All Comments on 'Cruise to The Stars'

by Lez_writer

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AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Fantastic!!!

I loved reading this story it is great. Please continue to write more stories like this one.

Eric_ShiftEric_Shiftover 14 years ago
Totally Agree

Yes that Great, Gonna read some of your other stuff now

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago

MORE please

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Care needed

A lot more care is needed in your writing. There are a number of spelling errors/typos, stiff and unnatural-sounding dialogue and sheer carelessness (in several places you get the names mixed up: eg "Lisa...kneeled in front of Katie [and] ran her hands slowly up Lisa's legs..." Lez, get yourself a good editor, a very good editor.

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