All Comments on 'New Life for Lynne'

The base of your story could be good, but it lacks a minimum dose of realism. In my mind the success of a good Nonconscent story lies in the way the writer translate the horror or dilema of the situation. In this case, your hero accepts too easily her situation. The same goes with the new owner of the lady who just doesn't care and don't even seam to enjoy the situation. To top it all, your story have no background, it comes out of nowhere. Don't get me wrong, a story doesn't have to be 10 pages long to be good, the short ones are often the best, but just take your time and don't try to bring too many elements at once and leasve some room for our imagination.

Anyway, you had the guts to write a first story and I got a lot of respect for that.

Its fast moving, stripped down and horny.

If I wanted romance I would read romance not BDSM.

I want to read more,

oooo. yes. chapter 2 soon. please.

loved it.

jackson

this story in written in a BDSM format. The only thing I really thought was funny was WE need the money so I am selling you. We implies more than one. Why would a buyer expect instant obedience from a purchase made where the item sold is unaware and did not consent?