All Comments on 'A Husband's Revenge Ch. 02'

by Slirpuff

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
short

ok that was nice but short.

C_frommnC_frommnalmost 15 years ago
SWEET!!!

Loved the Story Short & Sweet.

Both Ahole's got what they Deserved.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Really good

Thanks for the conclusion, your hero was methodical, devious, and vicious in his execution of a loving marriage gone bad. Even when seeking his revenge he possessed moments of compassion and benevolence, until she screwed up again, then it was on. Though it was brief, I found the story completely enjoyable, and the sap in me couldn't help but like the protagonist and Nick's wife getting together in the end. Hey, I'm a sucker for a happily ever after

zed0zed0almost 15 years ago
Great Story

I enjoyed the hell out of it! Looking forward to more "No Wimps" stories. Gawd, I LOVE A HAPPY ENDING!

digdaddyrichdigdaddyrichalmost 15 years ago
It's good that the slut had to pay

I don't know why he would want Sue, Nick's wife, her pussy is probably as big as a barn door. He needs to find a little woman that wants him and his kids at face value. It would be nice if the next wife enjoyed sex as much as he does, and they just make a new life for themselves without any baggage of the divorce. Thanks for the good story.....Rich

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
It was OK but same old

Story was good, well written, but the concept was way too old. Husband caught wife cheating and then spending his life with other cheated spouse. Nothing new here. It was OK not bad.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
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wow! what a hot, scarrrry, satisfying, and vengful revenge that was! man!

TE_RossTE_Rossalmost 15 years ago
A Disappointment

<p>Is there a template somewhere that allowed you to create this story in such cookie-cutter fashion? I read and enjoy a lot of LW stories and it is obvious to me that you do too. I say that because you have copied elements from stories of many of my favorite authors.</p>

<p>I was initially on guard in chapter 1 when you felt the need to introduce the narrator, his wife, their kids and then tell us their age and weight and her measurements, all in the first 2 paragraphs. Why do I need to know the wife's weight? Time would have been better spent giving us details about her as a person so she would not be so one-dimensional.</p>

<p>Then we have the 6 foot 4 inch character with a 12 inch dick whose circumference we must be told is 2 and ½ inches. Huh? Are you kidding? From my 5th grade math I recall the formula for the circumference of a circle (as fregan so clearly noted in his comment in Chapter 1). This guy Nick has a long very thin dick less than an inch in diameter. Is this what you intended? This is what happens when you copy crap from other authors without knowing what it means.</p>

<p>Likewise, the idea that Nick sticks his dick in Ann's ass then in in her pussy and then repeats this process over an over is very, very, unsanitary. This is not erotic, it's bordering on criminal. Do you know the opportunity for disease that this practice breeds? As an author of erotica you need to do your homework.</p>

<p>And who is this guy Nick? Where did he come from? How did he meet Ann? None of these questions are answered. Nick is nothing more that a long, thin dicked big black guy, a caricature. How original!</p>

<p>I can see pieces of several of Just Plain Bob's stories, jakewho69 contributed part of Smitty and My Wife, and your thanksgiving confrontation is modeled on stories by both jakewho69 and ohio. I can see the voices of other author's, but where is your voice. What makes a Slirpuff story distinctive?</p>

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Where is the 'Reality'

Not very well done. It would be the courts decision as to who gets the children---not his! IT is also the courts decsion (after negotiations) as to the money split. Believe me when I say the husband comes out poorly in this. He will be better off than Nick maybe, but not by much. This ending is pure fantasy and a bad one at that.

Risq_001Risq_001almost 15 years ago
Well...............

<p>To be honest this story really could have just been one story instead of a two part story, but that's really up to you to decide (^_^)</p>

<p>But one thing, every time I see a story where the husband decides to stick it in the bunghole then put it back in the vagina then go back and forth I cringe. I mean its like either the character or the writer has never heard of the "nasty" infection women get when you do this. There are ways around it, but the wife didn't prepare any of them since she didn't know the husband was going backdoor that night. =(</p>

<p>I do thank you for the posting, but there were lots of things that seemed out in left field. Unless the wife was a complete idiot she would get: the kids (she cheated in the house of her lover not her own. That didn't make her unfit), the house, half of the money at the time of the separation (or with a decent attorney when he started moving it around), and he would be screwed even though she cheated. Very few states these days care why a marriage breaks up, they just punish the husband for not sticking around. Yep that's fair. And the only one who could use the video of their affair was Nick's wife, he couldn't. And so many of these points were missed or slanted in a way that made it kind of glaringly obvious.</p>

<p>But again thanks for the posting. So far its the only one I've decided to read today =)</p>

-Risq

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Good Story

I liked the story--short and sweet and to the point--Cheating skank slut gets fucked--stud gets fucked---the way it should be.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Good Story

Not too long or dragged out, short and to the point. I liked it. They both got what they deserved.

bruce22bruce22almost 15 years ago
Consequences are great...

Even if they are a flight of fantasy as in the present story.

This is definitely not a handbook about how to proceed.. If he wanted the kids he should have taken a trip so that Nick could visit his house and she could have brought up the defense that he ok'd it by doing her after he found out.

But I enjoyed this story and I do enjoy interesting fantasies. But if you prefer the real world you will not like this one!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Nothing original or even interesting

Reads like a poorly-written version of something by HDK or JPB.<p>This joke of an author can't tell the difference between "your" and "you're" -- is it really that tough? Not to mention numerous other visual speed bumps.<p>Get an editor, man. You come across like a clown.

nyminusnyminusalmost 15 years ago
Ho hum to you too mistifur commenter just before

me. What's wrong with you ? Did you get palsy in your hands and couldn't jerk your pathetic little drippy pecker? Did it upset you seeing the sexual predator get his come uppance like he did. No you couldn't say that and scream and claw and shout no...no...no...so you just tried to put the author down with your hoo humm. Good job slirpuff. Cheating is rampant in America and is spreading to the rest of the world. We are having an economic meltdown because of alcohol consumption glad to see someone sees the cheating wife in a new light. LEGALIZE POT.stoned wives are happy wives

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Stoned wives are sluts too!!! OFFICIAL!

Come on wives of America, hey, c'mon, wives of the fucking world...open your holes, we're coming in. Except Nyminus, 'cos he lives in a cave. With his boyfriend. Mancelt(fucking someones wife near you)...

JADED_ONE1969JADED_ONE1969almost 15 years ago
As loving wife stories go I thought this was Okay.

The ending was a little abrupt with the wife not really being able to explain why she cheated. I can understand the husband doing what he did anD I applaud you for letting him do so. Anyway a well written and an okay story. Just a couple of words to Mancelt, I really think you and Nyminus should take some chill pills. After all you both like this story but for different reasons. Mancelt, you like the story because it contains a slut wife and Nyminus, you liked the ending becasue the 'hero' lived well and the slutwife got what she deserved. Keep writing Slirpuff you stories always get readers talking.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Pure horse manure

Not worth reading or comment.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
re: A Disappointment

Actually, I think this bozo does use nothing but a template. It's been posting stories on darkwanderer.net, and they, for the most part, follow the same plot. If the hit against the "wimp" husband stories are that they are all the same story, the same should go for these, too.

<P>

Also, after several stories, after being inform about how to write (e.g., not putting quotation marks around ever quoted sentence) it still can't write to save its life.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Good Story

I liked your story. To the point and all got what they deserved.

Keep on writing them

TransverseTransversealmost 15 years ago
Overall concept was okay, but...

the story itself wasn't very well written or thought out. It just had this rushed, false feel to it, as though you were trying too hard to prove something. Writing for the Loving Wives category is not for the faint of heart, and you have to have a thick skin no matter what point of view you write from to survive here, but this just felt like an overcompensation for all of the stories about cuckolded men. The idea of a husband getting revenge of some sort when he has been wronged would be quite popular, especially for the people who dislike cuckold stories, but doing that well in a story requires a little more finesse than this one contained. You would stand a chance of being First in Category with a revenge storyline like this if you just put a tad more effort into the writing itself and the sequence of events in the story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
All of the money

she works full time, he does not have ownership legal or moral of all of the money (forgetting joint property states).

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
I agree with "All of the money"

If a story is to be taken seriously, then reality should be observed. The husband does not have any right to take what isn't his. The half of all resources are hers. he has no right to take her half or to change locks on her. Neither does a wife have such a right. It happens in many stories, and I guess it's done to vent the author's feelings. This is OK, of course, but it doesn't make for a quality story. Maybe, in addition to telling readers up front whether there is hot sex or whether a wimp husband is involved, an author should tell us whether the offended spouse is a common thief! Rich

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
very good story

A good read. They got coming to them what they reserved. RAG

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Black and white start dating

Liked it . How about continuing with black and white - and pregnant. Talk about Revenge

bigchefwaynebigchefwayneover 14 years ago
Excellently Written Story

Your story was well crafted. Compact and to the point yet with enough character development. My only gripe, and it a minor one, is that the interracial angle was not needed for the story and in some ways detracted from it.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
why the black man fucking the wife in your stories

white men fuck cheating wives too.most all your stories the black guy fucked the cheating wives.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Maybe

Maybe Ann and Nick can get work at one of those little clubs in Tijuana....

Please learn spelling, grammar, and punctuation!

RonRWoodRonRWoodover 14 years ago
Okay

It does get a bit old that all the black lovers are huge men with huge cocks. You would think that every white woman in America wants one listening to you authors. If I were black I would begin to think that all white men had an inferiority complex! I am white and normal sized and believe that it a husband is as good a lover as this one was described there would not be any cheating because of sexual reasons. Another plot that disturbs me is the "Black Boss" getting the wife! How many "Black Bosses" can there be? The black race comprises only a small percentage of the total in America. How about some Mexican bosses, Arabic, Oriental, Jewish, or American Indian? Interracial stories I understand because of the Genre for those stories... This was just a cookie-cutter story and you normally do better. Thank you for writing for our entertainment.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
in the nick of time

nick was involved with ann, and she lost, boy did she. the race is incidental, and the cliches of penis size. the cheaters got the consequences they so tried to avoid

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
response to Rich and All the Money

Possession is 9 tenths of the law. He took it so its his. Just like Ann took his pussy and gave it to Nick. I suspect he got away with it as he had potential blackmail material in the form of pictures and tapes. In reality who cares, it was just a story. Though the division of assets in the story is closer to justice than what would happen in a court. I enjoyed the story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Good Story -Vidictive hero

You write well but your hero in this story is a vicious vidictive bastard. She is an adulterous bitch, so divorce her but in this story you are worse than she is.

the Ct. Yankee

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Stories are improving.

I see that the author is putting more effort into punctuation and grammar. The reader appreciates the improved ease of reading the action. Your story ideas are entertaining and erotic, something that can't be said of many LW authors. Keep the stories coming.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
ok?

i did not like the last paragraph! ok?

AnonymousAnonymousabout 14 years ago
Another rapid fire ending!

Another SlirPUFF "God I am tired of writing this story" ending. News Flash!!! These " leave everything hanging" endings do not contribute to improvement in your story telling.

rooster1rooster1about 14 years ago
Thanksgiving was

The perfect time to expose her in front of her family for all to see just what a lying cheating bitch they raised.

oldwayneoldwayneabout 14 years ago
I would have carved up something besides the turkey...

BUT, I LOVED YOUR STORY!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
grrrrr!!!!

i really hate not hearing the wife's explanation/pleading after finding out they are busted!

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
I enjoyed this

The bitch got what she had coming to her and so did the prick she was balling. Anbd nice to read a story where the husband did what he should do instead of saying "Oh honey I still love you". I don't mind sharing my wife, but if she ever went behind my back best hope I am not armed.

RePhilRePhilover 13 years ago
GREAT

Good writing and great story. Maybe it's the male ego but enjoyed the retribution

j1969j1969over 13 years ago
Yeah!

I have nothing against open marriages, I fricken hate Liars and Cheaters!

DunaDunaalmost 13 years ago
Is she a Mother???!!!

What sort of Mother is she? She keeps connection with her children by post only? Is she a Mother at all?

1. Yes she got the punishment for her cheating.

2. However she is the mother of her children and she should be important her children in her life in spite of her divorce.

Yes the author is right she is a cold hearted bitch.

tazz317tazz317over 12 years ago
FROM THE GUTTER TO THE ATTIC

alone and with the children. TK U MLJ LV NV

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Great story - fucking slut got what was coming & due!

One of the few stories about the slut wife getting kicked to the curb where all those whores & man-sluts should be. Geez, what a fucking skank!

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Fair story with some holes

I saw this story as being a bit unrealistic. One, how was he going to explain the situation to his children. You think the children would just forget their Mother or not want to see her. Just to take his explaination without wanting to hear from the Mother. Not likely. True she maybe uncaring to her children but you did not indicate that in the story. An interesting story it lacked some depth.

chytownchytownover 12 years ago
Repeat!!!!

1001 times at least that this plot has been used. What's with the BBC's.

Johnny1MJohnny1Mover 12 years ago
In real life though,

the wife is so pissed at the Thanksgiving day DVD that she gets a lawyer and fights for custody of the kids. As her adultery has no effect on the custody hearing, she is awarded custody, the house, and child support. Also maintenance for 6 months since she lost her job. Nick is fired for having sex with a subordinate, but she has a good law suit for sexual harassment so the school is forced to take her back, plus pay her a settlement. That's a more likely scenario. Read Rehnquist's essay on family law. Courts just don't use adultery anymore in deciding custody. In fact, a good lawyer might use the DVD episode against him in the custody battle, claiming that the husband is so bitter he would poison the kids against their Mom. After all, it is pretty cruel showing that to the whole family on Thanksgiving. (at least if she got a female judge that might be the opinion.)

tazz317tazz317over 12 years ago
CHEATERS ALMANAC

102 THE AFTERMATH AND CLEAN UP. TK U MLJ LV NV

count2threecount2threeabout 12 years ago
This Chapter was really disappointing.

That she lost everything was completely unrealistic because courts dont give shit about who fucked whom. She would have gotten the Kids and the House and thats that. Apart from that you wrote all this only to end it with this a dime a dozen ending ? Sorry I think I have to counter my 4* from the first chapter with 1* for this.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
This sucks I don't get it. Why is he such a jerk

So she fucked around. Whatvis the bg deal.

TalonsreachTalonsreachabout 12 years ago
You have to be kidding

Anon,

What's the big deal??? How about loss of trust? How about "forsake all others"? How about fidelity? How about health and welfare (no condum use and ass to pussy can only lead to major disease issues)? How about the fact they are in a monogamous relationship? How about the fact that the wife was cutting off her husband?

What's the big deal??? If you have to ask I hope you never graduate beyond Rosy Palm. If you come after my wife be prepare to lose something very valuable to you because I don't allow poaching! I also believe in the punishment fitting the crime so if you plan to stick your dick where it doesn't belong don't be surprised when it suddenly comes up missing.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
in real life you say

In real life I did get the kids and left her a house with zero equity but no alamony !

I remarried a younger hot body woman and still after my daughter married I am her hero and my wife's . The x. Well she is still a loser and wishes she was married to

Me but only to make her look better to her parents and yes she is still in love with herself just like the character in this story. Um. Life does immate art.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
To Anon - This sucks, I don't get it

To paraphrase J.P. Morgan, if you got to ask the question, you won't understand the answer.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Sorry Slirpuff ...

.. I like your most of your stories but the ending for this tale was "very weak" to say the least! Having Ann "move away" with no other consequences ( HIV, Parents cutting her out of their lives in public permanently, posting the dvd/pictures of the WHORE to all of her friends, fellow workers, and friends while she was present ) would have been much more appropriate. A SLUT like Ann who is not taught a lesson will only justify what she did to herself and then do the same thing to some other poor guy down the road. Ladies are ladies .. whores are whores .... and Ann is NO lady!!

betrayedbylovebetrayedbylovealmost 12 years ago
Decent

My only problem with this tale is I thought Ann should have suffered more. Maybe caught an std or aids from the scumbag Nick and paid for it with the ultimate price. No one would miss her.

Fuck you g

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago

So basically Sue and her kids are now homeless without child support, the husband's children have no mother or contact with her, and the entire family relationship has been destroyed because of his acknowledged "evil" plan to fuck up Thanksgiving?

This is "revenge"? No, they're the actions of an asshole, because only a total asshole uses the children in a relationship as a weapon like that. It's punishing not the guilty parties, but the innocents, and that shit is never right.

Because of this your character is completely unlikeable and undeserving of any satisfaction in revenge that he got, because he's worse than his whore of a wife. She didn't choose his actions he did.

It's a good story if it's meant to illustrate that there are boundaries that should not be crossed, but I get the feeling that's not the case.

cantbuymycantbuymyover 11 years ago
i love the character

and payback is a bitch and only a cuck or a woman would put the blame on the husband for exposing his wife's conduct. no one forced her to do it. 5.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
That's why

God made guns.

PolyLvrPolyLvrover 11 years ago
I can understand.

I really can understand why people cheat. Accidents happen. Sometimes you fall in love with someone else. Your partner is emasculating, or abusive, demeaning. Whatever. We humans are fallible, that's for sure.

But cheating the way Ann and Nick cheated is contemptible. Sue was better off without him and nowhere in the story does it say that she was left impoverished. That her daughter was left fatherless is Nick's own fault.

The husband in the story has every right, IMHO, to do what he did. It was never going to end well anyways so he, the reliable, stable, partner has custody.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Only problem...

Is that he still felt there was a chance for them after finally getting into her ass. Seriously?

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
liked it...

...but the ending was too rushed. A good revenge story is like fine wine. You can't just chug it once you have everything set up. Allow him to enjoy the suffering a little bit as things slowly fall into place.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
I

would have killed them both in a way that let me escape scot free from being caught, even if it took a while to figure out how to do it.

cliffhanger20cliffhanger20over 11 years ago
I'LL BE DAMNED!!!

Finally a good and fitting ending.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Overall good story

However I agree with the comment that procedes mine that the ending was rushed especially when the punishment phase started. Also, I think it would have been a much better story if there was a separate section at the end written by the wife.

Then she could explain in detail how she was seduced by Nick (as he had done over and over to other married women) why she feel for her role as a lieing, cheating married slut for over a year. Also why she didn't break it off and how was it possible that she had not caught on to her role in Nick's eyes which was one of many sluts.

Importantly why she allowed Nick to be consistently abusive to her and degrade her.

In the story as written the reader comes away knowing virtually nothing about Ann's why for what she did. She must have had very srong compelling reason to engage in actions for a year that when found out would destroy two marriages and break up two families. Looking at this latter statement to a sane observer ths abusive sex by a sexual predator couldn't have come anywhere near justifying her actions and choices.

When one balances illicit sex against the love of a husband and children, plus loss of employment and disgust of friends and family a bunch of orgasms just doesn't begin to measure up. As Ann sits in her lonely apartment segregated from everyone she once loved do you think that thoughts of ass fucking, pussy stretching and being constantly bossed around in her mind. Nope.

phil2213phil2213about 11 years ago
good story

Remarkably, this story departed dramatically from one other story of yours that I read in that there is no redemption. For example: what if Ann's husband simply manned up and confronted her the first time he came to the knowledge of this affair? What would Ann's reactions have been. Her husband seemed motivated to spice things up even then she wandered back to her affair with a two week respite. I believe people are people some can be on course for the longest of times and suddenly stray off and with a little coaching be brought back into the folds. Ann was presented as a loyal wife til this affair with Nick. A normal husband would try to obtain information from his spouse that he professes to love at any cost to save what they had. Relationships are very fluid and they have challenges lying and cheating are usually catastrophic. Why hadn't any of Ann's friends try to reach out to dissuade her errant behavior. The story was cryptic in rushing to judgment without examination of Ann's humanity and thought process and social connections and interactions. The type of person Ann is was at the crucible of the story. The information was cryptic at best. I rated this story 4 stars which was generous. The revenge was rushed and incomplete. In publicly held jobs there are codes of conduct and policies and procedures which this story clearly shows a violation of morals code violations etcetera. The revenge should've /could've included lawsuits against the school and the principal for morals code violations and alienation of affection. Also, when someone is violating the love of your life why would you consider the size of the man as mentioned in the husband's thoughts outside the principal's house the first night of discovery. An enraged man could take on any ten men the size of that principal, I can personally vouch for that tidbit. The story had judgments made by the author that could arguably been off base or not synched with the emotion of the moment. Although, the author was dogmatic I just disagree with the hypothesis.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
not very good/you story of revenge borders on a fantacy

you cannot throw her out, that is not legally possible. it may sound good but in fact you have to go to court and i dont see how you got the kids without going thru the courts. 90% of the time the wife gets the kids..even with her cheating.. this story just doesnt work in the real world.. sorry

HardFeltHardFeltabout 11 years ago
It's nice but ...

Revenge. How sweet it is. Trouble with real life though is that the husband is the last to know and RARELY gets any kind of relief. He gets to live alone though, so that's something. Ever been around a lying, cheating, LOUD, obnoxious, overbearing bitch of a wife who also happens to redefine selfish? Alone can be conforting

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
loved it.

I loved this story. I wish I would have done the same thing. My ex's boyfriend did it for me. He caught her cheating on him and texted her picture with two dicks in her mouth to all her contacts. Her boss her HR all her kids (there adults). I even got it a text. I want to read more of these.

LickideesplitLickideesplitalmost 11 years ago
Weak on many counts

Screwed up on Law, Geometry, family Relations (showing DVD to her folks is totally gratuitous. Tasteless and without purpose!

There are a lot of problems, which have already been adequately documented! There is never ANY explanation (or rationalization) proffered.

IronDragonIronDragonalmost 11 years ago
Nothing gratuitous about it!

Showing the tape to Wifey's parents was right on the money! Burn her to her own family! Getting them fired wasn't gratuitous either! Loved it!

5 HUGE Stars!

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago

Love the story got really caught up in it! I hope he started off confessing his love for her and knowing what a very devoted and living wife she was and knew they would be happy forever. Then the very first scene is where Nick was fucking her hard asking when she was gonna finally leave that pencil dick husband of hers!! Fuckin' great! Lol. Wish I could write something like that myself. Thanks for the story!

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Bravo Sue !!!

Bravo Sue !!!

OverthefallsOverthefallsover 10 years ago
KABOOM!

That's how you handle a cheating wife. Although it was wishful thinking and creative writing. Since infidelity doesn't count for much in the Court system these days, she was going to get primary custody and the right to live in the house until the youngest kid got to college. And getting her fired might have left him paying not only child support but alimony too. (Got to love the court system in this country). And if he spread the video around, all she was going to do was leave the area with the kids so she could avoid the embarrassment and be able to get a job. But I like your ending, albeit an implausible one.

sugnasugnaover 10 years ago
Nice fantasy, but not likely!

1. Divorce, whether or not the mother is a cheating slut always goes against the father. She'd be in the house, with child support, fucking the boyfriend with the kids in the house. He'd be in a shitty one bedroom apartment in a shitty section of town. He might be able to see his kids every two weeks.

2. School districts are so corrupt that they actually employ teachers with minor criminal records! As long as it is a sex offense, they can keep their jobs. An affair is nothing in the school system, teachers cheat all the time, they are second only to nurses and cops!

3. There is no good solution to this dilemma, other than taking the kids and fleeing to a country that does not have an extradition treaty with the USA.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
what the hell was he thinking ?

Cheating on someone who works in a law office, that is a special kind of stupid.

BfreetorunBfreetorunabout 10 years ago
He can always threaten the bitch to put her pics up onto the internet.

She might not want her family to see them again. He handled the situation correctly.

rightbankrightbankalmost 10 years ago
I don't understand why

he stuck around so long. He had the pictures he took, he had the P.I.s video, he knew the guys name and job, he even had the D.N.A. and even after all that he just hung around waiting. What was he waiting for?

Did he ever think to get tested for STD's?

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Custody issue far too easy

Very few jurisdictions care about adultery when it comes to custody

I don't get why she would abandon the kids so easily

betrayedbylovebetrayedbyloveover 9 years ago
Nice

I would have liked more revenge against the worthless cunt wife but the revenge against her prick lover made up for it. I hate cheaters. All should suffer.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
as it turns out yuo aren't any better

than ur black dick sucking slut.

1 star for ur choco slimy tongue

nuther slurp puff auto-bio, u think

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
too(BIG)

did you get any feeling,one hugh pussy

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Great fantasy story

But these days that's all this is - fantasy. If he got his wife fired the alimony he paid would be increased. And these days a School District would find it nearly impossible to fire a teacher that was simply having an affair on her own time. And the Court system? As several commentators pointed out she would have gotten the house until the kids graduated at least High School, alimony and child support. Plus she would have gotten some of his retirement. And what Mother tucks her tail between her legs and leaves her children? Like I said - I liked this story. But is is just fiction.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Alimony?

What alimony? He cleared his bank accounts and fucked off!! If you ain`t got the cash you can`t pay fuck all! I hope he got her for childcare and maintenance though!

Some people just don`t read what is written!!

sinsational83sinsational83over 9 years ago
yeah yay

It's a shame he didn't file against the school board for allowing that sort of shit to go on. but I'm glad he wasn't a fucking pussy that let it go on. oh yeah, btw another good story. Shit, you're on a roll with me, so far almost every story of yours that I have read were real good ones that's why this rated a 5 keep up the good work and post some new ones ok ?

tazz317tazz317over 9 years ago
FROM THE CURB TO THE BARRIO

several towns removed. TK U MLJ LV NV

kdcee79kdcee79over 9 years ago
Not bad at all

Liked the concept & your writing ability, but just one niggle; why two chapters, the whole story was only 2 pages long. If it was for effect, you failed, if not, it was a waste of time. 3 ***

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Yes, could have been much longer

There should have been more meat for us BTB fans, from the time he showed the video until their divorce. Threats from Nick, threats from the cunt, etc.

It's the part I enjoy the most!

KarenEKarenEover 9 years ago
He Should Have

"I would have loved to flip her over and stuck my dick in her ass, just to see the surprised looked on her face, when it slipped in without any trouble after fucking Nick's black monster."

He should have done just that!

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
well she got it in the end so to say

WHY IS ALL I HAVE TO SAY WHY??

RON TEXAS COWBOYRIDECC@YAHOO.COM

GoodhueGoodhueabout 9 years ago
Another Fuckin' Cunt!

Nice to see that Ann got the shaft,after getting the shaft! If I were the husband,I would have pounded the shit out of her five different ways from Sunday before giving her the boot. ~ Wonder what the parents of the kids in Ann's class thought after they found out that Principal Nick was nailing the shit out of her for over a year with his big,black Mamba! (Betcha there was a major run on hand sanitizer in that school!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
@southernrebel69

Not that I want to challenge your ever superior knowledge of science, oh great white man, but seeing as I actually graduated medical school, I venture to say I might know a thing or two about DNA.

There is actually more variation between the DNA of two Caucasians, than between Caucasians and those of African descent.

Speaking of apes, considering that current evolutionary theory contends that all homo sapiens (you do know what that is right? ) are evolved from apes, you could very well be speaking of your own ancestors.

If the words I used are too big for your ignorant little mind, let me know so I can simplify them for you.

bruce22bruce22about 9 years ago
Well constructed up till the end

The she fails to take advantage of her legal rights. Almost as is she wanted to pay him back for his suffering. One doubt I had was, if after the ass-fucking he stopped all sexual contact with her?

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
re: another nigger

what do you call a nigger that fucked a nasty skank with the body of a fat one eyed whore?

DAD!!!!!!

Don't blame the brothers because you mom, sister, aunt and all the females in your family love the brothers.

Drbeamer3333Drbeamer3333about 9 years ago
Meh

thanks for the effort.

rightbankrightbankalmost 9 years ago
2**

for waiting so long to act

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Okay right until the end

And then, even for fiction, it became an unbelievable mess. Regardless of her cheating she got custody of the kids. And the right to raise them in the house until they graduated High School, maybe college. He got the house payments. She also got child support and a LOT of alimony because, like a dumb ass, he got her fired from her job. So while I liked the fairy tale you spun, the harsh reality is that it never would have turned out this way. He got the bills and the privilege of living in a small apartment because that was all he could afford. He was a dummy for all time.

sinsational83sinsational83over 8 years ago
Second read oh well

Well I guess I gave this story a five star rating just a weeee bit to prematurely. Well actually it was a pretty good story EXCEPT FOR the fact you should REALLY write a sequel to it explaining things. Things like, did the husband ever get the chance to experience the other wife's pussy, or, maybe what happened to the two cheaters and how they ended up after the divorce. You know like the cheating wife is now out gathering up bottles and cans to cash in for her to get money or maybe she turns out to be a breaded whore for her black lover and all of his black friends which would be a cool idea. Or, even what the school system did with the two of them in regards to their employment status since he was actually a person in a position in school to make him her supervisor on the job. there are so many ways to write a sequel to this one. other than that, it really is a GOOD STORY. I just wish there was more to it.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
kids?

Of course they should be divorced. My problem with these burnt earth stories are the kids. While the author here soft-shoes the effect on the kids through the trip, nothing in life can be that simple, or, from their point of view, that disruptive. It bothers me that so few of these stories explore what it means to be a parent in situations where a spouse cheats.

Then again, maybe that's just my personal baggage.

Tootight1Tootight1over 8 years ago
good overall story

yes, I also would like to read how the wife got her comeuppance. the reality of it is, she probably got custody of the kids, and he is paying for the house, and her lawyer fees. I hope he isn't thinking about the Nick's ex wife. she has already been stretched out by his 12 inch cock, what does he think he can offer her? oh it would be a nice retribution for him, but that's about all.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Me?

I went with leaving 400 8x11 pictures hung up all over the house, some of them glued to the walls. Then I packed my shit, we didn't have kids and left my ring on the table.

We never talked and she divorced me, getting nothing because we had nothing. She moved in with her boyfriend until I sent a tape of her fucking her other boyfriend. By the time it was over, she was living at her folks house without a job.

Yes, she was a teacher too.

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