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It's a start
We NEED more pantyhose fans and writers. I'm glad to see you, but you have got to get your stories tighter. No developement, no characters, and, well to be honest, no followable narative. I really lost interest early on.
Keep trying thought.
We Need More Pantyhose Stories But Well Written
Fan, you obviously have a huge pantyhose fetish but you are obviously very inexperienced. To start with pantyhose are not “it” they are “they” ie a ‘pair of pantyhose’. You also need to learn about the parts of pantyhose: the feet, the legs, the gusset and describe them correctly are they sheer-to-the-waist, control-top etc. You also need to get a few more adjectives to describe them: diaphanous, silky, gossamer, translucent…you get the picture. You also need to develop you stories a bit better; the plot doesn’t have to be completely believable; but it does need to be credible. Don’t race straight to the sex; build up some tension, get us aroused before you get us off. Don’t stop writing; it takes a long time to become a good pantyhose story teller; look at my earlier stuff and how clumsy it was compared to my more recent stories.
Keep writing,
xxx
Michele
Laughable
I hate it when people post unhelpful critics, but I'm going to have to do like wise I'm sorry. THAT WAS AWFUL, I just had to tell you I thought this was the worst story I have ever read on here. Your only saving grace was that it was short.
I agree with the other two that we need more pantyhose writers, but you are obviously NOT cut out for this. Quit while you are behind.
STUNK!
Joo Joo bee
You lie, bitch.
Pantyhose Heat!
This story is another good example of how HOT pantyhose can be! Give us a sequel, especially with "the lesbian stuff", as you called it. Then, again, you can't have cheerleaders without some "muffin rubbing"!
part two
is there part two
mmmmm
pantyhose lover
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