no... You are not a bad person... sounds like she was rambling again... talking nonstop... avoiding the wetness between her thighs...
I enjoyed the twist at the end of this even more than I enjoyed the whole poem.
You're not bad, you're just written that way.
that last line. Damn dude, that just killed me. Here I was feeling all gushy, and then that, what a twist.
Hahahahahaha... matching you up at both ends, eh? Lolz (I would say the answer is “yes”, in that equation anyway.)
love your honesty
I vote "no"
For some reason I think this Poem would be more suited in the 'Non-Erotic' section, don't get me wrong that's not a bad thing, I prefer to read 'non-Erotic' Poems, I just Clicked on this section out of curiosity to see what kinds of perverted "'Poems' would be Uploaded on hare. It is good length too, not too short and not too long either, right in there in the Goldilocks Zone.
The only Complaint I have about your poem was your last two or three words, they don't fit any where in your poem. Had you have taken it out it would have made not only a much better poem but also it would have been simply a poem about not wanting to raise a child in a bad situation ie giving that child the best chance that he has at life, and NOT about giving a child their best chance at life AND fucking some one. A female.
But all and all keep going. You are doing a good job. But I think you could do better.
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