by Samuelx
While the content of your story promises to be quite erotic, your execution leaves a lot to be desired. Plus, your modesty is a huge turn-off.
You would have to try really hard to write something worse than this... even writing gibberish would be better than this.
Wow! You have a gigantic ego and your story wasn't very interesting or erotic. Not enough detail about the other participants, it was all about you. Apparently it was a lot of fun, not so much for your readers.
cheri8