This chapter is very much 'story' based (no sex at all), but if you're holding out, chapter 3 is being submitted (failed first submission due to grammar).
Should be up in the next few days. Working on chapter 4 currently, and a new story as well.
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Anonymous07/18/09
Awesome story.
I loved reading this story it is great. I can't wait to read chapter 3 & the other remaining chapters. As far as grammer goes I could careless as long as I can follow the story line the grammer is the lest of my worries. Keep up the good work
Much better than the first chapter. Not that the first chapter was bad, but it looked to me like you typed it as it was pouring out of your mind. I do that in shorthand and go back and reedit it. Keep up the good work!
Nice transitional chapter ! It would be even nicer without the typical dumb jock but it doesnt harm the story too much.
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Anonymous09/05/12
pretty dumb
after his speach he would have avoided her and ignored her he sure wouldn't be following her and her boyfriend. the writer needs to growup and learn the stoey reads like a grade school boys wetdream. you wasted your time, our time and the sites space as usual.
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Anonymous09/13/14
nice!
Oh man I'm so horny reading this I love near rape experiences!!:D
English
That was good
Keep the story going, this was a good story builder
Author here
This chapter is very much 'story' based (no sex at all), but if you're holding out, chapter 3 is being submitted (failed first submission due to grammar).
Should be up in the next few days. Working on chapter 4 currently, and a new story as well.
Awesome story.
I loved reading this story it is great. I can't wait to read chapter 3 & the other remaining chapters. As far as grammer goes I could careless as long as I can follow the story line the grammer is the lest of my worries. Keep up the good work
COOL STORY BRO
Keep it up man, its looking good.
imporvement
Much better than the first chapter. Not that the first chapter was bad, but it looked to me like you typed it as it was pouring out of your mind. I do that in shorthand and go back and reedit it. Keep up the good work!
Nice transitional chapter
Nice transitional chapter ! It would be even nicer without the typical dumb jock but it doesnt harm the story too much.
pretty dumb
after his speach he would have avoided her and ignored her he sure wouldn't be following her and her boyfriend. the writer needs to growup and learn the stoey reads like a grade school boys wetdream. you wasted your time, our time and the sites space as usual.
nice!
Oh man I'm so horny reading this I love near rape experiences!!:D
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