Cabin Fever Ch. 01

Outstanding!!!

Wonderful story I really enjoyed reading this and your other stroies. I can't wait to read the next & following chapters. Please post the next chapter soon.

Great beginning

Very hot, but could you please use some one to edit it? Hear and here are two different words, ok? thanks.

Too Quick

BrettJ it was too quick. It needed a bit more buildup, way to short. But it was HOT

Author Comments

Hi folks - recently it was suggested to me by Laurel that I should perhaps leave a note in one of my stories and say a few words. I think it's a great idea.

First, thanks for the comments - all well thought out. I appreciate that, because too often, we authors get comments like "sucked - hated it" which doesn't help. Someone telling me it was too short, for example, is constructive criticism. BTW, I agree - it was written as a quickie story, sometimes opening chapters are. Oh, and Montreal - I know the difference [ I edit for others ] the hear / here slipped by me and my spell check didn't catch it. Thanks for noticing though. I don't like having someone edit my work though - just a personal thing, but I will be more carefull in thee fewchur. LOL

Readers - as you may have noticed [ those who follow my stuff regularly ] I am trying to finish or add to some series. Anything in particular you're going buggy saying "When the f**k is he going to finish that?" It'd help me out.

Send me notes and keep reading - I am trying to add at least one a week, I won't hit homers [ or Barts ] every time, but I try my best.

Thanks

BrettJ in muggy Ontario

All they had to do to pass the rainy time

With bad weather, all they had to do was just fuck. Wouldn't it be nice if both women went home pregnant. Clare and Brent finally decide to live together, and have Gina move in with them. Brent, her brother, now husband, and Clare, his sister now wife, have their daughter to share all of the time. Because I like happy endings, life would be great!!!! Thanks for the story.............Rich

Short

The "does she/he know?" bit only to have the "secret" revealed in a few sentences is shorter than short. If it's that short, why bother? Why are they keeping secrets from one-another? Why does the sister have so many secret lovers?What's really annoying is the cliché that once the incest taboo is broken once, all other family members are fair game. It doesn't work that way. Yes, I know through experience. It's the person, not the relationship. The relationship can add to it, but the person comes first.

Nice Start!!!!

Brett that was nice start to the series with the mother Claire , the daughter Gina and Brent Uncle/father. I like how you described Gina coming into her own and wanting her uncle/daddy to take her virginity. I can hardly wait for the next chapter you write.

Delicious

What can I say but................. wish it was me in that cabin .

Sexy as hell.

I loved it. I wish the story was a bit longer. Hope there is more!

HOTT!!!!!

Fantastic beginning. I loved reading this chapter and I am waiting with bated breath for the second chapter. Please continue writing this story.

Yum, Yum!

Man I sure have dreamed about doing my niece that way. She has an ass that won't qiut! Yum! Yum!

great start!

one i did notice is in the paragraph after gina figured out thatbrent was her dad,you said, "Now it was Gina and Brent's turn to be rocked off their heels. Gina hadn't...", you wrote gina instead of claire. but other than that,a very good start to the story!!!

Very hot but it ended rather abruptly.