I haven't read much in the fetish category, but your work has changed my mind. The character development is superb, situations are realistically written, and you've really caught my imagination. It's sensual, gripping, sexy, and I can tell it will end with a "big bang." Wonderful job! Melanie
The girl's a client, just another job. Can't he just do it, get it over with, doesnt have to date her. Does he? Can he tell Lisa? Or will they send someone else for the treatment. It will only take an hour. Could'nt fit it in?
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Anonymous07/22/09
A Thickening Plot
Late or early, Ms. Bloom, you do tease and titillate our minds. With every chapter you give us new directions to pursue, new possibilities for your protaganists. new modes of erotic excitement. I hope that Eric and Mel come back to read the comments, because I would like to say to Mel that if this is her first reading of your work, she will not get this quality out of the rest of the Fetish stable, so its not the genre, its the writer. This story could, probably should, have been listed as Romance or Erotic Coupling. (Bad editors)!! As for Eric, he has read the Late Bloomer and knows that there are always many doors left cracked open with the possibilities of "other" directions in this writer's stories.
English
Happily surprised
I haven't read much in the fetish category, but your work has changed my mind. The character development is superb, situations are realistically written, and you've really caught my imagination. It's sensual, gripping, sexy, and I can tell it will end with a "big bang." Wonderful job! Melanie
Just Another Job, right?
The girl's a client, just another job. Can't he just do it, get it over with, doesnt have to date her. Does he? Can he tell Lisa? Or will they send someone else for the treatment. It will only take an hour. Could'nt fit it in?
A Thickening Plot
Late or early, Ms. Bloom, you do tease and titillate our minds. With every chapter you give us new directions to pursue, new possibilities for your protaganists. new modes of erotic excitement. I hope that Eric and Mel come back to read the comments, because I would like to say to Mel that if this is her first reading of your work, she will not get this quality out of the rest of the Fetish stable, so its not the genre, its the writer. This story could, probably should, have been listed as Romance or Erotic Coupling. (Bad editors)!! As for Eric, he has read the Late Bloomer and knows that there are always many doors left cracked open with the possibilities of "other" directions in this writer's stories.
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