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by jp36515

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AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Incest Fan

Keep it coming. You have a good start. I am very interested in this type of story.

knickersoffreadyknickersoffreadyover 14 years ago
More

Building up nicely

Eric_ShiftEric_Shiftover 14 years ago
Not too bad

Your just starting out. Attempting a series first off, very brave. Good Luck

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
The truth of course...

Really, it sucks & blows, not gonna lie like the rest of the reviews...

digdaddyrichdigdaddyrichover 14 years ago
By far way too short of a story or series chapter

The story didn't even get started before it was over,he should at least have had a feel of some of mom's tit. Who was the fourth person at diner, There were Dad and Mom and himself is all I read. I hope she teaches the boy how to eat pussy before he tries to stick the cock to her. Maybe Dear old Dad suffers from E.D. and mom is one hell of a horny housewife with a wet sweet pussy that hasn't been taken care of for three of four years, and her son nails her sweet pussy and gives her a new lease on life.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Looking forward to the continuation

Flawless start and I didn't find myself wading through a mire of badly spelled/punctuated nonsense.

Thanks for sharing.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
FREAKIN' SHORT!

Your storyline was okay, but I can't figure out why it was okay for YOU to get to post something SO SHORT when there are SUPPOSEDLY length guidelines on here! It figures that they apply their own rules haphazardly.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
My opinion

From personal experience, when writing, I know where the story is going to go in my own mind but my own horniness gets the better of me and I have to stop short to "take care of business" then I'm too tired to complete. ha ha

Keep writing

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
good luck

but please just dont jump into the sex too quickly. let it build up

cncstevecncsteveover 14 years ago
4?

The 4 of us had dinner? Who was number 4?

TibxoTibxoover 14 years ago
A great start...

...to what should be a highly erotic story. Two favours if I may: Post regularly and let it happen slowly. :)

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
it sucked

it sucks

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
nice starting

nice starting, cant wait to read chapter 2

HOT HOT HOT HOT !!!! :D

cu

motherfucker74motherfucker74over 14 years ago
Perfect Example of what NOT to do

First and foremost, when you POST story you want enough to keep the readers interested, and where they had an O. A kid going through puberty might have gotten a hardon from this, but anyone else probably not. Also, it was posted on 7/21, and now it is 7/23. So not only is your story forgotten, but now you need to get the person into it on the 2nd part, which I highly doubt you can based on what you did on the 1st part. In short, post to the point where the two or more persons finish fucking, then you can leave the reader wanting. With this story you did not leave the reader wanting more for you never really caught the readers attention.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Want more soon

you need to continue soon i want to read more

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Very good

Really enjoying this.....nice build up and lots of anticipation,hopefully she will tease him a little with some nice lingerie,glimpes of stocking top ect.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
A 18 year old male never kissed a girl ????

How about some realism a 18 year male never been on a date or kissed a girl, where was he kept, chained up some place. A lot of you writers, write as if 18 year old boy or girl have lived in a convent all their lives & have not been out in the real world. Why????

AmyfriendAmyfriendover 14 years ago
Need more.

The stage is not even set yet, but I do see potential.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
Must have more!

Very sweet and erotic

Foxterot7aFoxterot7aalmost 3 years ago

I like the thoughtful, realistic, situational character development. So far so good.

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