school district would be vulnerable to a lawsuit on behalf of the girls.
My wife and I took in her granddaughter to raise, while the girl's mother was having a very rough time of it. As could be expected, the girl got into some trouble, worst being defending a friend from a couple of older boys. The school we had placed her in, did an investigation of me because I was not a blood relative. No, I did not teach her how to fight, she came by it naturally on the soccer field and ballet. Them girls are brutal! The two bullies never expected that little girl to do a savate kick to their thick skulls. She did receive counseling to address her issues and to learn anger management.
I expected that the school officials would check my background. I did not take offense. I would only have taken offense if they had failed to practice due diligence.
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Anonymous09/27/13
Another Masterful Writing!
This is why I keep reading through the library of works by this writer, never been unhappy yet and this kept the grammar/context idiots away, no whiners allowed.
Great stuff.
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Anonymous12/26/14
as always
I just guess I like your kind of writing.
I keep coming across your stories when I need a lift
am too lazy to sign--
Butch
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Anonymous08/29/15
great
I am very good at English grammar but i got stuck can you help? What comes after "good, better, best, ???".
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com
Yes, another great story. You have a way with words and your stories usually make me smile. It is so nice to have a 'family' live happily ever after. I do think that the molester got off too easy, should have been more punishment for what he did to the 2 young girls. Thank you for a really good story.
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Anonymous09/30/16
Well Done
Okay, when I wasn't smiling, I was laughing. You had all of the elements for a wonderful read. Thanks for sharing and giving me a warm feeling day. BK
English
Satisfaction
This story is an excellent example of the fine writing in the non~erotic category,that makes a refreshing change of pace from the erotic.
I have read
all your stories so far and this one is the best of them.I gave them all top marks and am doing the same for this one.It so good to know that there are still a few good authors left on this site,even if they are outnumbered by the dross that call theselves writers.
Good read
Well done Woodman. Nice idea and well written. I am looking forward to your next story.
Not the usual thing to do
I know it's not the usual thing to do, but I have a couple of comments about the category I put this story in.
I thought about Loving Wives slot, but it obvious doesn't belong there. There is no real romance until the very end so I didn't use that category either.
I put it in Mature because the main character is an older man. My problem is I don't believe this category gets the number of readers that the other two slots do. I obviously want my stories read by as many people as possible.
To get this diatribe posted I have to rate the story. You know what rating I have to give to my own work. LOL
Any suggestions for future stories? Y'all can email me through this site. Thanks for listening.
WOW!
Good concept, well written. Now I must see what else you have written. I so thoughly enjoyed this one. Keep writing.
Great writing
You are a superior storyteller. I've read a number of your stories, and they are all excellent. I consider this one was better than most of the others. Keep on writing! Thanks.
Great story!
What a delightful story! What a welcome change from stories where all the women have huge breasts and huge amounts of vaginal fluids and all the men have huge penises and huge amounts of semen.
life
The story was one of the best i've read in a long time...thankyou
Great story, loved it!
After reading a couple of your other story's, recon I'm gonna have to read the rest.
What are you doing here?
Dear God man. You should be writing novels and short stories and selling them. I am an avid(read that rabid) reader of anything I can get my hands on. This story is right up there with any of them. Great reading. Loved it.
Fred Grover
amazing
you are an amazing writer. this is definitely the quality of published work. i hope to be picking up you work in a bookstore soon
Another Great Story
You're right! I missed this one the first time around because of the category. It really is not the usual April-November tale either, but it is great. When are you going to do a New York Times bestseller, Woody? I will buy it....
loved it
a little far fetched due to the three state thing( the mann act i think it is) but otherwise lovely ( and taking someone to a grave to introduce them, not so strange, i have done it and had it done to me, i introduce women i am dating to my grandparents, and was once introduced to an ex-husband that died, so yes strange, but not weird)
Wonderful
..but I must have got something in my eye. I am ridiculously sentimental, and this story really got to me.
One of the very best.
What a great story
yours are the best tales on this website.
Outstanding!
Ooo-Rah! What a beautiful story. I thought it was one of the nicest stories that I've read in quite a while. Keep up the great work.
MP
HOOAH !!
Gotta say that this story is one that I thoroughly enjoyed-Thank you.
P.S.
Paratroopers say Hooah.......:-)
One of my favorite type of stories
I love rescue/romance stories and this one was a very enjoyable read. Thanks woodmanone!
uh, wait a minute...
cure story, but it belongs in Readers Digest, not Literotica! How in the heck do you put a story with no sex in a sex story website?? hahaha
I m really starting to like how you think -
OK Gunny -
Nice story line and great execution - the sister was an awesome twist and totally predictable outcome but just right -
Nice feel good story.
No sex, but leaves you with a great feeling!
Great Story
Don't just love it when the bad guy get just a little bit of what he deserves. Child molesters should be on the end of a short rope over a long drop.
Another great story. Thanks
Peter.
Gunny?
Sorry to point this out, because I do hold a high degree of regard and esteem for our military personnel and veterans, but I really can't take it any longer. It's UNITED STATES MARINE CORPS - the "s" doesn't make this a plural form of the word "Corp"; Corps is its own word. Look it up in a dictionary if you doubt me on this one.
Not Corp. (That's an abbreviation for "Corporation")
It's Corps (pronounced "Core"). It's not an abbreviation; it's its own singular word, and is not to be shortened in any way, shape or form...as that's just demeaning to the institution and to those who honorably serve within it.
The "Gunny" in my own family would tan my hide - either literally or verbally - for making such an error, so I have to bring this to your attention if only to educate for your future writing work.
Wonderful story
Can't argue with a story that saves two girls and brings true love to a crusty old jarhead. Semper Fi.
Excellent
Ecelletn story. Please bring us some more of this. You could have upped the ante by having Ralph put in jail for molesting the girls and, if he collected the insurance money, demand restitution or sell this house if he spent it.
troubling
As always, woodmanone has written another excellent short story. What troubles me is the short shrift paid to the character of Ralph.
Once in custody of the Sheriff's Department and the accusation of child molestation was made, a full background investigation would have begun. True, it would have been because of the friendship between the Sheriff and O'Rourke and because the girls were the correct color to warrant police protection.
My experience as a volunteer counselor with abused women and children is that abusers do not live in a vacuum. Almost invariably they have long rap sheets for an assortment of crimes going back through the juvie system. Ralph would have popped up as a parole violator{leaving jurisdiction} or probation or wants for any number of priors.
Another concern was the actions of the principal at the girl's former school to assist Ralph in tracking the girls. By law and statue at local, state and Federal levels, school officials are required to investigate and report possible child endangerment.
I would think that school district would be vulnerable to a lawsuit on behalf of the girls.
My wife and I took in her granddaughter to raise, while the girl's mother was having a very rough time of it. As could be expected, the girl got into some trouble, worst being defending a friend from a couple of older boys. The school we had placed her in, did an investigation of me because I was not a blood relative. No, I did not teach her how to fight, she came by it naturally on the soccer field and ballet. Them girls are brutal! The two bullies never expected that little girl to do a savate kick to their thick skulls. She did receive counseling to address her issues and to learn anger management.
I expected that the school officials would check my background. I did not take offense. I would only have taken offense if they had failed to practice due diligence.
Another Masterful Writing!
This is why I keep reading through the library of works by this writer, never been unhappy yet and this kept the grammar/context idiots away, no whiners allowed.
Great stuff.
as always
I just guess I like your kind of writing.
I keep coming across your stories when I need a lift
am too lazy to sign--
Butch
great
I am very good at English grammar but i got stuck can you help? What comes after "good, better, best, ???".
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com
And Yet Another One!
Yes, another great story. You have a way with words and your stories usually make me smile. It is so nice to have a 'family' live happily ever after. I do think that the molester got off too easy, should have been more punishment for what he did to the 2 young girls. Thank you for a really good story.
Well Done
Okay, when I wasn't smiling, I was laughing. You had all of the elements for a wonderful read. Thanks for sharing and giving me a warm feeling day. BK
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