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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous06/29/09

damn

have you ever read a story over here?? your style is annoying and you need an editor 'cause it hurts
still thanks for the effort

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by Anonymous06/29/09

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by texasguy4906/29/09

NEEDS..................

MAJOR overhaul, editing, scripting and grammar/spell checking - let's see.... did I leave anything out? Oh yeah - might want to write to grown-ups not early teens.....

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by Anonymous06/29/09

14yo fiktion (sic)


btw, that's sic, not sick!

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by Anonymous06/29/09

Get An Editor!!!!!

Get An Editor!!!!!!!!!!

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by Anonymous06/30/09

Learn to write

Poorest story I've seen on the web, let alone this site.

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