Even though no one in the story was married the aspect of Gloria cheating on John allows the story to fold itself very nicely into the Loving Wives category. Well written and well executed.
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Anonymous06/29/09
Great plot and story writing
The author is a professional at writing and we are, so to speak, recipients of his talent. It's a fun story and has reached a stage in which this 'Loving Wives' story turns serious - at least that's my take. I'd assume she did not accept stipends on her scholarship being the daughter of a billionaire and the sole beneficiary(?). RAG
Considering all the hearts he broke before he met her, it's poetic justice. You write very well. Thanks!
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Anonymous06/30/09
re: Great plot and story writing
"The author is a professional at writing..."
Are you kidding me? This idiot makes mistakes a ten year old should know to avoid, such as knowing to start EVERY paragraph of contiguous quoted text with a quotation mark. This is not amateur writing, it's amateurish writing.
The list is long that explains why they should not marry: but the most important one is the one she insisted on: honesty. She was a liar. He feels bad and maybe he loved her, but at some point he will think about the relationship and realize that her feelings were selfish and that she used him for her own pleasure and need. I am impressed with your writing on this one and liked how the college boy became a man as he learned to love. I know author's do not like follow ups, but if he were my character I would write how he takes his lesson to heart, and goes out to have a life: wife, children, and career. And how she became what she chose to become: a whore for her family, a belonging to be traded. She makes it sound like a big sacrifice, but she in fact had a choice: love or money. Now he has a choice: die or go out and live his life. He is the better person if he will stop and think about it: and you think about that other story. Maybe they could cross paths 20 years later and she can see what she really missed out on.
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Anonymous06/30/09
Great Beginning
I agree with Simple49er.You should write a second chapter showing twenty years later what Gloria missed change love for money.
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Anonymous06/30/09
A bit late to react after the girl is gone.
Easy enough to walk into a wedding and make your case. Then let the girl decide. This guy is an all round coward. He deserved to lose the girl he loved.
For me it is complete. I recognize the symmetry of their maneuvers and the interesting twist of the fiancée not even being pissed off even though he did qualify the relation as an affair.. Thanks WM1
For me it is complete. I recognize the symmetry of their maneuvers and the interesting twist of the fiancée not even being pissed off even though he did qualify the relation as an affair.. Thanks WM1
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Anonymous07/01/09
Mystery could've wrote this story.
LOL. The famous Mystery could've wrote this story the way you incorporated his PUA tactics. Good job.
It's obvious you belong to the "torch the bitch" crowd. Why does it bother you how well the author writes a story. Isn't this an amateur erotic site, where very few are professional writers, if any. This is a site to read stories for your erotic entertainment, or is there another reason you're here.Noticed that the loving wives genre seems to attract the negative critics, one doesn't see them on any other genre. Wonder why?
5***** story! One of the best! Original and Creative!
Compared to what he was hoping to have--a smart beatiful girl of his dreams and $millions, no doubt he was miserable. Nevertheless, he still made out like a bandit. Not only did he get to fuck Gloria, he got a $50,000 Corvette, an apartment for a year, worth two or three thousand a month, and some expensive gifts. Therefore, he had a very good year.
Her affairs didn't seem to bother John and Gloria's much. Could the very rich have different beliefs and standards? Perhaps it is about maintaining wealth within the families and well bred children, and the other is just a little fun.
Another lame ending. Your stories start pretty well but you seem to run out of steam and not finish them well.
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Anonymous04/23/14
Good Story
This had an uncommon story line and it was well developed. The lead characters, at least to me, came across as emotionally shallow and they got the ending they deserved. Well done and thanks for sharing your work.
A player gets played. The real fiancé is a cuck who married the cheating slut.
What the fuck? On to ch.2
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Anonymous11/04/14
Interesting story
But you never really explained why Gloria HAD to marry John? In this day and age? Forced or arranged marriages aren't really commonplace in the good old USA. SO while it made for an interesting story, it also made for an implausible one. Wouldn't his research have told him there was a husband to be in the wings? And what about showing up at the wedding and creating a stink? What about going to the press and creating a stink? Like all guys, I'm sure he probably had some video on his I-phone of them making love. Maybe he could convince her to marry him instead? Interesting story, it simply didn't go far enough.
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Anonymous03/15/15
Fucking whore/skank
She deserves her cuck husband.
Jason, don't have anything to do with this cunt, don't take a fucking thing from her, not one single gift. She is everything wrong with humankind.
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Anonymous01/29/16
gloria
as always you have a good story where the player gets played.
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com
I have more respect for a player than a prostitute of the heart.
Gloria is scum.
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Anonymous11/22/16
silentsound
I abhore players-selfish,arrogant and cruel
Not sure what ''prostitute of the heart is'' I have known a number of women ehose circumstances led them to be working girls. Thought them delightful-One I adored as no other
English
needs a chapter 2
the story needs a chapter two. that jason moves on a finds someone new.
Well Done
Even though no one in the story was married the aspect of Gloria cheating on John allows the story to fold itself very nicely into the Loving Wives category. Well written and well executed.
Great plot and story writing
The author is a professional at writing and we are, so to speak, recipients of his talent. It's a fun story and has reached a stage in which this 'Loving Wives' story turns serious - at least that's my take. I'd assume she did not accept stipends on her scholarship being the daughter of a billionaire and the sole beneficiary(?). RAG
An original story on Lit?
I don't believe it!
Thanks for a great little story!
Considering all the hearts he broke before he met her, it's poetic justice. You write very well. Thanks!
re: Great plot and story writing
"The author is a professional at writing..."
Are you kidding me? This idiot makes mistakes a ten year old should know to avoid, such as knowing to start EVERY paragraph of contiguous quoted text with a quotation mark. This is not amateur writing, it's amateurish writing.
Enjoyable Read
I would have given it a hundred with a happy ending.
Great Story Author - KUDO's
The previous commenter from the Unreal World is a jealous writer who couldn't carry an author's jock - and doesn't need one.
A story of life and it's complexity.
You are looked forward to Author.
With High Regard
The player played!
The list is long that explains why they should not marry: but the most important one is the one she insisted on: honesty. She was a liar. He feels bad and maybe he loved her, but at some point he will think about the relationship and realize that her feelings were selfish and that she used him for her own pleasure and need. I am impressed with your writing on this one and liked how the college boy became a man as he learned to love. I know author's do not like follow ups, but if he were my character I would write how he takes his lesson to heart, and goes out to have a life: wife, children, and career. And how she became what she chose to become: a whore for her family, a belonging to be traded. She makes it sound like a big sacrifice, but she in fact had a choice: love or money. Now he has a choice: die or go out and live his life. He is the better person if he will stop and think about it: and you think about that other story. Maybe they could cross paths 20 years later and she can see what she really missed out on.
Great Beginning
I agree with Simple49er.You should write a second chapter showing twenty years later what Gloria missed change love for money.
A bit late to react after the girl is gone.
Easy enough to walk into a wedding and make your case. Then let the girl decide. This guy is an all round coward. He deserved to lose the girl he loved.
Excellent Story
For me it is complete. I recognize the symmetry of their maneuvers and the interesting twist of the fiancée not even being pissed off even though he did qualify the relation as an affair.. Thanks WM1
Excellent Story
For me it is complete. I recognize the symmetry of their maneuvers and the interesting twist of the fiancée not even being pissed off even though he did qualify the relation as an affair.. Thanks WM1
Mystery could've wrote this story.
LOL. The famous Mystery could've wrote this story the way you incorporated his PUA tactics. Good job.
Nice one Woodman
Once again well written and a good read.
To Anon in the Real World
It's obvious you belong to the "torch the bitch" crowd. Why does it bother you how well the author writes a story. Isn't this an amateur erotic site, where very few are professional writers, if any. This is a site to read stories for your erotic entertainment, or is there another reason you're here.Noticed that the loving wives genre seems to attract the negative critics, one doesn't see them on any other genre. Wonder why?
W T F
What a silly ass storyline give us a break.
she played him for a mug . money is route of all evil .
5***** story! One of the best! Original and Creative!
Compared to what he was hoping to have--a smart beatiful girl of his dreams and $millions, no doubt he was miserable. Nevertheless, he still made out like a bandit. Not only did he get to fuck Gloria, he got a $50,000 Corvette, an apartment for a year, worth two or three thousand a month, and some expensive gifts. Therefore, he had a very good year.
Her affairs didn't seem to bother John and Gloria's much. Could the very rich have different beliefs and standards? Perhaps it is about maintaining wealth within the families and well bred children, and the other is just a little fun.
I gave it a one
Because DWannabe gave it a five.
ONE DAY I WISED UP AND SHE WAS INSIDE MY HEAD
AND BED. And then she left me, TK U MLJ LV NV
Again
Another lame ending. Your stories start pretty well but you seem to run out of steam and not finish them well.
Good Story
This had an uncommon story line and it was well developed. The lead characters, at least to me, came across as emotionally shallow and they got the ending they deserved. Well done and thanks for sharing your work.
THE BE$T MAN WON
and goodbye yellow brick road. TK U MLJ LV NV
Strange
A player gets played. The real fiancé is a cuck who married the cheating slut.
What the fuck? On to ch.2
Interesting story
But you never really explained why Gloria HAD to marry John? In this day and age? Forced or arranged marriages aren't really commonplace in the good old USA. SO while it made for an interesting story, it also made for an implausible one. Wouldn't his research have told him there was a husband to be in the wings? And what about showing up at the wedding and creating a stink? What about going to the press and creating a stink? Like all guys, I'm sure he probably had some video on his I-phone of them making love. Maybe he could convince her to marry him instead? Interesting story, it simply didn't go far enough.
Fucking whore/skank
She deserves her cuck husband.
Jason, don't have anything to do with this cunt, don't take a fucking thing from her, not one single gift. She is everything wrong with humankind.
gloria
as always you have a good story where the player gets played.
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com
Compelling story
If terrible and tragic for the emotions.
I have more respect for a player than a prostitute of the heart.
Gloria is scum.
silentsound
I abhore players-selfish,arrogant and cruel
Not sure what ''prostitute of the heart is'' I have known a number of women ehose circumstances led them to be working girls. Thought them delightful-One I adored as no other
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