Loved it - you had an interesting premise, some very snappy dialog, a few comic zingers, and very hot sex. I would just like it to be a little longer, or the start of a longer series. Very enjoyable read - keep going!
Could have made the story a bit longer (as well as their movie) with a little more mutual discovery of each others' bodies (foreplay), but since they only paid for their second semester with the movie, they DO still have six more semesters (or more, since she wanted to go into animal medicine, which takes longer than human medicine). You could make a series out of them making their own video series, perhaps making the last one a pregnancy-sex video, lactation and all! Take them on the road outdoors for the summer shoots, have them do some messy shoots, perhaps even having them get caught when their father purchases one of their videos online after they have graduated and incorporate him into the scene for a little DP with his daughter? Keep it goin'!
Should redo to get rid of the JoPa reference, but otherwise very nice. A little humor is something missing in many of the stories on this site, but it goes well here - and why not? Siblings are people, after all.
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Loved it - you had an interesting premise, some very snappy dialog, a few comic zingers, and very hot sex. I would just like it to be a little longer, or the start of a longer series. Very enjoyable read - keep going!
Good Bro-Sis set-up and action
I've been thinking of a story like this and here you've gone and written if for me. Good job. HOT!
Hot little tale!
Maybe a little unrealistic, but a good tale anyway. Thanks for your story.
Great job
Could have made the story a bit longer (as well as their movie) with a little more mutual discovery of each others' bodies (foreplay), but since they only paid for their second semester with the movie, they DO still have six more semesters (or more, since she wanted to go into animal medicine, which takes longer than human medicine). You could make a series out of them making their own video series, perhaps making the last one a pregnancy-sex video, lactation and all! Take them on the road outdoors for the summer shoots, have them do some messy shoots, perhaps even having them get caught when their father purchases one of their videos online after they have graduated and incorporate him into the scene for a little DP with his daughter? Keep it goin'!
Should redo to get rid of the JoPa reference, but otherwise very nice. A little humor is something missing in many of the stories on this site, but it goes well here - and why not? Siblings are people, after all.
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