The confrontaion scenes between mark and Marci are well down. But Mark comes across as kind of slow and a dim wit. If you think with your dick you usually ended up doing the wrong thing.
There was no RATIONAL reason WHY Mark would marry a dingbat like Marcie. She had never done anything at any time before the camp. She was a waste of human zygote.
She might be nice to fuck but MARRY?!
Mark did NOT deserve what she did to him but he did walk into like a fucking idiot.
As always well written and as always the good guy got the nice girl and and the evil woman got what she deserved. Keep the stories coming.
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Anonymous08/08/09
The quote from KK not the only
line plundered from the archives, the whole story is plagiarised, another rehashed and tired misogynistic pile of shit, where the 'manly hero', in this case a whiny dullard and control freak, manages to win a little plastic dolly to take home to MOMMY. Poor Sally. Lucky Marcie. Horrible crap.
Ohhh, I dunno.............I kind of liked it (^_^)
I'm still trying to figure out where the line:
line plundered from the archives, the whole story is plagiarised, another rehashed and tired misogynistic pile of shit, where the 'manly hero', in this case a whiny dullard and control freak, manages to win a little plastic dolly to take home to MOMMY
came from. Misogynistic means:
mi·sog·y·nis·tic (mĭ-sŏj'ə-nĭs'tĭk)
adj. Of or characterized by a hatred of women.
Not to gender characterize, but I've often seen this used by the ladies when they don't like the outcome of a story where a woman is setup to be the bad guy. And it is often used as the finial excuse for why women get a bad rap.
What is funny, is that it is a dual standard because the Anon didn't comment on Roger or Allen's character, you know the two guys in the story she was having sex with. Just that "Poor Marcie" was better off without a controlling Mark. You know, the guy in the story who wouldn't accept her lying, cheating, and slutting around on him. As a character in the story, Marcie knew that Mark wouldn't let her get a last fling. In the story he said that he knew that's what Roger was after, but she still lied to do it. You know, I still found it funny the Anon didn't comment on Sally's character. You know, the one with integrity who "fired" the trio and later ended up with Mark? What does that make her? And she dated him for months without using sex to cloud the issue, and he got to know her for her?
And the Anon comments that because Mark won't accept Marcie's cheating that this makes his character Misogynistic? Why doesn't his refusal to stay away from Marcie when Roger tells him to, and then he breaks his nose because he doesn't like being told what to do by men, make him misandrist as well?
God knows it makes the Anon below me that. Go figure.
And the line about not wanting her to have sex with other men, while they are engaged, makes him controlling? WOW! God I don't even know why we have marriages if being committed to each other means "only while I can see you watching me". I'm kinda of wondering about the Anon poster who said this now........
While I do too admit that Mark seemed weak, I have to agree on some points. After almost 20 years of marriage some of the things in the story make sense. Sorry, but they do, and I've seen more than one male get stupid when women are involved and do things that comment sense wouldn't normally suggest. Why? Because most often they want to appear loving and supportive. But that is just common sense taking a back seat when they do. I bet if we all think about a few males we know, we all know a few that have done similar things. You know, where you friends can see your making a mistake with the ladies, but they don't?
But at least he rectified it. His character didn't rationalize it away so that they could stay together. And if you care enough about someone to marry them (and maybe he was rationalizing the way she was because she was pretty enough that he wasn't seeing the forest for the trees) that a deep betrayal would make you put off being near the opposite sex. Marcie's character had no redeeming value, but I know MALES as well as Females that both fit in this category. It not exclusive to just one sex or the other.
And personally as far as if it is plagiarized or not depends on the author. Just last week someone wrote a story about a wife who bragged to her friends that when she had sex with her small dicked husband she had to pretend it was her large dicked ex-boyfriend to get through it, and after her husband left her she decided to get her "vagina" sewn smaller so she could feel her husband again. Everyone was talking about how that was a new and different twist, and I read a similar story by J.Boswell called "Cock Crazy Wife" that was pretty similar to this premise. So it wasn't a new twist for me.
It's not like there are a lot of infinite ideas out there, so some premises are going to be reused. Specially if they are in the same story catagory. Personally, besides the KK reference I don't see a similarity, but that just means I've not read the same story you might have, so personally I liked it because it was new to me.
I liked it woodmanone. In it, I actually saw two different buddies I know, who made the same mistakes, but one actually married then divorced, and the other didn't, but they were both blinded it by the attractiveness of the ladies. They should have found girls with more substance. They are out there, guys just need to pay more attention some times. (^_^)
In a way this is a story about profiling and I do believe we all have moments when we connect one descriptive noun with a classificatory noun! I agree that our hero sounded like a real normal stumbling male who could not believe he had found first trouble and then love. Life goes on...
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Anonymous08/08/09
Good story, one problem
They were living together, were engaged, had a commitment to each other, but his statement was they werent married and he couldnt order her not to go. Hell if they were married he couldnt order her not to go, that is something he can request, tell her, ask, and give her alternatives. What he should have said was something like this, if you go over my objections I will consider that your request to break the engagement, end our commitment to each other, and that you are moving out into another place to live. I dont want that but if your choice is to go against what I feel so strongly about that is what needs to be done. You arent ordering her or forcing her not to go. You are giving her the alternatives that will occur if she does go, then it is her free choice. This wasnt a wild fling before marriage this was a well arranged summer long affair with a man she previously was involved with and must have been keeping continous communication with over time. Put another way, she was carrying on a long term affair with both Roger and Allen. Trash is trash, you always throw out the trash. By the way why do people go into Psych, not because its easy, its because they are trying to solve their own problems.
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Anonymous08/08/09
Got to comment on the poor Marcie bit
Mark was controlling? In what way, he attmepted to talk her out of going and she went over his objections. There is nothing controlling in that in fact it is a bit wimpish. Marcie was as protrayed a very round heeled slut who arranged for herself a summer romance inspite of living off a man, with a man, and was exclusive as she was engaged. The person writing this garbage was as mentally off as poor Marcie, then again maybe it is Marcie trying to dress herself as something other than a mentally off HIV palace that likes to fuck others and show their hatred for the persont hey say they love. The real question that is never answered in this story is why does she hate Mark so much she does this to harm him both short and long term.
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Anonymous08/08/09
How could he have not known??
The only thing that "saves" this story from being a fantasy is that I have known guys that dense. I do think that most men would have investigated the phony girlfriends to see if it was true. As the author, you planted this doubt in our minds but didn't follow through with it. It was a fun story and I liked the ending. Thanks for sharing. Ttom
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Anonymous08/08/09
Couldn't relate....
....to the characters,not enough development.Pistolpackinpete
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Anonymous08/08/09
OK. but...
1) If Mark is controlling, then what is Marcie, who's living with him but makes plans to be away for the whole summer without mentioning it to him?
2) If he was going up every Sunday and Sally knew this -- "When you came up to see Marcie, you guys were so loving with each other." -- then the phone conversation makes no sense at all. If they were so loving with each other, why would she think they were having problems?
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Anonymous08/08/09
Great story
And some of the previous comments seemed to have come from other Psychology Nuts.Loved the bit about Adam not being driven from the Garden of Eden.
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Anonymous08/08/09
Sally should run from this clown
it's obvious that he has some serious agner and resentment issues and calling women "devil's spawn" because his fiancee fucked a couple of guys??? Seriously...he needs help, professional help...and a white coat and rubber room until he can actually be civil. You don't fight everyone just because you're pissed off...that sovles nothing.
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Anonymous08/08/09
good
finally someone writes what does happen everyday to someone and how they get on with their lives, no revenge just get out of my face you liar, no getting drunk for a week and running around to get even.
This story was repetitive, predictable and totally lacking of any element of suspense. Every action of the characters was telegraphed. For example, as soon as you mentioned Sally I knew she and Mark would end up together.
As for Marcie, it came as no surprise that she was with her old boyfriend at the camp. You implied as much up until that point in the story. Even having her sexually involved with both Roger and Allen came as no surprise.
You have written enough stories now that you should have improved, yet this story is a throwback. You are still snatching snippets from other stories and crafting one big cliché. This story is not memorable in any respect.
For example, you have Marice repeatedly calling Mark after the breakup. Why? Since this woman had all the material advantages she desired, why was she ever with Mark? What did Mark offer her emotionally, spiritually or materially that would make her want to salvage their relationship? Because you never told us this, her calling after the breakup was just one more cliché without meaning.
It might have been more interesting if Marcie had tried to take revenge upon Mark for breaking the engagement. That would have fit with her supposed self-centered personality. Instead, you reverted to the cliché so often used in other stories.
Even your confrontation was a big dud. When Mark confronts both Roger and Allen it would have made for a better story if they had kicked his ass. At least then the story would have ceased being so damn predictable!
And why was there a need to inject the father into the story at the end? The father had no relationship with Mark. Why explain anything to this man? Isn't Marcie an adult? Since when does her daddy have to plead her cause to her ex-fiancée?
There are also two other structural issue that I have with all of your stories. Why do you feel it necessary to give the names, weights, heights and sometimes ages, of the couple in the first few paragraphs of every story? Can you not divulge those over time in the prose? You are permitted to describe your characters at any point(s) you want, we don't need to be given this info like it were a police report.
And last, it bothers me that you sign off with this “Life goes on” tag. The Wanderer, aka Denham Forrest uses that tag. Can you not come up with one of your own? Why copy another author's closing? Then again, your whole story reads like a copy.
I came up with the closing "Life Goes On" for my stories some time ago now. Mainly because, after spending my time creating a story's characters in my minds eye; I could see no point in killing the buggers off with the words "The End."
Many people have asked me why I close my stories with those words, and I always tell them that the characters lives do go on inside my head. I've even taken to reusing the same characters in other stories; so even for the readers, the characters lives can go on.
I also have spent a large proportion of my time encouraging new authors to write, then "post and be damned!" As they all to often are here on Lit!
It is to my great pleasure, that several writers have come to see the light, and are now following suit by using the same close on their tales of woe.
I don't judge others writing skills. I either enjoy what I read, or I don't, and I certainly would never stand in judgement, or make public comment about them.
Whatever, whether I enjoy their stories or not, I take an authors use of the same closing phrase, as a personal compliment. DC.
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Anonymous12/23/09
unexpected raimbow
why not, tounge-in-cheek, tell marcie his last fling would be had; before they did anything? her response would have been interesting. a sally is a wounderful thing, in so many ways.
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Anonymous12/23/09
TERoss really missed the mark on this
Almost all things in life are bits and pieces and almost always telegraphed ahead if one is looking for it. This was a good story of a worthless female being cast aside. Most women like most men are really the devils spawn and try to act like it. By the way DF I am 70 and I have used the line life goes on for almost 55 years. No one needs to waste time on trash, that girl wasnt trash she was compost. Allen and Roger both needed to have their clocks cleaned by that could easily be done in a quiet noninterference environment somewhat anonymously.
Found the tale one worth the telling. I have to agree that Reynolds wasn't the sharpest tack in the box but no one deserves that. The ending was a little contrived but still within parameters. Good job
I've read your story for the 2nd time, however this time I read the footnote and your "stealing" from KK, I'll tell you what stealing is:
When a philosophy teacher is reading entire paragraphs from a Simone de Beauvoir book as if it were his own, this book was not on the reading list, so he thought he could get away with it. This happened 40 years ago in Belgium.
I really appreciate your honesty and you can understand why.
I recall having read a story comparable to yours; however, I did not realize it had been authored by KK who is/was one of my favorite authors. I don't think KK posts articles in this site anymore. And I didn't think that he was from Texas as I gained the rather clear impression he was either from the greater Atlanta area or southern California from the detailed knowledge he had of these regions in his writings. He also seemed to know the Chicago region exceedingly well. I enjoy your stories as well and I recall that in one particular story you showed substantial knowledge of southern California (Long Beach) in addition to your native Arizona and several other areas. location of stories somehow seems very important me to. Please keep writing your stories and posting them here.
It's a great day when a man gets rid of a cheating slut and meets a woman who is faithful. Reminds me of an old "Chicago" tune from 1989. I believe it's called "If She Would Have Been Faithful." Check it out.
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Anonymous02/14/15
Re: Anon 1/1/15 Below
Inane and incomperent blubber? There are plenty of cuckold and shit stained cocks sucking stories for you to read and enjoy if you just learn to use the search function. The score of this story is just fine, your IQ, not so much.
I like it when cheaters lose and non-cheaters win. This guy dumped the lying cheater and didn't care about the why, the excuses, etc. She cheated so he dumped her and moved on. Thank you for a good story.
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Anonymous09/05/15
devil spawn
your writing is good but the contents are not.
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com
This was too shallow and sophomoric for my taste. I look for stories with some meat to them. This had two shallow skeletons with pretty much nothing else.
English
Enjoyed It
I don't think you can really appriciate a good partner unless you had a bad one. thanks for the story.
Not that good
The confrontaion scenes between mark and Marci are well down. But Mark comes across as kind of slow and a dim wit. If you think with your dick you usually ended up doing the wrong thing.
There was no RATIONAL reason WHY Mark would marry a dingbat like Marcie. She had never done anything at any time before the camp. She was a waste of human zygote.
She might be nice to fuck but MARRY?!
Mark did NOT deserve what she did to him but he did walk into like a fucking idiot.
Nice one Woodman
As always well written and as always the good guy got the nice girl and and the evil woman got what she deserved. Keep the stories coming.
The quote from KK not the only
line plundered from the archives, the whole story is plagiarised, another rehashed and tired misogynistic pile of shit, where the 'manly hero', in this case a whiny dullard and control freak, manages to win a little plastic dolly to take home to MOMMY. Poor Sally. Lucky Marcie. Horrible crap.
Ohhh, I dunno.............I kind of liked it (^_^)
I'm still trying to figure out where the line:
line plundered from the archives, the whole story is plagiarised, another rehashed and tired misogynistic pile of shit, where the 'manly hero', in this case a whiny dullard and control freak, manages to win a little plastic dolly to take home to MOMMY
came from. Misogynistic means:
mi·sog·y·nis·tic (mĭ-sŏj'ə-nĭs'tĭk)
adj. Of or characterized by a hatred of women.
Not to gender characterize, but I've often seen this used by the ladies when they don't like the outcome of a story where a woman is setup to be the bad guy. And it is often used as the finial excuse for why women get a bad rap.
What is funny, is that it is a dual standard because the Anon didn't comment on Roger or Allen's character, you know the two guys in the story she was having sex with. Just that "Poor Marcie" was better off without a controlling Mark. You know, the guy in the story who wouldn't accept her lying, cheating, and slutting around on him. As a character in the story, Marcie knew that Mark wouldn't let her get a last fling. In the story he said that he knew that's what Roger was after, but she still lied to do it. You know, I still found it funny the Anon didn't comment on Sally's character. You know, the one with integrity who "fired" the trio and later ended up with Mark? What does that make her? And she dated him for months without using sex to cloud the issue, and he got to know her for her?
And the Anon comments that because Mark won't accept Marcie's cheating that this makes his character Misogynistic? Why doesn't his refusal to stay away from Marcie when Roger tells him to, and then he breaks his nose because he doesn't like being told what to do by men, make him misandrist as well?
God knows it makes the Anon below me that. Go figure.
And the line about not wanting her to have sex with other men, while they are engaged, makes him controlling? WOW! God I don't even know why we have marriages if being committed to each other means "only while I can see you watching me". I'm kinda of wondering about the Anon poster who said this now........
While I do too admit that Mark seemed weak, I have to agree on some points. After almost 20 years of marriage some of the things in the story make sense. Sorry, but they do, and I've seen more than one male get stupid when women are involved and do things that comment sense wouldn't normally suggest. Why? Because most often they want to appear loving and supportive. But that is just common sense taking a back seat when they do. I bet if we all think about a few males we know, we all know a few that have done similar things. You know, where you friends can see your making a mistake with the ladies, but they don't?
But at least he rectified it. His character didn't rationalize it away so that they could stay together. And if you care enough about someone to marry them (and maybe he was rationalizing the way she was because she was pretty enough that he wasn't seeing the forest for the trees) that a deep betrayal would make you put off being near the opposite sex. Marcie's character had no redeeming value, but I know MALES as well as Females that both fit in this category. It not exclusive to just one sex or the other.
And personally as far as if it is plagiarized or not depends on the author. Just last week someone wrote a story about a wife who bragged to her friends that when she had sex with her small dicked husband she had to pretend it was her large dicked ex-boyfriend to get through it, and after her husband left her she decided to get her "vagina" sewn smaller so she could feel her husband again. Everyone was talking about how that was a new and different twist, and I read a similar story by J.Boswell called "Cock Crazy Wife" that was pretty similar to this premise. So it wasn't a new twist for me.
It's not like there are a lot of infinite ideas out there, so some premises are going to be reused. Specially if they are in the same story catagory. Personally, besides the KK reference I don't see a similarity, but that just means I've not read the same story you might have, so personally I liked it because it was new to me.
I liked it woodmanone. In it, I actually saw two different buddies I know, who made the same mistakes, but one actually married then divorced, and the other didn't, but they were both blinded it by the attractiveness of the ladies. They should have found girls with more substance. They are out there, guys just need to pay more attention some times. (^_^)
-Risq
Very human characters
In a way this is a story about profiling and I do believe we all have moments when we connect one descriptive noun with a classificatory noun! I agree that our hero sounded like a real normal stumbling male who could not believe he had found first trouble and then love. Life goes on...
Good story, one problem
They were living together, were engaged, had a commitment to each other, but his statement was they werent married and he couldnt order her not to go. Hell if they were married he couldnt order her not to go, that is something he can request, tell her, ask, and give her alternatives. What he should have said was something like this, if you go over my objections I will consider that your request to break the engagement, end our commitment to each other, and that you are moving out into another place to live. I dont want that but if your choice is to go against what I feel so strongly about that is what needs to be done. You arent ordering her or forcing her not to go. You are giving her the alternatives that will occur if she does go, then it is her free choice. This wasnt a wild fling before marriage this was a well arranged summer long affair with a man she previously was involved with and must have been keeping continous communication with over time. Put another way, she was carrying on a long term affair with both Roger and Allen. Trash is trash, you always throw out the trash. By the way why do people go into Psych, not because its easy, its because they are trying to solve their own problems.
Got to comment on the poor Marcie bit
Mark was controlling? In what way, he attmepted to talk her out of going and she went over his objections. There is nothing controlling in that in fact it is a bit wimpish. Marcie was as protrayed a very round heeled slut who arranged for herself a summer romance inspite of living off a man, with a man, and was exclusive as she was engaged. The person writing this garbage was as mentally off as poor Marcie, then again maybe it is Marcie trying to dress herself as something other than a mentally off HIV palace that likes to fuck others and show their hatred for the persont hey say they love. The real question that is never answered in this story is why does she hate Mark so much she does this to harm him both short and long term.
How could he have not known??
The only thing that "saves" this story from being a fantasy is that I have known guys that dense. I do think that most men would have investigated the phony girlfriends to see if it was true. As the author, you planted this doubt in our minds but didn't follow through with it. It was a fun story and I liked the ending. Thanks for sharing. Ttom
Couldn't relate....
....to the characters,not enough development.Pistolpackinpete
OK. but...
1) If Mark is controlling, then what is Marcie, who's living with him but makes plans to be away for the whole summer without mentioning it to him?
2) If he was going up every Sunday and Sally knew this -- "When you came up to see Marcie, you guys were so loving with each other." -- then the phone conversation makes no sense at all. If they were so loving with each other, why would she think they were having problems?
Great story
And some of the previous comments seemed to have come from other Psychology Nuts.Loved the bit about Adam not being driven from the Garden of Eden.
Sally should run from this clown
it's obvious that he has some serious agner and resentment issues and calling women "devil's spawn" because his fiancee fucked a couple of guys??? Seriously...he needs help, professional help...and a white coat and rubber room until he can actually be civil. You don't fight everyone just because you're pissed off...that sovles nothing.
good
finally someone writes what does happen everyday to someone and how they get on with their lives, no revenge just get out of my face you liar, no getting drunk for a week and running around to get even.
Well Said
Ripping good yarn.
Not bad.
Enjoyed this one. At least we still get some stories where the main male character is not a creampie-loving wimp . . . Thanks for writing.
Repetitive, predicatable, and lacking
This story was repetitive, predictable and totally lacking of any element of suspense. Every action of the characters was telegraphed. For example, as soon as you mentioned Sally I knew she and Mark would end up together.
As for Marcie, it came as no surprise that she was with her old boyfriend at the camp. You implied as much up until that point in the story. Even having her sexually involved with both Roger and Allen came as no surprise.
You have written enough stories now that you should have improved, yet this story is a throwback. You are still snatching snippets from other stories and crafting one big cliché. This story is not memorable in any respect.
For example, you have Marice repeatedly calling Mark after the breakup. Why? Since this woman had all the material advantages she desired, why was she ever with Mark? What did Mark offer her emotionally, spiritually or materially that would make her want to salvage their relationship? Because you never told us this, her calling after the breakup was just one more cliché without meaning.
It might have been more interesting if Marcie had tried to take revenge upon Mark for breaking the engagement. That would have fit with her supposed self-centered personality. Instead, you reverted to the cliché so often used in other stories.
Even your confrontation was a big dud. When Mark confronts both Roger and Allen it would have made for a better story if they had kicked his ass. At least then the story would have ceased being so damn predictable!
And why was there a need to inject the father into the story at the end? The father had no relationship with Mark. Why explain anything to this man? Isn't Marcie an adult? Since when does her daddy have to plead her cause to her ex-fiancée?
There are also two other structural issue that I have with all of your stories. Why do you feel it necessary to give the names, weights, heights and sometimes ages, of the couple in the first few paragraphs of every story? Can you not divulge those over time in the prose? You are permitted to describe your characters at any point(s) you want, we don't need to be given this info like it were a police report.
And last, it bothers me that you sign off with this “Life goes on” tag. The Wanderer, aka Denham Forrest uses that tag. Can you not come up with one of your own? Why copy another author's closing? Then again, your whole story reads like a copy.
Life Goes On
I came up with the closing "Life Goes On" for my stories some time ago now. Mainly because, after spending my time creating a story's characters in my minds eye; I could see no point in killing the buggers off with the words "The End."
Many people have asked me why I close my stories with those words, and I always tell them that the characters lives do go on inside my head. I've even taken to reusing the same characters in other stories; so even for the readers, the characters lives can go on.
I also have spent a large proportion of my time encouraging new authors to write, then "post and be damned!" As they all to often are here on Lit!
It is to my great pleasure, that several writers have come to see the light, and are now following suit by using the same close on their tales of woe.
I don't judge others writing skills. I either enjoy what I read, or I don't, and I certainly would never stand in judgement, or make public comment about them.
Whatever, whether I enjoy their stories or not, I take an authors use of the same closing phrase, as a personal compliment. DC.
unexpected raimbow
why not, tounge-in-cheek, tell marcie his last fling would be had; before they did anything? her response would have been interesting. a sally is a wounderful thing, in so many ways.
TERoss really missed the mark on this
Almost all things in life are bits and pieces and almost always telegraphed ahead if one is looking for it. This was a good story of a worthless female being cast aside. Most women like most men are really the devils spawn and try to act like it. By the way DF I am 70 and I have used the line life goes on for almost 55 years. No one needs to waste time on trash, that girl wasnt trash she was compost. Allen and Roger both needed to have their clocks cleaned by that could easily be done in a quiet noninterference environment somewhat anonymously.
Enjoyed the story
Found the tale one worth the telling. I have to agree that Reynolds wasn't the sharpest tack in the box but no one deserves that. The ending was a little contrived but still within parameters. Good job
Plagiarism and honesty.
I've read your story for the 2nd time, however this time I read the footnote and your "stealing" from KK, I'll tell you what stealing is:
When a philosophy teacher is reading entire paragraphs from a Simone de Beauvoir book as if it were his own, this book was not on the reading list, so he thought he could get away with it. This happened 40 years ago in Belgium.
I really appreciate your honesty and you can understand why.
Good story. Standard on the plot
I recall having read a story comparable to yours; however, I did not realize it had been authored by KK who is/was one of my favorite authors. I don't think KK posts articles in this site anymore. And I didn't think that he was from Texas as I gained the rather clear impression he was either from the greater Atlanta area or southern California from the detailed knowledge he had of these regions in his writings. He also seemed to know the Chicago region exceedingly well. I enjoy your stories as well and I recall that in one particular story you showed substantial knowledge of southern California (Long Beach) in addition to your native Arizona and several other areas. location of stories somehow seems very important me to. Please keep writing your stories and posting them here.
wat a spoilt sel centred slut . i would of battered all 3 of them and i never hit women but i dont class her as one . he got right woman in the end
that's how you handle a spoiled slut
take no shit, listen to no lies and move on.
Great read well written -
The characters all seemed very realistic and like people I would see on any normal day -
The story flowed predictably but very well - and I liked the way you handled her and them as well as his salvation from monkhood lol.
Great Tale
It's a great day when a man gets rid of a cheating slut and meets a woman who is faithful. Reminds me of an old "Chicago" tune from 1989. I believe it's called "If She Would Have Been Faithful." Check it out.
Re: Anon 1/1/15 Below
Inane and incomperent blubber? There are plenty of cuckold and shit stained cocks sucking stories for you to read and enjoy if you just learn to use the search function. The score of this story is just fine, your IQ, not so much.
*****
COTIS is a leg time acronym.
Good tale.
COTUS - bloody iPad spell modifier.
Liked IT!
I like it when cheaters lose and non-cheaters win. This guy dumped the lying cheater and didn't care about the why, the excuses, etc. She cheated so he dumped her and moved on. Thank you for a good story.
devil spawn
your writing is good but the contents are not.
Ed Grocott
edgrocott@gmail.com
Not one of your better stories
This was too shallow and sophomoric for my taste. I look for stories with some meat to them. This had two shallow skeletons with pretty much nothing else.
*****
Reread. COTUS does have a ring to it.
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