Succinct, self-contained and well-written. I like the flow, the slow build-up of excitement without erasing their prior adversarial relationship. Very enjoyable.
I have to admit the "Me and Kate" instead of "Kate and I" was somewhat distracting, but the story was so good, I was willing to ignore them.
There are so many ways this story can go. Please continue. LD
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Anonymous08/23/09
unrealistic
you really expect us to believe that even though they are fighting they would be willing to share a bed after the first night he would have slept on the floor to get away from her keep it realistic and believable please this isn't the twilight zone
I loved it! I especially enjoyed the surprise ending, with Grandpa catching them in the act.
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Anonymous08/23/09
Excellent story and totally believable
Don't listen to the reader who says it's unrealistic. People fight all the time as a way of hiding their true feelings. That's what I interpreted it as, and as such, I thought it was more believable than ninety percent of the stories I read on this site.
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Anonymous09/20/09
d ^_^ b
Anxiously awaiting the next installment of this story.
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Anonymous10/13/09
Didn't want to loose her boyfriend??
No girl is going to fuck and suck her brother and still worry about a boyfriend it was a good story till then.
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Anonymous10/27/09
Nice one
the person saying it's unrealistic for them to share a bed when fighting so much doesn't know what they are talking about. I speak from experience there.... great story :)
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Anonymous11/01/09
strange
it seems to me that if they were fighting as much as you say that he would have told his parents that he would only go if he could bring a tent and sleep outside as far away from his bitchy sister keep it realistic please
Even if others did not.I wish that I had a brother with whom I could relate like that. On the other hand I have a boy-friend as well as a husband, so who am I to complain?
Even though the content is about incest, the writing feels very genuine and the relationship very cute, which reminds me a lot of my girlfriend and I, so the incest isn't even needed in the story to make it work. Good job.
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Anonymous10/31/10
honest opinions please
how about giving honest opinions how do you expect the writers to improve if keep giving kiss ass comments only two real opinions here the rest are just kissing ass UNREALISTIC and STRANGE have it right this belongs in the twilight zone
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Anonymous01/03/14
Not bad
Not bad writing but psychologically improbable. The sister behaves very erratically. The way she treats him after the first two nights is improbable. She pretends not to remember that anything happened. She treats him like shit—and then she's suddenly horny. This could be worked out by having her simply ask him to be quiet around mum and dad.
So, HAS she given up her boyfriend or is she just a slut?
There are an over size group who don't have the ballocks to sign their name nor submit any possible thing so that we can gauge their abilities, if any. rather wish they would 'f' off.
To Seawater1 I for one liked that and enjoyed the possibilities of detection.
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Anonymous05/08/14
ok but...
I think it's a good story but this is the second bit of your work that I have read and both end with the siblings getting caught.
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Anonymous05/15/14
Good.....
To the previous comment. I have read a few stories by this author and yes in two or three the siblings get caught......but that's life. My older sister and I began messing together when she was 17 and I was 14. Just touching at first then going further. Within a month we were lovers. We got bolder and began to take chances, thinking if we hadn't been caught yet we would never be caught. After a couple of years we got complacent and we did get found out. That's what happens in life. More believable than most stories on this site because it reflects what truly happens.
English
Very good work
Succinct, self-contained and well-written. I like the flow, the slow build-up of excitement without erasing their prior adversarial relationship. Very enjoyable.
Outstanding
Very well done!!
Excellent
I have to admit the "Me and Kate" instead of "Kate and I" was somewhat distracting, but the story was so good, I was willing to ignore them.
There are so many ways this story can go. Please continue. LD
unrealistic
you really expect us to believe that even though they are fighting they would be willing to share a bed after the first night he would have slept on the floor to get away from her keep it realistic and believable please this isn't the twilight zone
Hell yes!
I loved it! I especially enjoyed the surprise ending, with Grandpa catching them in the act.
Excellent story and totally believable
Don't listen to the reader who says it's unrealistic. People fight all the time as a way of hiding their true feelings. That's what I interpreted it as, and as such, I thought it was more believable than ninety percent of the stories I read on this site.
d ^_^ b
Anxiously awaiting the next installment of this story.
Didn't want to loose her boyfriend??
No girl is going to fuck and suck her brother and still worry about a boyfriend it was a good story till then.
Nice one
the person saying it's unrealistic for them to share a bed when fighting so much doesn't know what they are talking about. I speak from experience there.... great story :)
strange
it seems to me that if they were fighting as much as you say that he would have told his parents that he would only go if he could bring a tent and sleep outside as far away from his bitchy sister keep it realistic please
I enjoyed this story
Even if others did not.I wish that I had a brother with whom I could relate like that. On the other hand I have a boy-friend as well as a husband, so who am I to complain?
Great story
Even though the content is about incest, the writing feels very genuine and the relationship very cute, which reminds me a lot of my girlfriend and I, so the incest isn't even needed in the story to make it work. Good job.
honest opinions please
how about giving honest opinions how do you expect the writers to improve if keep giving kiss ass comments only two real opinions here the rest are just kissing ass UNREALISTIC and STRANGE have it right this belongs in the twilight zone
Not bad
Not bad writing but psychologically improbable. The sister behaves very erratically. The way she treats him after the first two nights is improbable. She pretends not to remember that anything happened. She treats him like shit—and then she's suddenly horny. This could be worked out by having her simply ask him to be quiet around mum and dad.
So, HAS she given up her boyfriend or is she just a slut?
NB: It's 'sneak,' not 'sneek.' Keep writing.
Sonja in San Mateo
As always.
There are an over size group who don't have the ballocks to sign their name nor submit any possible thing so that we can gauge their abilities, if any. rather wish they would 'f' off.
To Seawater1 I for one liked that and enjoyed the possibilities of detection.
ok but...
I think it's a good story but this is the second bit of your work that I have read and both end with the siblings getting caught.
Good.....
To the previous comment. I have read a few stories by this author and yes in two or three the siblings get caught......but that's life. My older sister and I began messing together when she was 17 and I was 14. Just touching at first then going further. Within a month we were lovers. We got bolder and began to take chances, thinking if we hadn't been caught yet we would never be caught. After a couple of years we got complacent and we did get found out. That's what happens in life. More believable than most stories on this site because it reflects what truly happens.
Good
I enjoyed this story and want to read more.
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