All Comments on 'The Ballad of Jacaranda and Flame'

by vrosej10

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EroticOrogenyEroticOrogenyover 14 years ago
Sad ballad

Overall I enjoyed it, but I think your line lengths are too variable for my taste.

EroticOrogenyEroticOrogenyover 14 years ago
finger hit wrong button

Sorry

TzaraTzaraover 14 years ago
I enjoyed this, despite the kind of odd form.

It seems a little too consciously poetic, but that works pretty well here--better than it usually does for me. The "enema" part seemed dropped in from outer space, though, and kind of messed up (no pun intended) the imagery. :-)

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