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by vrosej1007/19/09

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This is great stuff about a moving subject. I really liked it. No cliches, very deep. Keep writing. I want more of this.

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by greenmountaineer07/20/09

Raw, powerful

You took something on not often seen in these pages, and you did it in a way that I think will elicit a visceral response from many readers. That in itself makes the poem powerful for me. In the spirit of "show, not tell" I didn't think the parenthetical note was necessary. I also thought "god-fucking" wasn't necessary, given the raw, shocking, sorrowful, and angry images that followed all of which I felt and stayed with me at the conclusion of the poem.

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