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Good First Effort
Thanks. I love Scipfi but sometimes folks got to far and yours was just right. Thanks
okay!
hey,i really liked the storyline,but i felt it was to rushed,like some important events was not stated but skipped over.for instance,there was no time for the romance between the characters to progress,they just instantly fall in love as you have stated.i would of liked a longer novel lenght story and for you to have filled in the blank time spots between events.well i hope you will appreciate my critism and see it as a step to better your writing.i have read most of your stories which have some great plot lines but the same critic as above follow with them.all the best and looking foward to the next story.Tally.mwa
enjoyed it =)
Way too rushed and could have been a lot better. It's a great storyline that you could have done a lot with. It's a shame that you either didn't take the time or didn't have the time to build the characters up more. I tend to remember characters of what I read and enjoy going back and reading about the characters that stick with me and getting surprised at the creativeness of the story again. Keep writing, but I hope you can spend a little more time drawing me into the story.
Sci-fi success!
I wanted to highlight 4 STARS! I liked it more than 2 stars' worth. Continue to write. Sci-fi is your niche! Like Anne McCaffrey!
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I think your other stories are better to be honest. To many parody type things, also way to short
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