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Something's wrong with the time change. Im confused.
You go to fast with the time- re write the chapter
and that dosent let people enjoy the the story more!!
i mean i loved the story other day but now its not my top because firstly Tys married, Lillys pregnant with a different guy that i do not want and mia has cancer you've skipped into the future tto fast. you need to take steady and slow!!!
Maybe re-write the chapter please this is from someone who loves all of your work but this im nt sure about at all!!!
Love it!
A Little confused! But none the less i love it! Great story! Cant wait to see what happens next! I like to see you go in deeper with your character like how he met this jeni girl! Please more and soon! Thanks!!
There is a reason ...
There is a reason why I wrote it this way ... don't ask me why at the moment because my brain is a little befuddled this morning; I'm on crutches do to an ankle injury and haven't been sleeping well the last few days. I actually know someone who went through something like this, so that may be part of it. All I ask is that you stay with it for a bit, and give it a chance to get better. Thanks!
~Ashira
Like the Story
Really like the Story would be Nice to know Why a Woman like Lily would allow an a__hole to Abuse Her Physically and Her Daughter Emotionally. from the First 2 Chapters she seemed to Strong to Allow that.
I don't get why
you always move so fast through your stories!!!! All of them are really good concepts but it seems like I just started reading, still trying to figure out the characters and suddenly everything's in disorder. You jumpt way to fast and too far into the future without developing parts of the story. Also, the world is not always about getting every single female character pregnant. i'm not saying i can write a story but i would at least like to read one where events make sense.
questions?????
What happened to Eli?
How did Ty graduate from Stanford in 2 years and at the top of his class?
Is the main character pregnant? And how did she end up with an A**hole and run the company....and even allow that guy to call her baby a brat?
Sorry I like your stories but I just have too many unanswered questions.
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