by Lez_writer
I loved reading this story it is great. Please continue to write more stories like this one.
A lot more care is needed in your writing. There are a number of spelling errors/typos, stiff and unnatural-sounding dialogue and sheer carelessness (in several places you get the names mixed up: eg "Lisa...kneeled in front of Katie [and] ran her hands slowly up Lisa's legs..." Lez, get yourself a good editor, a very good editor.