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by PennLady07/14/09

Decent

Of course, i wish there had been more. :) This looks like a good start, so I'm looking forward to the background. This could benefit from either an editor or just a final read. There are punctuation problems (mostly lack of commas) that make it seem very rushed.

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by SingularMind07/15/09

More than One Mistake

Too short. Think of all the backstory, all the possible character development that could have been there. Good basic idea, but unsatisfying.

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