I know it is a flash story, but I liked it and would like to have more depth. Again I liked the story and your writing.
The question I have is: If the affair was four years old then both girls would have been old enough to understand. Just my selfish thoughts. I couldn't have done what the husband did.
I also know that it is just a story. In real life a home kept together for the children can be worse on the kids than a break up would be. I speak from experience. Thanks for a good read. Keep it up.
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Anonymous06/25/09
To short.
This needed more in order to be a story. The characters are poorly defined and the events are frankly uninteresting because there is just not much to them.
walk in on his wife and her lover and beat him to a pulp. He didn't beat the creep physically but did so in a most effective way. The creeps that normally write on this site are weak little drippy dicked men that whak off while the imagine that thier (REAL) wives are sexy and beautiful instead of slobs with fat hanging off their fat asses. Loved the story
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Anonymous06/25/09
Love it!
The Reason i love this story is that It doesn't portray a person so sex-starved that he can't wait a month to have sex. much of these story act like sex is everything when it's not. and I finally find a story where the main character is celibate for at least 4 years, and that's great!
but I would have prefered that the husband simply tell her of the divorce when he confronted her and then continue it where she realises that she is not rich at the divorce hearing. Still a great story keep them up.
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Anonymous06/28/09
she must be glad to get rid of the insufferable
insecure jerk. sure her girls will look after her fine.
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Anonymous06/28/09
Gawd, she is better off without him.
So rather than confronting her, he runs away like a coward and takes pills?!? bwahahaha. Then he's noving to "india" wow...they can have him. He's a loser.
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Anonymous06/28/09
rather unbeliveable story???
You write a clean, understandable text. But you leave me with a feeling that you are not disclosing to the reader your real intent in writing this story. What's the timetable here? You learned that Kelly began cheating on you with Dennis after you told the sexual dysfunction drug 8 years ago. She cheated for four years. The you younger daughter got married at age 20 (you were 40 then and living in India). Spin of on this is that you were 19 when Amy was conceived. I assume that your older daughter is maybe one or two years older than Amy. Thus, you and Kelly were married in your teens. How old precisely was Kelly at the time of your marriage? Additionally, I don't understand why you were experimenting on yourself with the sexual dysfunction drug you helped develop, which as a consequence of, your wife, eight years and 2 months ago started cheating on you. I don't blame her; you'll certainly a weirdo. Then, you stop the drug and "it's a miracle" your are immediately back to your normal pre-drug induced state - after four years of taking the drug, you have got to by kidding! My take on this story is that Kelly cheated on you because you did not show a sexual interest in her and you also disrespected her by taking the sexually inhibitory drug. Is this story to be continued so that you can explain the situation more clearly? RAG
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Anonymous09/11/09
THE END
the score is for the end! where it was justice delayed, it was justice served on a very cold plate, for both. BOTH had their lives tuned upside down, and he walks away and ready for those indian women (and others that may be there)
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Anonymous09/12/09
Sometimes I wonder what drugs some people are on
To suggest the woman is better off without him is to imply in some way he was the problem. The only way you could be there is to have a brain disfunction. He held it together to get the girls into their lives then be collapsed the world on the two cheats and liars. Then he walks off to India where he has knowledge to sell and a white body that most women there would worship. The wife is so intelligent and gets such a good salary as a receptionist at age 40 she will be fine in life, laffs. The bozo she fucks with was totally dependent on his wife and family for his life and livelyhood, oh well maybe he isnt to old to enlist in the French Foreign Legion. He damn sure doesnt want to stay in the same town as his ex in laws! Back to those taking drugs, you really need to clean up your lives.
The writing was flowing; unfortunately the same could not be said about the coherency of the husband’s character/motivations. His M.O: consisted of a combination of measures, you’d be hard pressed to believe could be humanly possible. Take a voluntary self emasculation over four (!) years, combined with the mission impossible of a normal show of affection to the woman he knows is cheating on him over the same period of time., all for the purpose of presenting a false façade of a happily married couple for the grown up children… You have to wonder what lesson they could really take from this charade about married life…
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Anonymous01/18/10
Boringgggggggggg!!!!!!!!
This is to boring for readers digest.
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Anonymous02/01/10
Liked this stort story.
I liked this story and it was a real life situation, had meaning, and summarized the family situation nicely. Is the story to be continued? RAG
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Anonymous02/01/10
Why
To go without love and sex for 5 years, to give all his money away just to spite a selfish cunt is just fucking stupid. I think I know why she fucked around on him.
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Anonymous02/13/10
why so long?
The self imposed celibacy could have been shortened, when the children finished their schooling. That choice to so completely go without? In any case, the manner of their complete destruction of their lives of the cheaters was well done. It went from the illusion of a problem, to genuine problems for them, and a solution for him.
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Anonymous07/19/10
so good
He resolved it with this cold blooded calculation, just getting it right for him and his daughters. There was no use in seeking something with Kelly that was simply not there. Public assistance for her and Dennis will probably not stay with her during his transition and after. Calmly and quietly and complete.
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Anonymous09/01/10
Another good one
But too short , your a good writer and have good stories , how about one going into more depth next time ? this was a good read anyway .
Excellent story. However there is a little mistake only. I would have writen that the husband remains the same town in a condo and look for a other mate for him. He could see his grandchildren and he could laugh about ex.
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Anonymous09/17/11
I Wish...
Good story! Ignore all the jack-offs who whine and cry and talk trash. If they're such AMAZING authors, why aren't they on the best sellers list? At least you are brave enough to "try". My only wish?? That I was as calm and composed as your main character. "4 years and 2 monthes ago..." I would have tortured, maimed, and killed them both using all the nasty skills I brought home from a nasty war, serving a nasty populace in just one more nasty country.
Stupid, just stupid. Can you imagine being this jerks neighbor? You borrow his hedge trimmer and forget to return it. He waits 4 years and then cuts all of your trees and shrubs down to the roots.
Which is worse, a wife that cheated, or a husband that pretends to love his wife for 4 years. The wife deserved retribution, but who is the biggest idiot? The husband, because he pounded his pud for 4 years while being a lying coward. He gives his wife everything except sex for 4 years while he grinds his teeth down to nubs with hate. This story is just about setting up revenge. In real life this guy would be Mr. Wilson when he got old.
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Anonymous04/22/13
beautiful!
I love a spouse who takes their time, who plans out the correct retribution toward the cheating mate. Just because it takes a while to lay it all out, as long as they get what is coming to them in the end, well, that is beautiful!
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Anonymous04/23/13
Revenge is a dish best served soft?
What kind of husband takes a drug that keeps him from having sex for four years so he can pretend to have a loving relationship with his cheating wife for the sake of the children? I imagine you wrote the story because you thought of the twist ending first, but you could write a better story if you start with the characters' personalities and motivations and then let the story flow from there.
Again you've written a unique BTB story I really enjoyed!!
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Anonymous06/14/13
to short
The only problem I have with this story is its to short but you said that up front.
I wish you had drug it out a little more to make it more interesting.
The story could have a little more flesh on the bones, but is does illustrate a point. There are men out there that take their commitments very seriously. When you get married, you make a life long commitment to your spouse. It is done in a public ceremony and written on paper. When you father children, you make a life long commitment in blood, your own blood. There are many men without honor in this world. They do not keep their word. There are many women without honor as well. Generally speaking, it has been my experience that honor does not mean the same thing to the sexes. Women tend to adapt, rationalize and justify their bad behavior. Men generally are not as flexible when it comes to reality. Honoring your commitment to your children even while living with a betraying bitch is a living hell. When a man with honor is on a mission he can walk through hell to honor his commitment. He will get stronger, his resolve will harden, and he will achieve his goal. Those people without honor are weak. When they find themselves walking through hell they will be torn to shreds.
And good one for the most part - it needs a bit of a reaction from the wife now that she knows what has been happening and what has now happened but other than that a very good -
I liked the calculation and the tone of the main character.
I liked that the other man wasn't some asshole who was dissing the hubby. We read too often some guy verbally abusing the hubby. This guy just enjoyed the fact that he was getting a free piece of ass...which I think most of us would enjoy re adultery. No need to be nasty about it.
I do not buy that she wasn't emotionally invested in the guy after 4 years. He is going to find another job and she'll probably be warming the OM's bed....though it probably won't work out. From what I understand, less than 10% of relationships started by infidelity actually work out.
Still...sad truth...she'll find someone else. Her lifestyle will take a bump, but as long as guys think with their peckers and try to buy affection with their wallet, she'll find someone...at least for the short term.
This was sufficiently good that I actually looked it up. Now consider it favorited
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Anonymous09/29/13
Perfect
Oh my! How actually perfectly written this is. I wish all the cuckolding stories were written this same way. And to have some of the ones who think they want to be cuckolded really talked to. It will cost you your marriage in the end.
How did he have the stamina or will-power to wait 4 years? If the youngest just got married, she had to be old enough 4 years earlier to handle a divorce for a cheating mother. He should never have waited 4 years....way too long. He should have got his finances in shape and dumped the cheating wife way earlier. How could he live with her for 4 years and not strangle her? Good ending though...but it should have happened years earlier. Thank for the story.
What's to prevent the "daughter's" from supporting their mother for the rest of her life?
Seems a bit open ended. However, I do like the theme and the plot in general.
Thank you for the story, please keep writing.
Either way the kids know the mom is a whore
I would have divorced her for day one, not waited years for something that might have not come, the marriages. You dont keep trash, you throw it away.
nice work
It's an uncommon approach, but I like the story.
-- KK in Texas
Good story.
Well worth the read. Well written as well. As a short story it hit the mark. Well Done.
Too short.
Good story but it needs filling out.
Need more of the story
I know it is a flash story, but I liked it and would like to have more depth. Again I liked the story and your writing.
The question I have is: If the affair was four years old then both girls would have been old enough to understand. Just my selfish thoughts. I couldn't have done what the husband did.
I also know that it is just a story. In real life a home kept together for the children can be worse on the kids than a break up would be. I speak from experience. Thanks for a good read. Keep it up.
To short.
This needed more in order to be a story. The characters are poorly defined and the events are frankly uninteresting because there is just not much to them.
How many times have I wanted a husband to
walk in on his wife and her lover and beat him to a pulp. He didn't beat the creep physically but did so in a most effective way. The creeps that normally write on this site are weak little drippy dicked men that whak off while the imagine that thier (REAL) wives are sexy and beautiful instead of slobs with fat hanging off their fat asses. Loved the story
Love it!
The Reason i love this story is that It doesn't portray a person so sex-starved that he can't wait a month to have sex. much of these story act like sex is everything when it's not. and I finally find a story where the main character is celibate for at least 4 years, and that's great!
I LOVE A HAPPY ENDING
A truly good feel good story.
Brilliant
but I would have prefered that the husband simply tell her of the divorce when he confronted her and then continue it where she realises that she is not rich at the divorce hearing. Still a great story keep them up.
she must be glad to get rid of the insufferable
insecure jerk. sure her girls will look after her fine.
Gawd, she is better off without him.
So rather than confronting her, he runs away like a coward and takes pills?!? bwahahaha. Then he's noving to "india" wow...they can have him. He's a loser.
rather unbeliveable story???
You write a clean, understandable text. But you leave me with a feeling that you are not disclosing to the reader your real intent in writing this story. What's the timetable here? You learned that Kelly began cheating on you with Dennis after you told the sexual dysfunction drug 8 years ago. She cheated for four years. The you younger daughter got married at age 20 (you were 40 then and living in India). Spin of on this is that you were 19 when Amy was conceived. I assume that your older daughter is maybe one or two years older than Amy. Thus, you and Kelly were married in your teens. How old precisely was Kelly at the time of your marriage? Additionally, I don't understand why you were experimenting on yourself with the sexual dysfunction drug you helped develop, which as a consequence of, your wife, eight years and 2 months ago started cheating on you. I don't blame her; you'll certainly a weirdo. Then, you stop the drug and "it's a miracle" your are immediately back to your normal pre-drug induced state - after four years of taking the drug, you have got to by kidding! My take on this story is that Kelly cheated on you because you did not show a sexual interest in her and you also disrespected her by taking the sexually inhibitory drug. Is this story to be continued so that you can explain the situation more clearly? RAG
THE END
the score is for the end! where it was justice delayed, it was justice served on a very cold plate, for both. BOTH had their lives tuned upside down, and he walks away and ready for those indian women (and others that may be there)
Sometimes I wonder what drugs some people are on
To suggest the woman is better off without him is to imply in some way he was the problem. The only way you could be there is to have a brain disfunction. He held it together to get the girls into their lives then be collapsed the world on the two cheats and liars. Then he walks off to India where he has knowledge to sell and a white body that most women there would worship. The wife is so intelligent and gets such a good salary as a receptionist at age 40 she will be fine in life, laffs. The bozo she fucks with was totally dependent on his wife and family for his life and livelyhood, oh well maybe he isnt to old to enlist in the French Foreign Legion. He damn sure doesnt want to stay in the same town as his ex in laws! Back to those taking drugs, you really need to clean up your lives.
playing dead for four years...
The writing was flowing; unfortunately the same could not be said about the coherency of the husband’s character/motivations. His M.O: consisted of a combination of measures, you’d be hard pressed to believe could be humanly possible. Take a voluntary self emasculation over four (!) years, combined with the mission impossible of a normal show of affection to the woman he knows is cheating on him over the same period of time., all for the purpose of presenting a false façade of a happily married couple for the grown up children… You have to wonder what lesson they could really take from this charade about married life…
Boringgggggggggg!!!!!!!!
This is to boring for readers digest.
Liked this stort story.
I liked this story and it was a real life situation, had meaning, and summarized the family situation nicely. Is the story to be continued? RAG
Why
To go without love and sex for 5 years, to give all his money away just to spite a selfish cunt is just fucking stupid. I think I know why she fucked around on him.
why so long?
The self imposed celibacy could have been shortened, when the children finished their schooling. That choice to so completely go without? In any case, the manner of their complete destruction of their lives of the cheaters was well done. It went from the illusion of a problem, to genuine problems for them, and a solution for him.
so good
He resolved it with this cold blooded calculation, just getting it right for him and his daughters. There was no use in seeking something with Kelly that was simply not there. Public assistance for her and Dennis will probably not stay with her during his transition and after. Calmly and quietly and complete.
Another good one
But too short , your a good writer and have good stories , how about one going into more depth next time ? this was a good read anyway .
Cold, Calculated and congenial.
Not at all pleasant thought to face by him and then given (shared) to her as the result. ........ you reap what you sow.
The presentation though not vicious, the original action and resulting consequences, heart breaking. what you do will come back to you, Karma?
and lastly from comments, you anonymous dolt
great story and writing, dd
x
take that u poor slut
Revenge is a dish best served cold
Excellent story. However there is a little mistake only. I would have writen that the husband remains the same town in a condo and look for a other mate for him. He could see his grandchildren and he could laugh about ex.
I Wish...
Good story! Ignore all the jack-offs who whine and cry and talk trash. If they're such AMAZING authors, why aren't they on the best sellers list? At least you are brave enough to "try". My only wish?? That I was as calm and composed as your main character. "4 years and 2 monthes ago..." I would have tortured, maimed, and killed them both using all the nasty skills I brought home from a nasty war, serving a nasty populace in just one more nasty country.
ONLY 2 LOSERS
the 2 cheaters. Just like its supposed to be. TK U MLJ LV NV
Cheaters Never Win
I understand his thinking but FOUR YEARS? That's a long time to know what's going on. Oh well, such is life.
Oh wait, this is fantasy.
HA
Why give
away all the money, though? Since it's a fantasy, he should have squirreled it away.
Love it
I do love these stories about the unwilling cuckold who gets such thorough revenge.
you give the money to the kids
so the wife never gets it and has nothing at all left. he can go to work someplace else, she is now poor for the rest of her life.
4 un-FUCKING YEARS!
Stupid, just stupid. Can you imagine being this jerks neighbor? You borrow his hedge trimmer and forget to return it. He waits 4 years and then cuts all of your trees and shrubs down to the roots.
Which is worse, a wife that cheated, or a husband that pretends to love his wife for 4 years. The wife deserved retribution, but who is the biggest idiot? The husband, because he pounded his pud for 4 years while being a lying coward. He gives his wife everything except sex for 4 years while he grinds his teeth down to nubs with hate. This story is just about setting up revenge. In real life this guy would be Mr. Wilson when he got old.
beautiful!
I love a spouse who takes their time, who plans out the correct retribution toward the cheating mate. Just because it takes a while to lay it all out, as long as they get what is coming to them in the end, well, that is beautiful!
Revenge is a dish best served soft?
What kind of husband takes a drug that keeps him from having sex for four years so he can pretend to have a loving relationship with his cheating wife for the sake of the children? I imagine you wrote the story because you thought of the twist ending first, but you could write a better story if you start with the characters' personalities and motivations and then let the story flow from there.
So Cooool !
Again you've written a unique BTB story I really enjoyed!!
to short
The only problem I have with this story is its to short but you said that up front.
I wish you had drug it out a little more to make it more interesting.
Short Story
The story could have a little more flesh on the bones, but is does illustrate a point. There are men out there that take their commitments very seriously. When you get married, you make a life long commitment to your spouse. It is done in a public ceremony and written on paper. When you father children, you make a life long commitment in blood, your own blood. There are many men without honor in this world. They do not keep their word. There are many women without honor as well. Generally speaking, it has been my experience that honor does not mean the same thing to the sexes. Women tend to adapt, rationalize and justify their bad behavior. Men generally are not as flexible when it comes to reality. Honoring your commitment to your children even while living with a betraying bitch is a living hell. When a man with honor is on a mission he can walk through hell to honor his commitment. He will get stronger, his resolve will harden, and he will achieve his goal. Those people without honor are weak. When they find themselves walking through hell they will be torn to shreds.
Excellent
A cheating whore cunt skank twat wife gets hers in the end. And her lover also. Both should live in pain.
HA
A flash - yes
And good one for the most part - it needs a bit of a reaction from the wife now that she knows what has been happening and what has now happened but other than that a very good -
I liked the calculation and the tone of the main character.
I liked that the other man wasn't some asshole who was dissing the hubby. We read too often some guy verbally abusing the hubby. This guy just enjoyed the fact that he was getting a free piece of ass...which I think most of us would enjoy re adultery. No need to be nasty about it.
I do not buy that she wasn't emotionally invested in the guy after 4 years. He is going to find another job and she'll probably be warming the OM's bed....though it probably won't work out. From what I understand, less than 10% of relationships started by infidelity actually work out.
Still...sad truth...she'll find someone else. Her lifestyle will take a bump, but as long as guys think with their peckers and try to buy affection with their wallet, she'll find someone...at least for the short term.
This was sufficiently good that I actually looked it up. Now consider it favorited
Perfect
Oh my! How actually perfectly written this is. I wish all the cuckolding stories were written this same way. And to have some of the ones who think they want to be cuckolded really talked to. It will cost you your marriage in the end.
5*****
Excellent Modern Figaro Type my taste Revenge Story. I would have written an epiloge with Second Chance Woman............
Fantastic!
One of the best flash stories, ever!
4 YEARS OF PENANCE
all for a cheating wife who didn't appreciate or understand. TK U MLJ LV NV
Anything for the children...
Anything for the children...Then the sweet revenge....
Not impressed.... Staying for the kids is not a reason to endure that. He should have ruined her boss way before that
Too Long!
How did he have the stamina or will-power to wait 4 years? If the youngest just got married, she had to be old enough 4 years earlier to handle a divorce for a cheating mother. He should never have waited 4 years....way too long. He should have got his finances in shape and dumped the cheating wife way earlier. How could he live with her for 4 years and not strangle her? Good ending though...but it should have happened years earlier. Thank for the story.
Good But...
What's to prevent the "daughter's" from supporting their mother for the rest of her life?
Seems a bit open ended. However, I do like the theme and the plot in general.
Thank you for the story, please keep writing.
Yeah...
...what the last Anonymous guy said.
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