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Messed up
What the hell!. Why would you kill Ashira?. I know this is your story about Mark and Melinda, but after all the other two have gone thru that you would kill her character is screwed up.
More Drama?
You know...since the very beginning of this series I liked it a lot. But then it seemed like every other paragraph...more and more drama was happening. I hung in there and tried to put a lot of it on the back burner. Truthfully...the amount of shit that you put Ashira and Jake through has been not only unbelievable at this point...but unnecessary and most importantly- UNREALISTIC. Don't get me wrong. Theres always room for a bit of drama in stories and I love drama....who doesn't?....but every time you blink here...just about every one of these characters have had experiences with kidnappings, attempted murder, death, blah blah. I'm not being mean here but trying to be realistic. Too much drama. I can't read anymore of this ongoing series with all the spinoffs. This last one totally killed it all together for me. It becomes a bit much when every time there's a sliver of happiness here for any of these characters....you have to make someone die or whatever in the next chapter. You, as a writer should know and understand also that you're writing these stories for people to read. We, as readers, become 'fans' of these stories and will connect with these characters. By you having these horrible things CONSTANTLY happening over & over again to them...well...it will affect the readers too. We read these stories, become 'close' to the characters and its VERY upsetting that you are always having someone getting hurt, killed, kidnapped, etc, etc... WAYYYYYYYYY too much for me. I tried...I really liked the characters but this has all become way too damn depressing to read anymore.
I wish you luck with your writing in the future....
Don't give up on it yet ...
Don't give up on it yet ... I can't say more w/o giving something away ... I'm in the process of writing the next chapter, and I promise, it should make everything a little more clear.
Too much, too fast
Full disclosure: I haven't read Awakening of Love. Even so, it seemed like things moved way too fast in this story. Perhaps the next chapter will set everything to rights, but still... it's like the characters are racing from one unfortunate event to the next. They need time to recover. Too much drama kills a story just as much as not enough.
Love it!
Love it! Yes it was a little too fast! Ashira dies in the second chapter! What! I cant even believe she died! I dont like that! But things do happen i guess! Cant wait to see what happens next! Please more and soon! Thanks!!
you cannot kill ashira
NO way you cannot kill the amin character who has been through so much wat about jake n the kids.
Don't know about this turn....
I don't know what to say....I am really in shock right now...
I am done
No longer will I read this writer's stories.
why did you kill her off
that was not right for you to let her
die she went thur a lot of problems
poor jake i dont think i am going to read any more
of your stories if you keep letting the main
people die off
tired and ready to pack it in...
this is way too much drama. ashira of all people to kill off. really just think about it ashira she is the reason this even exist she's the reason i even read this story for her and jake. yes i do know that this is mark and melinda's story but really the main character who has been through so much. seriously why kill her off it doesn't make sense. But what it does make me is completely tired and ready to throw in the towel with this series in general. Everyone was happy and enjoying themselves and you go and kill one of them off. Unless Melinda is seeing the future or just having a wacked out dream i don't see how you're going to be able to redeem this story. i'll read the next chapter to see if you really didn't kill ashira off but if you did i'm through with this series. In all honesty yes I know in reality there's drama but this is really way too much drama for one person the up's and down's and loops is worse than a roller coaster ride. All I can say is this I'm partially dreading the next chapter.
tired and ready to pack it in...
this is way too much drama. ashira of all people to kill off. really just think about it ashira she is the reason this even exist she's the reason i even read this story for her and jake. yes i do know that this is mark and melinda's story but really the main character who has been through so much. seriously why kill her off it doesn't make sense. But what it does make me is completely tired and ready to throw in the towel with this series in general. Everyone was happy and enjoying themselves and you go and kill one of them off. Unless Melinda is seeing the future or just having a wacked out dream i don't see how you're going to be able to redeem this story. i'll read the next chapter to see if you really didn't kill ashira off but if you did i'm through with this series. In all honesty yes I know in reality there's drama but this is really way too much drama for one person the up's and down's and loops is worse than a roller coaster ride. All I can say is this I'm partially dreading the next chapter.
evil
really you gotta be feeling really bad or angry if you're gonna kill off ashira. I don't understand why you picked her as the person you're killing off. ?er character was the glue for the story she's the one that brought everyone together and killing her off takes away a lot from the story. I don't see the point of continuing with this story anymore. I'm done. I wish all the luck in future. Here's a bit of parting advice...slow the story line down a little you're throwing too much at the reader in one submission it's almost unbearable at times.
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