Not a bad first chapter, I must agree. And I also agree with the crit about describing physiques- that's always a good thing in an erotic story. Perhaps we could spice things up a bit with son and daughter coming home unexpectedly for this long weekend and finding Mom, Dad and Aunt screwing the day away... and then joining in? Hmm? Maybe the kids have a secret of their own to tell since they're both going to the same college, if you get my hint?
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Hot story BrettJ
A little more body descriptions and you have a winner. lets make the 3 day weekend a triple feature.
More in store, I'm sure!
Not a bad first chapter, I must agree. And I also agree with the crit about describing physiques- that's always a good thing in an erotic story. Perhaps we could spice things up a bit with son and daughter coming home unexpectedly for this long weekend and finding Mom, Dad and Aunt screwing the day away... and then joining in? Hmm? Maybe the kids have a secret of their own to tell since they're both going to the same college, if you get my hint?
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