I thought the writing was good, and the content of the story was very good. A sweet loving story that made me wish that he could have found some way to continue the affair with his mystery woman.Thanks for the good read and hope to see more soon...........Rich
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Anonymous08/03/09
everybody isn't happy with your writing that life
keep yourself happy and fuck the rest.good job of writing this story.
Ok, the story was good and writing was good too. Though there were still few mistakes, but it didn't bother me. I think you should've posted this in "Mature" Category. I know you gave your explanation why you posted it under this category, but I'd like to give you some tips. NEVER open your cards. Your last paragraph tells everything, I'm sure what will happen in next chapter. You should avoid such information. Keep writing, but keep infprmation about your next chapter a secret. Good job, thanks for the entertainment.
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Anonymous08/04/09
Very dramatic and erotic
Such detail only serves to generate heat . Well done for your first story ; don't stop writing .
that you eventually will tell us an incest tale. So far, it's good.
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Anonymous11/02/10
total waste of time
over a year since you posted this and no second chapter IF YOU ARE WRITING FOR YOURSELF THAT IS FINE BUT DO NOT POST IT IF YOU ARE WRITING FOR THE READERS THEN MAKE DAM SURE YOU FINISH IT AND THAT IT IS WRITTEN PROPERLY SHOW SOME RESPECT FOR YOUR WORK AND EVEN MORE RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND FINISH WHAT YOU START OR DON'T POST IT AT ALL
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Anonymous11/09/12
Hanging
You appeared to have stopped in mid=story. Otherwise, you showed great promise.
English
I must have been too involved with the story
I thought the writing was good, and the content of the story was very good. A sweet loving story that made me wish that he could have found some way to continue the affair with his mystery woman.Thanks for the good read and hope to see more soon...........Rich
everybody isn't happy with your writing that life
keep yourself happy and fuck the rest.good job of writing this story.
Good Story
Ok, the story was good and writing was good too. Though there were still few mistakes, but it didn't bother me. I think you should've posted this in "Mature" Category. I know you gave your explanation why you posted it under this category, but I'd like to give you some tips. NEVER open your cards. Your last paragraph tells everything, I'm sure what will happen in next chapter. You should avoid such information. Keep writing, but keep infprmation about your next chapter a secret. Good job, thanks for the entertainment.
Very dramatic and erotic
Such detail only serves to generate heat . Well done for your first story ; don't stop writing .
Excellent.
It would make a great story in any category. Thanks for the read.
I will trust...
that you eventually will tell us an incest tale. So far, it's good.
total waste of time
over a year since you posted this and no second chapter IF YOU ARE WRITING FOR YOURSELF THAT IS FINE BUT DO NOT POST IT IF YOU ARE WRITING FOR THE READERS THEN MAKE DAM SURE YOU FINISH IT AND THAT IT IS WRITTEN PROPERLY SHOW SOME RESPECT FOR YOUR WORK AND EVEN MORE RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND FINISH WHAT YOU START OR DON'T POST IT AT ALL
Hanging
You appeared to have stopped in mid=story. Otherwise, you showed great promise.
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