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by Anonymous

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by WickedEve07/01/09

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You know what would you could try with this poem? A villanelle. I like what you have going on here but I think it's screaming for a form, like the villanelle or terzanelle.

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by normal jean07/01/09

I agree with Eve

it seems as though it's begging for a form. However, the poem is good and the end was a shocker. I love poetry that grabs me at the end and leave me to wonder, "why"?

keep posting!

~NJ

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