Quality and not Quantity should always be the objective of every story telling. But this story had neither.
Emotionally it stirred nothing but boredom for me.
- Mr X.
I couldn't get into the characters at all. The switch from suicide to screw was too unnatural, but they didn't seem to notice. And and the bit about seeing Honor in his eyes... It's a bad cliché, and it doesn't fit with the rest of the story. I think the "story" takes it away from being a good fuck story.
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Anonymous07/23/05
Not bad
I accually found the whole vampire thing kind of a turn on, well done
A typical awful read.
Quality and not Quantity should always be the objective of every story telling. But this story had neither.
Emotionally it stirred nothing but boredom for me.
- Mr X.
It's too shallow.
I couldn't get into the characters at all. The switch from suicide to screw was too unnatural, but they didn't seem to notice. And and the bit about seeing Honor in his eyes... It's a bad cliché, and it doesn't fit with the rest of the story. I think the "story" takes it away from being a good fuck story.
Not bad
I accually found the whole vampire thing kind of a turn on, well done
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