Trust Your Instincts

Interesting Story

Which shows off well the title. You have to trust your instincts and not the thoughts of other people. Well written as always. I am sure that there are a lot of readers who will decide that the protagonist is a cuckolded wimp...
Who knows, the author may have been fooled also-----
Thanks

Bruce 22 : clueless again

while it is NO surprise that a RAAC nazi like Bruce 22 would love this story no matter what happens he usually is not THIS obtuse. The Plots holes are just too damn big to get past.

RAAC- reconciliation at all costs

HUGE plots hole and inconsistencies Ruin it

With this author you never know what you are geting... one day a great story one day... not so much. The massive plot holes here just kill this story.

The ENTIRE premise is that the husband (Ray) and wife BOTH think ...ASSUME... Frank is Gay. Ray does NOT trust Frank but has NO factual basis to do so since Ray and his wife assume Frank is Gay.

Good premise.

But when Ray finds out Frank is NOT gay... which is DIRECTLY relvant to the MAIN thing conflict Ray and his wife have been arguing about for weeks... Ray somehow FORGETS to tell his wife... because she has a nice dress on??

I suppose that is vaguely possible. But that happens early in the week and the party is Saturday. So over the next 4-5 days Ray STILL cannot seem to tell his wife .

are you fucking kidding me!?!!?? Come on woodmanone you are betetr than this shit.

then evEn worse...you do it a 2nd time.

Ray comes across solid info that Frank is directly the cause of two martial affairs / near breaks ups.

Again this is DIRECTLY relvant to the story since the wife beelives Frank to be harmless and Ray is over reacting.

so when Ray finds out this CRITICAL information HOW does he NOT tell his wife? For Ray to say to his wife "you had to make up your own mind" -- is total crap. Suppose Ray found out that Frank was say a convicted murder... Would Ray NOT tell his wife?

Using the Gay angle in LW is a good premise. Having people's brains falling out of their skulls is NOT. A stupid contrived pathetically moronic story.

No Bruce 22 The husband is not a wimp. He is a however a MORON

Fascinating Comment

I wonder if the Anon below even realized that I was pointing out the ambiguities in the story (they are not holes but ambiguous sentences deliberately placed by the author). The fact it is RAAC or kick her to sidewalk extremism is irrelevant to the capacity to entertain with the story.

Last time I looked, according to specialists, about one-half of the known cheating incidents lead to reconciliation which means that the plot is demi-realistic. I do admit that apparently about half of the reconciliations lead to divorce.
But that would be another story. Dear Anon don't you want authors writing stories to amuse us? If not read the same
consequences tales everyday and ignore the new productions until Harry has vetted them for you... I love to reread consequences stories. Except for some well justified reconciliation, or it was not what it seemed stories they are the best! But I read anything...... If I do not think that the author shows promise, I do not comment..

I Liked It

Every marriage has someone that one of the partners doesn't like or trust, friend,co worker, neighbor, someone who is too friendly, concerned, around to much, whatever. How they deal with this, together or seperate can impact the marriage greatly. My wife and I delt with it together and watching her handle herself gave me a lot of trust in her, which added greatly to the enjoyment of our long and happy marriage. Thanks for the story.

Thanks

Woodmanone, as always a great story teller! from the first few sentences I was spellbound into the story. Thanks and keep writing more please. 'A'

Oh mi oh my

You might consider expanding your vocabulary to include the words heterophobia, metrosexual, bi-sexual and get to know their definitions well and use them in your stories. And that lets me know you're not what you pretend to be 'cause of the way you write your stories. What do I mean? I mean you hype the hell out of fems and put down males big time as in making the males stupid and dumb macho men and the fems beautiful and suave and feminist if not feminazies. GET OVER IT ! MOVE ON ! GET A LIFE !

nice work!

This is a good story. Plausible; uncommon, but plausible. To me, the set-up was well-written, and after that juncture, everything worked. There were a couple of plot surprises, but then... such is the nature of entertaining fiction. Nice work!
-- KK in Texas

Quirky

A very good story, WMO, with good lesson for either partner, man or woman, about trusting the Significant Other's character readings on their mutual acquaintances. However, I will never be able to watch the reruns of TV's Josh Randle (Steve Mcqueen with sawed off double barrelled shotgun at his side, saving the innocents, as does your Josh)without enjoying my new perspective on the possibilities of his sexual preference. Did you do that on purpose or just dredge up a name out of the depth of your memory? Whichever, you continue to do good work - Harry and my fellow Texan should have stayed in bed and not gotten up to disturb their day by reading.

Fun Story!

Well written story, I liked it a lot. Your character development here ranked at the top. I really did not want Jackie to cheat on Raymond, or for her to get hurt.
However, there were some minor inconsistencies that bothered me. Raymond would not tell her about the scandal at the hospital but couldn't wait to tell her what Josh had said about him after Franklin moved out. Why one w/o the other? If telling her what Josh said would prove his point, telling her about the hospital situation was even better. I also wondered why she did not know about it since she worked there.
Your Josh character was a little too over the top but very good anyway. If he were so wealthy, why did he room with Franklin, and why was he moving his own furniture?
Also, why was Jackie drinking at all if she knew she was pregnant? Furthermore, if Franklin had drugged her drink, she should have had blood taken for testing. Finally, she should have had her doctor check to see if the drugs had messed up her baby.
Why is it that Josh thought that because the estate was substantial it had to be crooked?
Last comment, more people look back with regret for the actions that they should not have taken than those who regret not taking illegal action.
I know that these are really minor, but I share them with you because I hope they help your writing in the future.
Thanks for sharing your story with us. Ttom

Fun, quirky, yes, but well written?

Many plot holes and characterization holes. Sorry. Reads like a soap.

Well actually I thought this was okay!

The wife possibly could have a little more understanding about what the husband was saying and warning her about. And in most marriages when someone has a date or a meeting with someone male or female the husband or wife normally tell their partner about it. Did the wife cheat? I don't think so. Was she perhaps a little naive? yes she probably was. But overall I like the story and I don't know if readers hadn't noticed but the story is set in the ROMANCE section NOT the cheating wife section, so different rules apply. Anyway Nice one Woodman keep the stories coming.

a stupid wife is hard to deal with

a husband and wife are suppose to be team,the wife wanted to be hardheaded.

Great writer

Fine story Woodmanone. Your writing is always interesting and often suspenceful. I wish we had more people with your talent.
60 year old George

As we put it here in India, "EK DAM FILMY"

Pen On Mate.
-SpawnKing

desreved all he got although the husband could of told jackie about him though

Some of these fellows just take themselves too seriously!

I thought it was a good story and pretty well written. Not only that, but I believe you are one of the better writers on this site. Keep doing your thing just like you've been doing it.

Excellent story! I rated it 5*****.

Poor Franklin. However, it doesn't seem likely that much could have happened in his room in such a short period of time. It seems to me like he would try to seduce her rather than rape her.

Gotta love Josh -

A well thought out tale and some very nice twists along the way - good fun to read only a couple of small holes that got filled in adequately -

Thank you very much -

Decisions, decisions

Re the comment made 8/5/11: you, sir, have not had your wife taken by a predator. I have, and have an ex-wife for that reason. I'm straight, but Woodman, your perceptions about who/what a gay man can be match my own experience. I've met "Franklin" many times in my life and understand how Jackie could be taken by force with the aid of coke and "Ex" in a drink. But the trail of decisions remains as written in history. Well said.

My hats off to you

It was a very good story...but one of the things I liked best can be summed up this way: Wanted: Dead or Alive starring Steve McQueen...

Boggled

Never figure out how you write stories where she made a promise broke it and it wasn't important,her guard should have been rock solid after she found out he was lying to her,think about it.
If she wasn't mentally challenged how would she possibly go to his room in a hotel with him in particular without knowing what he was up to.Makes no sense of any kind.
It seriously blows me away,I just read you are male over sixty and it seems impossible that person could miss such huge plot holes so obvious from a male point of view.

life goes on. I like it.

excellent story. I especially liked the revenge.
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com

Well Done

You put it all together for a complete good story. Good character building, solid story line, twists & turns and a solid smile good ending. Thanks for sharing. BK