All Comments on 'Roommates in a Shower'

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Eric_ShiftEric_Shiftover 14 years ago
Would you be continuing this?

God I hope so.

GateWraithGateWraith12 months ago

Very hot, but I can't give a five to a story that doesn't bother to name the main character in a third-person narrative that includes another character of the same sex. "She" and "her" could apply to either Lissa or What's-her-name equally within a paragraph or sentence. If you want the main character to be considered as a real person, at least name them as you do the supporting characters. But a strong four for hot sex.

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